DIGITALKOIFISH'S PROFILE

Wait isn't that one of the default Windows XP backgrounds? Lol. I never thought to utilize that stuff. That's awesome!

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The anatomy and proportions are REALLY bad. You should probably indicate some sort of elbow on the 4th guy from the left, as his arms look rubbery. The way you've shaded that blue fox kid's tail doesn't look right, either, and it doesn't consider texture.

Your hands also look nasty, sometimes even positioned too short in relation to the thighs. I'd take Darken's advice for sure, and a good anatomy book that focuses on art.

In terms of anatomy, yes some of the characters do look physically incomprehensible. I will say though that in terms of style (and I don't usually like it when people defend crap with the word 'style') the proportions are what they are--not exactly chibi but at the same time, not a normal anime style. It looks pretty well done for someone who hasn't been formally trained in classical art. I think what has to happen here is that Jman needs to practice his style more and refine it into something he could use professionally.

Looks like a blue caterpillar...

Absolutely! RPGs are Role-Playing GAMES--emphasis on the word "games". A great story sets a game apart but no one will want to sit through the story if they're not having fun interacting with it. Well-said, sir. Too many of the amateur game designers all over the web are so infatuated with making us sit through twenty minute opening cut scenes recounting tales of an ancient war or diabolical demon being sealed away that they forget the gamer is just itching to see what it's all about.

"In medias res", fellow gamers, in the midst of the action. That's the best way to get a story across.

Although with this scene, 'of' should still be changed to 'have' even that is his way of colloquially speaking.