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This page is for discussion of the artistic side of content creation, such as writing and characterization, as well as for the posting of incomplete content for the purpose of receiving feedback from each other.
Feel free to discuss characters and stories you are working on.
The old Custom Content thread can be found here. The first archived artistic discussion thread can be found here.
Feel free to discuss characters and stories you are working on.
The old Custom Content thread can be found here. The first archived artistic discussion thread can be found here.
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Closeauthor=Marrend
That eye-edit you're looking for might be a bit difficult for me. I guess I'll fool around in GIMP for a spell, though.
*Edit: Well, here's a supremely hack attempt at taking the eyes that you posted, and editing them to fit with the base tachie. I totally don't expect this to pass inspection.
Oh god, it's as scary as the wasp-waist girl from way back.
author=Fuyuki
I want her to become... scarier.
Getting the right eyes is half the battle of a given expression. The other half is getting the right mouth.
author=Mute
Oh god, it's as scary as the wasp-waist girl from way back.
...and that's pretty much the reason why I linked it, rather than just copy-paste the URL between image tags.
Fuyuki
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Can I ask a strange question? I have some trouble while writing.
It makes me so confused -- I have no idea at all.
What will you do if you find out your girlfriend is a yandere and she will do anything to prevent you from the girls?
It makes me so confused -- I have no idea at all.
Hrm. From what little I understand, yandere are hugely devoted to their attachments, to the point of being able/willing to do literally anything for them. So, either <player> is freaked out by the how far she's willing to go for his sake, or he embraces that in a possibly feeble attempt at reform.
Either that, or, to follow your initial thought, she'd be a possibly "minor character" that's a barrier toall the other routes ever a different character.
Either that, or, to follow your initial thought, she'd be a possibly "minor character" that's a barrier to
Fuyuki
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author=Marrend
Hrm. From what little I understand, yandere are hugely devoted to their attachments, to the point of being able/willing to do literally anything for them. So, either <player> is freaked out by the how far she's willing to go for his sake, or he embraces that in a possibly feeble attempt at reform.
Wow, someone finally understand a real yandere is. Your opinion just like me. Somebody think that a yan girl just know to envy or do something violent, hmph. However, yandere is a girl who really will do anything to protect their love too. So, well...
I'm writing some last one. Maybe tomorrow I will finish it (if it can run well *sigh*)
However, I afraid that the ending is too... obsessed. Maybe I'm being sensitive. I must think carefully about making a warning before you play it >.<
Think "possessive". She may fail to understand that <player> can fall for another girl, and would see anyone he's with as seducing him away from her. How she responds to that situation would largely depend on how much of a yandere she is. However, I would strongly advise against having her be an extreme yandere to the point where she would either murder the competition (as it were), or have the "If I can't have him, nobody can" line of thought.
When the hell did I pick all this up?
When the hell did I pick all this up?
Fuyuki
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Actually, you tell the last one a little too... late. I've already done it. Do threaten count? >< Hmph, I'll try to read it again and see if I can change her dialogue a bit, less yandere.
Kevincalanor
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Heyo guys ^^
Sorry 4 the long absence again, I'm currently with a mess-ton of stuff to work on it >.>
Special thanks to Render for keep working on the grammar even without me posting around, also, looking forward to the beta ^^
Decided to give a try at rigging the eyes on a tachie ^^
Sorry 4 the long absence again, I'm currently with a mess-ton of stuff to work on it >.>
Special thanks to Render for keep working on the grammar even without me posting around, also, looking forward to the beta ^^
author=Fuyuki
Wow, it looks totally... unique. I don't hope that it become 100% like the picture, it's just an example. I want her to become... scarier. That's right. Thanks for your help anyway.
How about this?
I think it's more simple.
Decided to give a try at rigging the eyes on a tachie ^^
Fuyuki
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It's cool. Her eyes are nice ^^ Can you make like that for this picture too? Thank you so much.
Anyway, my story is finished and I'm checking it right now. So the only thing I can sure that: there is nobody gonna "go" in my story. Cause my character is a yandere, so it's normal for her to do anything such as threatening to protect her love. In short, I won't change my story anymore.
Anyway, my story is finished and I'm checking it right now. So the only thing I can sure that: there is nobody gonna "go" in my story. Cause my character is a yandere, so it's normal for her to do anything such as threatening to protect her love. In short, I won't change my story anymore.
author=Fuyuki
Anyway, my story is finished and I'm checking it right now. So the only thing I can sure that: there is nobody gonna "go" in my story. Cause my character is a yandere, so it's normal for her to do anything such as threatening to protect her love. In short, I won't change my story anymore.
*quirks eyebrow*
That seemed fast. I'm not going to make any further judgments until I can see the story, though.
Fuyuki
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Well, seems that my game is cracked or something *sigh* I can't run it correctly.
I didn't test it all, but, well... Here is it. I just finish the main story, so I really want your feed back to complete it ^^
I didn't test it all, but, well... Here is it. I just finish the main story, so I really want your feed back to complete it ^^
Let's check this out, then!
I didn't get any errors when I booted the game with this content active. So, maybe there's something else in here.
Ohhh, okay. Well, this is the first thing I saw:
I think the parser might be confused about what it should be doing with BRANCH A. You do the initial SHOW CHOICE sequencing right, but then tell the parser that it should go to BRANCH A on the condition of <player> having 23 PERSONALITY or higher. What, I believe, could be done to clear this off is to delete that "A: PER 23" at that point, then do something like...
Next thing, there's a "JUMP TO 5" line. Simplify this to "JUMP 5", and that should be good to go.
"AFF UP 10"? I think this is supposed to be "AFFECTION UP 10". I think I saw an "AFF UP 15" somewhere in there too. Same replacement effect.
Anyway, the content, itself. I like the music. It seemed oddly familiar, but, I can't place my finger on where I may have heard it from. I may have only gone over the intro, but, the writing seems to use some work. Phrases/words aren't quite used correctly (Such as "I get it sometime too." instead of "I get that too, sometimes."), if not outright missing (Such as the case of "She might bump into another soon." instead of, presumably, "She'll probably bump into another person soon.").
I admit that I have not delved too deeply into this content, so, there may be other issues in both programming and writing that I am not aware of. In any event, I probably could help on a case-by-case (read: story-by-story) basis, if you would like such help.
I didn't get any errors when I booted the game with this content active. So, maybe there's something else in here.
Ohhh, okay. Well, this is the first thing I saw:
ID = 20
DISLIKE
I-I'm just new student. D-don't notice me...
ID = 0
A:(Per)Tell her it is ok.
B: Scold her.
A: PER 23
BRANCH A
#etc
I think the parser might be confused about what it should be doing with BRANCH A. You do the initial SHOW CHOICE sequencing right, but then tell the parser that it should go to BRANCH A on the condition of <player> having 23 PERSONALITY or higher. What, I believe, could be done to clear this off is to delete that "A: PER 23" at that point, then do something like...
BRANCH A
ID = 0
No, it's okay if you're a new student.
ID = 20
NEUTRAL
R-Really?
C: PER 23
# Fail-boat route?
ID = 0
Sure. Just watch yourself in the future, okay?
ID = 20
R-right!
BRANCH C
# This is pretty much what you had under BRANCH A to begin with, only after the point were Fuyuki says, "R-really?"
Next thing, there's a "JUMP TO 5" line. Simplify this to "JUMP 5", and that should be good to go.
"AFF UP 10"? I think this is supposed to be "AFFECTION UP 10". I think I saw an "AFF UP 15" somewhere in there too. Same replacement effect.
Anyway, the content, itself. I like the music. It seemed oddly familiar, but, I can't place my finger on where I may have heard it from. I may have only gone over the intro, but, the writing seems to use some work. Phrases/words aren't quite used correctly (Such as "I get it sometime too." instead of "I get that too, sometimes."), if not outright missing (Such as the case of "She might bump into another soon." instead of, presumably, "She'll probably bump into another person soon.").
I admit that I have not delved too deeply into this content, so, there may be other issues in both programming and writing that I am not aware of. In any event, I probably could help on a case-by-case (read: story-by-story) basis, if you would like such help.
Fuyuki
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Yes, that choice... I'll make branch C later since I wanted to finish the core first. If I hadn't wanted you to make a choice, I wouldn't have written that down. So please be patient.
Haha, the sentence, I think it's silly too. My poor grammar... I wrote it out of my habit, sorry ><
Oh, and the AFF and Affection are the same, I read the help, it works too. If you don't like, just replace all of them.
Haha, the sentence, I think it's silly too. My poor grammar... I wrote it out of my habit, sorry ><
Oh, and the AFF and Affection are the same, I read the help, it works too. If you don't like, just replace all of them.
author=Fuyuki
Haha, the sentence, I think it's silly too. My poor grammar... I wrote it out of my habit, sorry ><
So, uh, do you want help with that, or no?
author=Fuyuki
Oh, and the AFF and Affection are the same, I read the help, it works too. If you don't like, just replace all of them.
Where in the help file are you reading this? I'm not seeing it at all! It's also not showing up on Notepad++ either. Though, if it works that way, I guess it ultimately doesn't matter how the function is called.
Fuyuki
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Sure, I'd love to. After all, I posted it here to complete it -- And the help, it's in the heartache folder, I suppose. Still it works, I think there is no problem then.
I know where to find Mister Help File. I'm just not sure where he said that "AFF UP/DOWN" can be used as a replacement for "AFFECTION UP/DOWN". Does that make more sense?
Anywho, I'm starting to think that I'd go over the files, compile notes on what I think would be appropriate changes, explain why I think they should be that way, and send you a message when I'm done. That might take quite some time, though!
Anywho, I'm starting to think that I'd go over the files, compile notes on what I think would be appropriate changes, explain why I think they should be that way, and send you a message when I'm done. That might take quite some time, though!
Fuyuki
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Oh... Right. Sorry about that, actually I read it in this blog. I just thought that I had seen it it help file. My fault.
Sure, take your time ^^ I'm looking foward to seeing it.
Three-letter abbreviations for all player attributes and for the word "Affection" are supported.
Examples:
CONDITION = PER 20
AFF DOWN 20
Examples:
CONDITION = PER 20
AFF DOWN 20
author=Marrend
Anywho, I'm starting to think that I'd go over the files, compile notes on what I think would be appropriate changes, explain why I think they should be that way, and send you a message when I'm done. That might take quite some time, though!
Sure, take your time ^^ I'm looking foward to seeing it.
BDFalcon
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After that long time I return to say that I STILL HAVE NOT COMPLETED THE GAME! :D
... orz
Buuut, if I'm to understand what I'm reading correctly, someone wants empty yandere eyes? I can whip up/have whipped up a few of those. ^.^ Additional random side note as this will likely be a small overall updating info dump: I need to make two to three more characters for the Yurihara Sakura route to work, due to it's experimental nature. Which I for no explainable reason don't reveal details about it. Maybe I really should. =.=;
Anywho, tachie that I'd like opinions on:
Akimori Ritsuko, one of the datable characters in the Yurihara Sakura route.
A less colorful and, ummm, artistic(?) version of Ritsuko.
Basically, Ritsuko is going to be a possibly somewhat eccentric girl who likes accessories and is into astronomy and charms. The first outfit incorporates all of the colors of the week, something I'm sure enough people here are familiar with, but it also feels like a little much. ^.^; The second version is much less overwhelming, but I'm still fond of the colors of the week thing, so... I'm ultimately asking for input on whether or not the first one is too much. ^.^;
That's about it, methinks.
... orz
Buuut, if I'm to understand what I'm reading correctly, someone wants empty yandere eyes? I can whip up/have whipped up a few of those. ^.^ Additional random side note as this will likely be a small overall updating info dump: I need to make two to three more characters for the Yurihara Sakura route to work, due to it's experimental nature. Which I for no explainable reason don't reveal details about it. Maybe I really should. =.=;
Anywho, tachie that I'd like opinions on:
Akimori Ritsuko, one of the datable characters in the Yurihara Sakura route.
A less colorful and, ummm, artistic(?) version of Ritsuko.
Basically, Ritsuko is going to be a possibly somewhat eccentric girl who likes accessories and is into astronomy and charms. The first outfit incorporates all of the colors of the week, something I'm sure enough people here are familiar with, but it also feels like a little much. ^.^; The second version is much less overwhelming, but I'm still fond of the colors of the week thing, so... I'm ultimately asking for input on whether or not the first one is too much. ^.^;
That's about it, methinks.
Gee, both of those look great, BD! Though, to answer the question, no, the first tachie isn't too much.
Also, anytime you want to actually want make an ID-claim to any of those unlisted characters, just letme us know, 'kay?
Also, anytime you want to actually want make an ID-claim to any of those unlisted characters, just let
As I delve into Fuyuki, I'm noticing that part of her shtick is being socially inept and/or awkward. She's not as bad off as, say, Shoko, but, I'm sensing some similarities to <player>'s thoughts regarding the two. I dunno. I guess I just find this mildly interesting.
Anyway, bit of a progress report on Fuyuki's notes. I just finished with STORY 10 out of... 36, I think? That's just the main story file. There's two others to go through! Though, they are smaller. I dunno. We'll see how I feel about tackling them after the main file's done.
Anyway, bit of a progress report on Fuyuki's notes. I just finished with STORY 10 out of... 36, I think? That's just the main story file. There's two others to go through! Though, they are smaller. I dunno. We'll see how I feel about tackling them after the main file's done.
