Right, "In any event, I fear" doesn't sound great, maybe just : "I must attend to something...", just trying to help, i could be completely off. In any case, nice map, that red on the dark grey, also I love the sprites.
I feel she's too brusque honestly. I have the general script used there, but not all the new rooms. SO i could do a bit of work myself, but it might not be complete.
The latest version of the game, at least on my end, reworks this scene. I'm hoping the dialog flows better, but I'm going to have BurningTyger take a look at it.