Heartache 101 ~Sour into Sweet~

Comments on Megumi, under hide-tag:

Riiiight. "What will that achieve" was what I chose, and that is the landmine <player> trips over. I'm not sure why I thought it was the other one, especially since I had the freaking file right in front of me to reference.

author=Dozen
Honestly, that's meaner than anything I've ever said. And Marrend knows, I've said things. And Marrend knows, I've said things.

I recall thinking some of the things you said against my "review" of Joruri as a personal attack at the time. Or maybe it was the first "complete" release of Fran? Definitely the latter. I'm not too sure of the former, and I really don't want to look it up.

*Edit:
@Render: I can see how you might think that "Go see a doctor" was not connected to "Those who suffered enough brain damage (etc)". However, you took it as two separate thoughts, and reacted accordingly. Though, I guess that much is obvious, and, uh I guess I should just let it go. Rather than have it eat at me.

author=Render
Also, to Dozen...
I read your post again and realized that I misunderstood it HEAVILY. That was childlish of me, and I can assure you that no such thing will happen again.

^^~
Thank you for considering me:3

author=Render
However, for the people who have tested Megumi, I DO have some questions for you...
1) Was the introduction event rocky? I feel like it could be more natural.

It could be, I'd say; but it would make it worse, not better.

The event's 'rocky' nature as you'd put it stems from Megumi's characteristics. She's caught up in her own little business where other people's ills and expectations matter little to her in comparison. The event does a great job of portraying that!^^
Honestly, what would an alternative be? The girl runs into the player, and apologizes? We've seen that a thousand times, doesn't fit Megumi's personality, and, 'less it did so it would certainly not be an entertaining story.

Leave her role in it as it is for the most part.^^

author=Render
2) Does the player sound like Flowerthief's player? I'm trying to a for that.

Not up with my standards, it fits into the requirements neat(the requirements are not based on my standards cuz my standards are impossible). He does sound like him decently. ... but he isn't. For one reason: He doesn't think to himself.
An important characteristic of the Player early on is a diminished ability to express himself well. He has thoughts and ideas grounded in common sense, a pleasantly slow nature, and a pinch of perversion, but he doesn't have the know-how to say any of that out loud at the beginning of the game without sounding like a creep.

This lends itself to story-telling devices, by the way~ The Player's inner monologues are often(In fact, should be) used to lampshade something odd that happened during, or after an event in question. In the first event, he would comment on how she takes an entire class consisting of morons for granted based on hearsay, definitely. Lacking this particular addition to assure those in front of the screen that 'Yes, we are aware this is ridiculous. It's part of the story, and we are not idiots.' we and our game would be seen in the perception of the audience we wouldn't want to.

Also, it's amazing to portray tension(see Akari's or Shoko's route) or a lead to something silly(see pretty much everything, starting with the prologue).

author=Render
3) What is your opinion of the Soul Check?

*reads*
Uuuuu O_o
This is awful>.<
Not in a storytelling sense, of course, but geez.

That said. The player would never be that big of an ass. And it doesn't take a Soul score of 30 to have the mere sympathy, let alone empathy, to let people you want to like you tell you a story without criticising it before you've heard it, after you agreed to hear the story. That'd be a Soul check of around 5, and no one lets it fall so low.

author=Render
4) Where do you think the story is heading? (I'm just curious about this.)

All over the place. Just like it should be!^^ Long as the lines end at the place they're supposed to:3

author=Render
5) Is there any other opinions that you'd like to share? Possibly things I could tweak or add.

There's always something~ You can polish each and every line close to perfection! No such thing as no room for improvement. Just don't forget, it's rare thing the improvement will be significant enough to delay the release, once you felt it's up to it.

Ironically, the only thing the player thinks to himself, the 'She left' comments, are boring and redundant, like you felt the conversation beforehand needs some closure, but ended the thought process right there instead of giving it the closure. Look more closely for times when there is a comment needed, and when there is, write in more length and meaning. When there's nothing to reflect on, leave it out altogether. They can see she's gone. The screen fades away.

Oh, do something with the panty machine event. That thing shouldn't be taken so naturally, despite the (hopefully?o.o) fresh panties. Kyouki works there every Wednesday(Of course she does! That's where the porn mags right next to the counter come from!~^^). I'll work it into whatever you come up with~

As always, devs, I'm yours. Overseer off.

author=Render
For the machine part, thanks to my naivety, I seriously thought the machines were just to buy used underwear. Not for people that have weird hmm, how should I put this? Weird fetishes with underwear.

That's not fetishes, really. It's more of a cultural thing.

Before the end of WW2, it was not customary to wear underwear down there for Japanese women.(Man. Hitler ruins everything.) Post-war, as they had to open up to the outside world's market more to survive, panties entered the fray.

Now, the Japanese of the fifties weren't much for xenophobia as much as they were for childlike wonder for everything from overseas they had no chance to see before, so they really liked the idea. But, given their losses in the, U.S. presence giving them a hard time, and all the costs it took to extablish new trade routes(two trading hubs were bombed, mind), their economy was in all kinds of messy(hee~). Thus were panties expensive, and considered really high-class, something along the lines of jewelry.

That made them a status symbol in itself. Moreso... who are the women who have a reason to spend on fancy underwear after an economic crash, in a country where modesty is expected from the women in the family?

Why, that would be women who don't live with their family, are unmarried, yet have, or involved with someone who has the sort of money, and... opportunity to - nay, outright benefit from - showing off those new, exotic money sinks...

That's right. You get me.

40 years forward, and the now cheap panties are embedded in their culture as a direct hint at kinky sex. Hence all the panty shots we're getting.

author=Render

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I'm talking about how people would buy underwear just to smell it throughout the day. I wrote underwear fetishes because I felt like it was a bit raunchy to post.

So was I!:3
The majority of them are into that^^' It's like, say, how we're into masturbation. There are some people who don't enjoy it, prolly. There are also some shmucks who have so little regard for the rest of us they'd do it in daylight. But having the thing for it is the standard, not the exception. You can buy that underwear, hide it throughout the day, and... use when no one can see it, like a picture of a model you really like. Standard teenage girls and boys.

author=Kevincalator
Guess that half of our girls would break up that machine on sight... (and the store owner afterwards) :p

Mhm^^
That's the right attitude to have:3