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shatatomyo is right. You should probably get a native speaker for beta-reading, or at least someone who grew up with English.

I think I'll play this version later on, though, just to compare with the German one.

Also, if you're not using the mouse, aren't the "buttons" a bit too big?

This looks purdy. *subs*

And I don’t mind the bad English in a couple of places. By the looks of it, I don’t really think it’s going to matter too much for me not to enjoy it. If you can, definitely see if you can get someone to patch things up here or there. If not, don’t worry too much about it.

I'm a sucker for when devs spend lots of time making the visuals look nice for their players. Looking awesome - Good job, keep it up!

author=Lucy_Fox
Thanks for your kind words :3

At the moment the demo's length is just about half an hour..... so it wouldn't make much sense ^_^'
But when the game is more finished once, I'll look for a translator.

(When I started the translation I never thought that this would be that difficult D,: )

Lucy_Fox, it looks like you're not going to need a German => English translator since as slightly off-kilter as your current translation is, it is in English. You're just going to need someone to proof read what you've done and correct it. Mostly so that it conveys what you want it to and you're not having the issue of correct word order since German and English have very different rules in regard to syntax.

Well if you've got it done, then that's great.

Oh and commas. They can be hard to grasp since they are used for a great many purposes in English, from signifying a small break, like taking a breath while you talk to separating lists within sentences, and for the separation of clauses. It's a difficult one but for a native speaker they come naturally.

Don't worry I had huge issues with the gender nouns when I was learning German years ago, but I'm sure for you it's a natural as breathing.

So if the translation is done, I'd better download and play.

e: Ok I played for a while, and it is beautiful. The music is suited to the scenes, the interface takes a little getting used to but it's not clunky or difficult, but, you still need a proof reader I'm afraid. The English isn't translated well. The feel is there but the grammar and word choice detract from a great experience. There is more than enough there for a proof-reader to work with, so the original German won't be needed but you have to get someone to look over your English if you want this to be as well received as it deserves.