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author=eplipswich
If you ask me, I would agree with kumada and put a full stop/period after "us". Semi-colon works as well, but it's uncommon. A comma doesn't exactly work here for me, but really, it depends on what he said earlier.
Not that it's significant, but just saying.
Here's how it would look like:
"Females don't hate us.
Bitches like you do!!!"
I'm sorry, but hasn't this whole discussion over minor punctuation gone on too long? I mean I understand just pointing out what you believe is correct, but to keep a discussion on it for two days is a bit much, let's just get off the comma and move onto different problems, preferably the mapping, I made revisions to the stuff my brother had written so I don't think there's anymore problems there, maybe some punctuation errors, but other than that it's alright, the spelling should be correct and any errors in meaning (Such as a part and apart) should be fixed, I'm just worried about any kinds of glitches that are there (Such as bosses that have been defeated reappear or items that don't work or have the wrong heading (Such as weed healing 1000 when really it only heals 250.) And the mapping.
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author=Cazauthor=kumadaInfo on semicolons:author=CazCan you explain it to me, then? I'm not looking for an argument, I just want to know in what way I'm doing it wrong so that I can fix it in my writing in the future.
I am also certain a comma has its rightful place where it currently is. Perhaps as a child I paid attention and learned how to use punctuation correctly.
I've googled it. I've checked a Webster's. I haven't found any source that shows a comma being used correctly at the end of a declarative sentence.
Help me out here?
The Wiki is the most helpful link I can find. I pretty much use them in place of conjunctions. So in this case, you could say, "Females don't hate us, but/however/although bitches like you do!"
It sounds better without that conjunction though. A comma can be used instead like Chana explained, as semicolons (unfortunately) mostly go unused now. For the most part, a semicolon shows that the second clause directly relates to the first and it might look a bit too awkward (or there is too long of a pause) to have them stand by themselves. A good example on the Wiki is: "I told John that his shoe was untied; he looked."
You could separate these two clauses with a comma, but it's much tidier to use a semicolon. OH and you can use them to tidy up lists, too. If you've got something that is usually divided by commas but you want it to be in a list at the same time, separating them with semicolons looks a lot nicer. For example with place names: "I have been to: Wales, UK; Toronto, Canada; Glasgow, Scotland.." or with descriptions: "I saw: the postman, who complimented my shoes; the butcher, the man with no fingers; the milkman, the crazed lunatic.."
(Sorry for hijacking your picture, Mmarage. I do think this game has promise if you improve your mapping a bit, though! :P)
Me realising you actually meant commas:
EDIT: HERP, I just realised you were talking about commas. Oh well, this was also a helpful lesson. In comparison to the semi-colon, a comma is used in basic lists without descriptions and things. They're also used to separate adjectives: "the big, blue tree"
Nowadays, you will usually see a comma where a semicolon belongs due to people not liking the semicolon. :( Oh, and if you use a conjunction then there's no need for a semicolon. You may want to put in a comma to tell the reader when to breathe: "I went to the shops, but before I could find the dragon, the shopkeeper ate my arms."
Thanks, and it's alright, I'm not even sure how this whole thing began in the first place XD and also I've been working on the game a bit, I found a glitch with the key items (The letters and keys) I've fixed that and I've been trying to add things to the rooms to make them look better.
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author=Caz
Wow, semicolons are that annoying? *shrug* I was just saying that I don't think a period is appropriate, but a comma lacks a little something. In this context, I am certain a semicolon can be used. I am also certain a comma has its rightful place where it currently is. Perhaps as a child I paid attention and learned how to use punctuation correctly. I didn't say I will think less of this sentence without its use, nor did I intend to enrage you with my suggestion. I apologise on behalf of semicolon-users worldwide.
On a more related note, his grammar and spelling are acceptable and, more importantly, understandable. Why is this still being argued over?
Trust me I have no idea. *Puts my head on my desk and sighs annoyed* XD
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author=Caz
If I were being picky I'd use a semicolon, but its use is arguably necessary. I think a comma works just fine.
I think your mapping is okay but it could use some detail: more shelving, paper, paintings, rugs, etc.. You know, things that go in rooms normally.
Alright, if I put up a new version I'll be sure to include those, thank you for the tip.
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author=kumada
There should be no comma between 'appreciated' and 'CFO'. Also, "under appreciated" should be "under-appreciated."
The nitroblitz thing feels like a shameless plug, and comes off as you (mmarage) talking up you (mmarage) and your company (nitroblitz) with your character (also mmarage) as just a mouthpiece. It's certainly possible that the game might subvert this, or make it more complex somehow, or that I'm really just missing the humor here, but this screenshot makes your game look like nothing more than an advertisement for your business, and that kinda puts me off.
Well this is to drum up business to his site, that was the whole purpose of making this game besides for the fun of it, and it's not as if the whole game is just nitroblitz.com nitroblitz.com nitroblitz.com, I'm pretty sure besides the name of one of the characters (My brother's) being Nitroblitz, it isn't completely advertising to people to check the site out, and my brother had to rewrite the intro since some circumstances in what was happening with the site's development, I didn't want to do it since I wrote this whole other thing for the intro so I told him to do it himself, in retrospect, not the best idea and I should have read through it to make sure that there weren't any typos in the writing, but he's twenty something years old so I thought he'd be more careful about doing something like that since it is his game and what's going to be advertised for his site and being put up on multiple sites.
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author=chana
Your map is correct but too empy, add chairs, shelves, plants, paintings,etc.
Yeah, sorry about that, if I put up some additions to the game and get rid of any glitches in the game then I'll be sure to add more stuff to this part of the game and any other places that come off too empty, like the stairwells...
author=kumada
"I'm excited to be apart of this place"
should be
"I'm excited to be a part of this place."
Apart refers to two things that are separate. A part refers to one thing that is a component of another thing.
I know, I probably should have checked my brother's writing before putting everything up, he was leaving for California for the month so I was kind of rushing to get everything up since he asked me to make this game for him.
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