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A ton of changes in the story.
  • jomarcentermjm
  • Added: 09/24/2013 12:35 PM
  • Last updated: 12/07/2022 03:45 PM
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I didn't play the game so I can't do much else than guess what is going on.
But I believe the bell in the town is ringing since the town is in danger?

So I just made a sample of what may sound better.
"Didn’t you hear the bell?! The town is in chaos, we need to leave now!"

Other ways to put it, that is more close to what is in the current ddialogue.

"Didn’t you hear the bell?! They are telling us to leave the town!"

My English is by no means perfect. But I still think this would be a bit better^^

I think you should get someone who knows English grammar to help you, by checking and edit your dialogues.

Good luck.
I think the correct grammar would be "Didn't you hear the bell? They are warning us to leave now!"

If Cytha is unaware of the reason, and if she automatically connects the ringing of the bell as being a warning of danger stirring, she could perhaps say "Didn't you hear the bell? That signals a warning! I'm unsure what's happening, but come with me, we have to leave urgently!"

I'm not saying my English is any good here, but it's another example.
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If it were me, I'd have "Didn't you hear the bell? We need to get out of here!" Or, if the bell is ringing as they are talking, it would be "Don't you hear the bell? We need to get out of here!"
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