Bronze Soul

kitty is pretty cool haha

Good character development/ideas! It's good to see three dimensional, filled out characters instead of flat, boring, mechanical speaking characters that you usually see

lol, but I mean characters that have no life to them, or speak with no variation. Example(I love examples)

Robot: First, we need to go up the path and turn right. Then, we must...

OR

Robot: Ugh, in order to get to our destination we need to follow this stupid path! Why is it sooo long? Ugh! Of course, as if it wasn't already hard enough, THEN we have to...

Which of those has more expression to it? I don't know why I'm telling this to you, you do a fantastic job with dialouge :)

Your welcome, I do try my hardest to help :)

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This is followed by another argument with Diana and Kitty.

I never understood the purpose behind the first argument. I'm okay with Diana and Kitty not liking each other, but the "fight" they have is completely stupid. It should have been more like:

Kitty: I'm not helping somebody who called me ugly!
Diana: Fine. I don't need your help. I'm wasting my time in this stupid cave anyway. Let's go, Brian.
Kitty: Brian? Did you say... Brian?
Diana: Now what?

Then Kitty can have it's speech about the Cave Paeter. Well, that's what I would have done.

I understand the fight cutscene thing. You may want to make it a little longer, or more interesting. When I first saw it, it happened so quickly that I didn't know what had really happened. I wouldn't delete it entirely, just improve it.