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Dialogue Teaser
- tpasmall
- 01/18/2013 04:09 PM
- 985 views
Below is a scene I have working on in which Marcus is reunited with his wife Amy, after 10 years of being shipwrecked on the island of Aliquam. This contains major spoilers, but I wanted to share a piece of what I was working on with everyone. Feedback is greatly appreciated.
(scene fades into Amy’s home)
Marcus: And that’s how I finally got back.
Amy: I’m so sorry, I...I’m...I just can’t believe you’re alive!
Marcus: Hey, it’s ok, I’m home now. It feels good to be home.
Amy: ...you’re so thin, can I make something for you? You must be starving!
Marcus: Ah, I’ll be alright. Seeing you again is nourishment enough for me.
Amy: *blushes* You always did know the right thing to say...
Marcus: Well, you always made it easy to.
Piper: Mommy, mommy!
(Piper and Conley walk in)
Amy: Yes, what is it Piper?
Piper: Conley threw a frog at me!
Conley: Did not!
Piper: Did to!
Amy: Conley, is that true?
Conley: No!
Amy: Conley, tell mommy the truth.
Conley: Ok...yes, but she called me a booger face first!
Amy: Is this true Piper?
Piper: ...yes...
Amy: You know we don’t call each other names, I want you to apologize to your brother.
Piper: ..sorry Conley...
Amy: And Conley, even if someone calls you a name, that doesn’t give you the right to throw frogs at them. Don't you think you should apologize to your sister?
Conley: ...sorry Piper...
Amy: Ok, thank you both, run along now.
Conley: Hey mister, that’s a cool bow! Are you a hunter?
Marcus: I am, and thank you. My father gave me this bow, he was a hunter too.
Conley: Cool! When I grow up, I want to be a hunter!
Marcus: Well, I’ll tell you what, you can have this.
Conley: Oh wow, an arrowhead! Thanks mister!
Marcus: You’re welcome, be careful with it now.
Piper: Hey! What about me?
Marcus: I’ve got something for you too.
Piper: A necklace! It’s so pretty!!
Marcus: And it will look especially pretty on you.
Piper: Thank you!!
Conley: Let’s go show dad!
Piper: Yeah!
(the kids run off)
Amy: ...you kept the necklace...
Marcus: Yeah, it helped remind me of you..so...
Amy: I got married.
Marcus: I thought you might have.
Amy: I would never...
Marcus: I know.
Amy: If I knew you were alive...
Marcus: I probably would have done the same thing.
Amy: I didn’t want to. It just kind of...happened. One day Clifford was just there. He took care of me. I was a mess.
Marcus: You don’t have to defend yourself, I understand.
Amy: I had to bury you. They had to pry me off your casket.
Marcus: There was a casket?
Amy: There is an entire memorial built to you, it’s at the pond, behind the house. King Magnus himself came for the service.
Marcus: What was inside?
Amy: Some clothes, a bow, arrows, anything that represented you.
Marcus: Ha, I guess that’d be about it.
(a knock at the door)
Amy: Come in!
(Faeroe enters)
Marcus: Were you looking for me Faeroe?
Faeroe: Actually, someone named Geoffrey Fulton is. Said he wanted to meet the man that everyone is talking about.
Marcus: Fulton eh? The name isn’t familiar, I guess I should find out what he wants.
Amy: It was great seeing you Marcus. I just want you to know, no matter what I’ll always love you.
Marcus: You too.
(Marcus turns to leave)
Amy: And Marcus...I’m really glad you’re alive.
Marcus: You too. *grins*
(scene fades into Caudine Manor)
Marcus: And that’s how I finally got back.
Amy: I’m so sorry, I...I’m...I just can’t believe you’re alive!
Marcus: Hey, it’s ok, I’m home now. It feels good to be home.
Amy: ...you’re so thin, can I make something for you? You must be starving!
Marcus: Ah, I’ll be alright. Seeing you again is nourishment enough for me.
Amy: *blushes* You always did know the right thing to say...
Marcus: Well, you always made it easy to.
Piper: Mommy, mommy!
(Piper and Conley walk in)
Amy: Yes, what is it Piper?
Piper: Conley threw a frog at me!
Conley: Did not!
Piper: Did to!
Amy: Conley, is that true?
Conley: No!
Amy: Conley, tell mommy the truth.
Conley: Ok...yes, but she called me a booger face first!
Amy: Is this true Piper?
Piper: ...yes...
Amy: You know we don’t call each other names, I want you to apologize to your brother.
Piper: ..sorry Conley...
Amy: And Conley, even if someone calls you a name, that doesn’t give you the right to throw frogs at them. Don't you think you should apologize to your sister?
Conley: ...sorry Piper...
Amy: Ok, thank you both, run along now.
Conley: Hey mister, that’s a cool bow! Are you a hunter?
Marcus: I am, and thank you. My father gave me this bow, he was a hunter too.
Conley: Cool! When I grow up, I want to be a hunter!
Marcus: Well, I’ll tell you what, you can have this.
Conley: Oh wow, an arrowhead! Thanks mister!
Marcus: You’re welcome, be careful with it now.
Piper: Hey! What about me?
Marcus: I’ve got something for you too.
Piper: A necklace! It’s so pretty!!
Marcus: And it will look especially pretty on you.
Piper: Thank you!!
Conley: Let’s go show dad!
Piper: Yeah!
(the kids run off)
Amy: ...you kept the necklace...
Marcus: Yeah, it helped remind me of you..so...
Amy: I got married.
Marcus: I thought you might have.
Amy: I would never...
Marcus: I know.
Amy: If I knew you were alive...
Marcus: I probably would have done the same thing.
Amy: I didn’t want to. It just kind of...happened. One day Clifford was just there. He took care of me. I was a mess.
Marcus: You don’t have to defend yourself, I understand.
Amy: I had to bury you. They had to pry me off your casket.
Marcus: There was a casket?
Amy: There is an entire memorial built to you, it’s at the pond, behind the house. King Magnus himself came for the service.
Marcus: What was inside?
Amy: Some clothes, a bow, arrows, anything that represented you.
Marcus: Ha, I guess that’d be about it.
(a knock at the door)
Amy: Come in!
(Faeroe enters)
Marcus: Were you looking for me Faeroe?
Faeroe: Actually, someone named Geoffrey Fulton is. Said he wanted to meet the man that everyone is talking about.
Marcus: Fulton eh? The name isn’t familiar, I guess I should find out what he wants.
Amy: It was great seeing you Marcus. I just want you to know, no matter what I’ll always love you.
Marcus: You too.
(Marcus turns to leave)
Amy: And Marcus...I’m really glad you’re alive.
Marcus: You too. *grins*
(scene fades into Caudine Manor)
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Despite being a spoiler I read it with great delight: so very emotional. And Marcus didn't act like some total jerk, but he could. I like how soft, gentle, and intelligent Marcus is portrayed.
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