Eternal Destiny

Ahahahaha, Monique's face. It's Joshua from the crossdressing play scene in Trails in The Sky. 8D

By the way, you should add Nihon Falcom to your credits for the face art. You credited Mack and others, but seemingly conveniently forgot to source the art. = v =

I figured I would try this just to see what it was like. My first impressions after like 15 seconds of playing (talked to everyone in the castle, examined the doors and such), is that your mapping needs work (all the rooms feel a little too empty for a castle), and that your grammar also needs work. I see various errors whenever I examine a door or talk to a random guard...you really need to have someone playtest your work. I also noticed that you start with all 4 party members, rather than just the two your supposed to have.

Guard at castle gate: you think you're bored after all them time. It should be this time, and how did the castle guard that is nowhere near the prince's room even know he was bored?

Other guard at castle gate: you better becareful if you're going out of the castle. First off, be careful should be spaced, and secondly, i read in your thread that he isn't supposed to leave the castle, so why is a guard letting him just waltz out.

When you examine the throne doors: I better ot bother mom right now. should be not.

This strikes me as odd as well, but I don't see how balagan got in the castle. Seems to me if hes always getting himself into trouble (even with just women), then sengals mother wouldn't exactly approve of them hanging out (except mayby on castle grounds, where she can keep an eye on them).

Anyways, despite all these errors, the mapping, and the...rather short opening cutscene, I did download it, and i'll see this run through to the end. Hopefully i'll run into a more gripping cutscene soon.

Edit: Apparently I can put the party members I'm not supposed to have in standby. I'll just do that as to not imbalance the game.

Edit 2: The dragon kingdom guards behind the castle say: I cannot let you pass because your mother will get worried. If she will get worried (past tense), it should be I cannot let you pass because your mother would get worried.

Edit 3. I cannot talk to the people in the stalls. Even if there not a shop, they can still say what they are selling, to imply there is an economy in play. Also, I cannot open the doors in town. Even something as simple as *locked* popping up is better than nothing.

Oh come on...a bug as soon as I hit confirm...fine *Edit 4*...I can walk under the red flower by the bottom left house. By under, I mean it looks like the flowers are floating above his head when I walk in certain spots. I should also mention the stairs there are unneeded. I do not see a cliff there at all.

Edit...5. I just fully explored the town and found a whopping 2 npcs to talk too (saving the pub for last). Despite you give the impression its a big town, all the houses cant be entered, the side paths that supposedly lead deeper into town cant be visited..and I feel like this game is revolving around the main char, and that an actual world is nonexistant.

Seriously...your cliffs are terrible. A wooden platform with stairs leading to it should not be able to be stepped on from the side...or look flat. Use a mapping tutorial or ask for help if you need it, same goes for your story. Ask for help on how to emulate an actual world in a game if you need to

An edit is needed for the pub...yep...edit 6 it is. .Man: Hey, there lad (comma unneeded), Have you heard of the mermaids and merman who live in Elia Bay? I hear that mermaids trick male sailors and when they feel the man feels comfortable with them they pull them down into the ocean and eat them like a shark. Mermen do the same only they trick the ladies! (first off...i feel like im reading a tounge twister here, secondly, why an exclamation for the ladies, but not the men? Its shocking they eat them in both cases is it not? Also, a lady in the pub doesnt speak.

The barkeep and guys in bandannas dont speak either. Hah, I didnt hit cancel yet, take that edit.

Alright...forget it., I am not posting anymore grammar mistakes! Have someone completely redo it for you.

Nww that I've experienced the area outside town, heres my comments. Battles are too easy, and you have various roads leading to virtually nowhere. I'm all for more areas to explore, sidepaths and all that, but dont put a road and then tell me either: A: Nothing appears when I go on it, and it doesnt take me to a new map or: B: You cannot go there yet. If I can't go there, at least put a signpost or somethin that tells me where each road leads.

Now as my journey comes to an end...I went outside town fo an area full of monsters than I one hit with normal attacks, and has various roads I can get past (except for one), which leads to yet another town (already?), and when I followed one of the various roads in town...I got warped into an area that traps me. I'm like trapped on top of a wall in a castle...when I didn't even see a castle in that town.

The name of the town is harwell, and the place it traps me is dragon castle. Thankfully the name places are in the menu, and i saved before getting trapped.

Edit: Just did another trip around town, and theres a bench i can walk on.

Went to harwell castle (why did the guards not speak..and let me waltz in...got the cutscene and teleported back to my castle...went back to harwell...and examined the throne doors. Game crashed saying couldnt find faceset drago. Also, if you try to go up the stairs, mary will still say she doesnt keep the map up there...even though mary is no longer with you.

Its good, very good, but the characters are very, un-interesting...

I can help elaborate for ichimaru on that. It's partly because the world you made doesn't have alot of npc, and doesn't really feel alive. In fact the towns feel rather deserted. The other thing is that the cutscenes are too short, and there isn't enough dialog to really make them interesting. It's an alright start if you havn't made any games, and a good chance to get valuable feedback for future projects.

I have a difficult time with that as well, one way is have a theme for every city. One city experienced an assassination attempt. Another (more small town) has a child that shines above the rest of the local population. One is getting ready for war. A new law is getting passed. There are lots of different possibilities with themes, and then you have the majority of the inhabitants talk about that theme. Always have a few that talk about the bigger picture, or don't, but that's one way to broaden the dialogue of the static, NPCs.

Looked at screen-shots, thought game looked nice so I downloaded. Will read information about your story after some in game experience. Kudos!

it freezes here for me after i beat the demon and go back to the castle.
someone wanna help me? ^_^