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New Demo (With All New Prologue!)

  • unity
  • 03/07/2014 01:24 AM
  • 2363 views
Here it is! The new version of the demo is here! Most of the improvements went to the writing, and a new prologue has been added so you can, you know, actually get to know the person Karuna wants to save.

A big thanks to Red Nova, who helped as both a tester and writing editor!

I tried to address most of the criticisms with this one. Please let me know what you think! Thanks, and enjoy! ^_^

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skaiano
64
03/07/2014 07:37 AM
Ah dang, I was looking to make a sort of video involving the last demo, I only just finished the recording the other day! Ah well, in any case I really liked it so far and am willing to try this one out as well!
urano23
393
03/07/2014 11:37 AM
Downloading, I will give you my thoguhts later :)
unity
You're magical to me.
12540
03/07/2014 12:03 PM
author=skaiano
Ah dang, I was looking to make a sort of video involving the last demo, I only just finished the recording the other day! Ah well, in any case I really liked it so far and am willing to try this one out as well!


O_O Oh wow! :D I'd still love to see it! I had gotten a lot of feedback on the writing needing expanding, so that's what this new one addresses.

author=urano23
Downloading, I will give you my thoguhts later :)


Thanks! I'm looking forward to hearing what you think! ^_^
Marrend
Guardian of the Description Thread
21781
03/07/2014 12:19 PM
*cracks Knuckles, then Sonic knuckles*
unity
You're magical to me.
12540
03/07/2014 01:43 PM
Uploaded a new version that fixes some small errors that I failed to catch at first:

-I had turned followers off in the prologue and forgot to turn them back on. As a result, Chisa doesn't appear to be following you when she joins. Fixed.

-An NPC in the prologue had their self-switch working improperly. Fixed.

-Fixed a couple of typos.
Marrend
Guardian of the Description Thread
21781
03/07/2014 06:16 PM
The self-switch could be a problem. The others, not-so-much.
unity
You're magical to me.
12540
03/07/2014 06:20 PM
BUT YOU WOULDN'T SEE CUTE CHISA FOLLOWING YOU! HOW WOULD YOU CARRY ON?

...Haha, you're right :P
Marrend
Guardian of the Description Thread
21781
03/08/2014 05:07 PM
I like how we can now see the kind of person Aurelie was, how it could make sense that she would be tempted by the promises of power, and the flashback with Karuna facing against Darkloft. It gives gravity to the situation that was not quite present in the original demo. Good work!

*Edit: Thanks for getting "Assault Girl" back into my head. /sarcasm
unity
You're magical to me.
12540
03/10/2014 01:54 AM
author=Marrend
I like how we can now see the kind of person Aurelie was, how it could make sense that she would be tempted by the promises of power, and the flashback with Karuna facing against Darkloft. It gives gravity to the situation that was not quite present in the original demo. Good work!

*Edit: Thanks for getting "Assault Girl" back into my head. /sarcasm


Thanks! I'm really glad you liked it! :D And you're welcome :P
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