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The mission system is a WIP!
  • jomarcentermjm
  • Added: 02/24/2013 04:23 AM
  • Last updated: 12/02/2022 03:04 AM
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You really must work on your grammar and punctuation. If not, then no one will take your games seriously. Why would they? They can barely make out what you're saying. Plus, we have to read your dialogue to grasp what's going on.

I mean, this is readable and we understand what's needed of us, but it just looks too unprofessional and reduces the value of the overall project.
Grammar mistakes, grammar mistakes everywhere! Haha, really though, to improve this slightly try this:

- Money not received -
"Seems like that idiot isn't coming, and I'm getting tired of waiting for him, so can you please give him the money he was supposed to collect in my stead? Thanks in advance."

Objective - Find the idiot, and make sure he gets his money!

(Or something like that, lol)
In that one little message box after just a quick read I noticed... missing an "s", space before comma, capital after comma, three exclamation marks in the middle of sentence, no question mark.

I agree with Wyvernjack there - it's the little things that count :)
Going to take note on that grammar error. I really need to check everything before posting it, Instead of being too quick of posting some working in-game image.
- Looks like he didn't show up, and I am tired of waiting for him. Period.
- "Send the money", not sent.
- Put a question mark after instead.
- You don't need to put too many exclamation mark.

LOL You should update the screenshots as well. :P
author=Mr_Detective
- Looks like he didn't show up, and I am tired of waiting for him. Period.
- "Send the money", not sent.
- Put a question mark after instead.
- You don't need to put too many exclamation mark.

LOL You should update the screenshots as well. :P

Doing it right now but still didn't change for me.
author=jomarcenter
Doing it right now but still didn't change for me.
Easiest, and fastest way to update your screenies, is to slightly change the name of it beforehand, and then upload it to the site as the same image. (It's mostly for when changing something) :3
author=Sana
author=jomarcenter
Doing it right now but still didn't change for me.
Easiest, and fastest way to update your screenies, is to slightly change the name of it beforehand, and then upload it to the site as the same image. (It's mostly for when changing something) :3

Oh that why, Fixed :)
Marrend
Guardian of the Description Thread
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author=jomarcenter
Doing it right now but still didn't change for me.

Try hard-refreshing the screen with Ctrl-F5?

*Edit: The mission details should probably read:
"Seems like that idiot isn't coming, and I'm tired of waiting for him! I don't suppose you could find him, and collect what he owes me?"

They way it's phrased now, you're supposed to give him the money that he's supposed to collect for her? Or something? The phrasing is really weird!
author=Marrend
They way it's phrased now, you're supposed to give him the money that he's supposed to collect for her? Or something? The phrasing is really weird!
I didn't expect him to just copy-paste everything I said lol, so of course it's gonna look weird. :x
Well that mission will not be in the game anyway. I was only testing the script if it working or not.
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