MACBLO'S PROFILE
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Grammer Errors Astral Plane Area 1 Cloaked Figure "Long time ago I haven't been visited by a human in this place" should probably be "Its been a long time since I've been visited by a human in this place." Astral Plane Area 3 When you say "The red ones usually has objects that will help you to recover your HP and status." I think it should be "The red ones will usually contain objects that help you recover HP and Statuses." When you say "Don't forget to equip them on," you can drop the "on" so that it just becomes "Don't forget to equip them." Astral Plane Area 5 When Lina says "How can I make it work," it would sound nicer if you exchanged the "can" for a "do." When the stranger says "Is the only way you can do it," it would sound nicer if you put "Its the only way you can do it." When the stranger says "I won't be a difficult opponent. Not even an easy one," Is he saying something along the lines of "He's not difficult, but don't expect an easy fight?" House your in after the Astral Plane When the old man says "Before you leave, got to the basement," it should be "Before you leave, go to the basement," Second visit to the Astral Plane When the stranger says "it is a probable," I think you mean "it is a probability." When he says "this has been everything for today," It should go like "that is all for today." When he says "That's what I'm ordered to," Your missing the "do" at the end of the sentence. It should be "That's what I'm ordered to do." When the stranger says "You can't attack by a number of turns." change the "by" to a "for" Battle Miembros is still in Spanish. I con't recall at the moment what that command is called in english though. When the game is telling me that I defeated the enemy, its still in spanish. Misc Errors You didn't change "Si" to "Yes" In the first house, the brick walls with the wood roof looks really...weird.