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GAME DEVELOPMENT: THE GIANT ORB OF BRAINSTORMING
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Introduction
Hey everyone, basically this topic is here for three reasons: Brainstorming, Critiquing, and Guidance. In my recent experiences while working on The Last Bible, I feel as if some elements of the games Plot may be wack, and 100% off the track. Basically with this topic we will share Plot Ideas and help one another develop our games and perfect ideas in terms of Character, Plot, and Game Development as a whole. In order for this to work however courtesy and basic respect is needed. If you have a game Idea you need help developing or need help finding where to go next please create a post in this topic. One thing I would love would be if everyone could both share ideas as well as critique and help other's ideas. In terms of respect this mean, giving thoughtful feedback, and not flat out, “This idea sucks assâ€, and in terms of courtesy this means critiquing and giving feedback to the person who has posted above you rather than spamming the thread with your own ideas. Common rule of thumb is just abide by the forum rules, along with these rules are some Guidelines I have created that will help this discussion and allow Game Developers to utilize this topic to the fullest.
Guidelines
Name: The name of your game.
Progress: Your games current progress.
Background: Some basic background of your game, please do not add spoilers, this is basically to help everyone know what the hell your game is
about.
Idea Type: The Type of Idea or Progressing: Script, System, Character Dev. etc, etc.
Idea: Utilize the
tag to hide all Ideas that are being shared. This is used mainly to prevent spoilers and such. Basically within this Tag you will post you idea. This idea can be anywhere from story development to area design. You may post screens and such to help get your point across, and if any additional background is needed to help set the mood of the game, In terms of scripting and such please add these inside the tag.
Idea
Feedback: This is not need for one whom is posting an idea for their own game, but is needed when giving feedback to a game. Please utilize the
tag as well in terms of feedback. However please note that there is actual feedback inside the below tag. When giving Feedback please us the @The User Name format of response.
Feedback
In Conclusion
I hope this topic really gets people together, all in all I am not an IRC kid, but if needed we could get a channel of this. I hope many of you will work together in terms of Feedback and Ideas, and if this is the case please use AIM, MSN, and any messenger form to continue to help one another if not on the forum.
I hope this topic really gets people together, all in all I am not an IRC kid, but if needed we could get a channel of this. I hope many of you will work together in terms of Feedback and Ideas, and if this is the case please use AIM, MSN, and any messenger form to continue to help one another if not on the forum.
Ashramaru
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Name: The Last Bible
Progress: 25% (3 Chapters), 50% would be the Full Demo.
Background: The Last Bible
Idea Type: Script
Idea: There are 2 Parts, Part 2 appears below Part 1.
Progress: 25% (3 Chapters), 50% would be the Full Demo.
Background: The Last Bible
Idea Type: Script
Idea: There are 2 Parts, Part 2 appears below Part 1.
Ok, I have been working for the End of Chapter 3 for The Last Bible. I want the end of this Chapter to be a "clincher" for players. Warning this is a long script, but I need a serious and honest opinion, this will affect how the game turns out and I really need help with it.
Important Information: Honestly you may want to know a bit about this part of the game and the characters before you start reading and editing.
Alexander: Alexander is an Exorcist of The Order. He is an egotist, he is a cold, quiet, and demanding leader. In this part of the story he is the leader of a small squad assigned to retrieve and important piece of Military Equipment, known as The Nadleeh. Alexander is British
Jonas: Jonas accompanies Alexander on this Mission. He is normally a happy go lucky guy, and is found taking care of Ashley for the majority of the story. In terms of combat he is feared by Alexander due to his "killing intent". Rather than utilizing gun, Jonas is a Field Soldier, whom is fast enough to utilize Combat Knives in combat. Jonas is Australian
Ashley: Ashley is on Alexander's team along with Jonas. Ashley is a downer, a whiner, and isn't the best soldier, however he is believed to be a natural tactician. During times of decisive action, Ashley is unable to act, which make him appear weak.
The Nadleeh The Nadleeh is a piece of Military Technology and is currently in possession of the Israeli Government. This Nadleeh is one of 12 Known to exist in this time period. What is unknown to many is the actual purpose of The Nadleeh. This piece of technology is a biological weapon, and can be classified as a Homunculus, a being created by humans. The name Nadleeh is a term interchangeable with "Two-spirit," used by the Navajo tribes to denote a male spirit and a female spirit living in the same body. The Nadleeh in The Last Bible function as Homunculi which bear real form or shape. It is not until there genes are "Programmed" or come into contact with Human Flesh that they mimic and "Clone" their targets cells and appearance. Commander Jacksons team consisting of Alexander, Jonas, Ashley, and 15 other soldiers whom were killed in a bombing. There orders were to capture the Nadleeh and retrieve it to Rome, however one thing has lead to another, and the characters are in this current situation.
Last Bible Script
Scene #69:
Setting: Alexander, Jonas, and Ashley have defeated the Boss. The Beast begins to return to its Human form, allowing Mr. Misoto to regain consciousness. Ashley tries to calm him down, and Mr. Misoto gives Ashley the Key of Nadleeh, however as Mr. Misoto looks at the key, the Akuma Virus begins to spread and the Yokai and its Host fight one another for control. Human appendages flail in the air and the Yokai, enters is "Berserk" State, due to no consumption of food. In this state is begins to destroy everything in sight and blood gushes from the beast as it loses all control. Alexander orders Ashley to attack but Ashley hesitates and The Beast easily knocks him off the side of the platform. The Beast now looks at Jonas.
Quote
Jonas: "AHH!"
*Jonas rushes towards the foe with Combat Knife in hand.*
Alexander: "HALSE!"
*Jonas jumps into the air only to be impaled by a spike that emerges from The Beasts palm.*
Alexander: "..Damn It......Nadleeh....."
*Alexander draws his Katana and charges at the Beast. The two of them spar, but Alexander is knocked back. As he begins to "Invoke" Suzuka a shadow is seen over head, and a cloaked figure impales The Beast through the head from above.*
Alexander: *Shocked*
Jonas: *A heavily injured Jonas looks on at the beast.* "U..hhh..what the hell!?"
*Blood spews all around as The Beast, yells and screams, the figure baring a Female Figure withdraws her hand from The Beast's head, and begins to fire many SMG rounds at her foe. This sends the Beast falling off the platform.*
Alexander: "Impossible.....Who...who are you...of what affiliation do you seek..."
Cloaked Figure: "......."
*Alexander raises his blade.*
Alexander: "Speak now, or prepare to be eliminated!"
Cloaked Figure: "Nadleeh is ours....."
*Dramatic Music Start*
Alexander: "DIE !!!"
*Alexander rushes at the Cloaked Figure, the two clash, and the screen is surrounded in a flash. When its subsides, a Larger figure in a cloak appears between Alexander and the Feminine Figure. The Figure uses his arm to fend off Alexander's attack.*
Jonas: *Struggling to get up.* "Whha...what is going on?"
Larger Cloaked Figure: "Miphera, gather the Key, and let us be on our way."
*Dramatic Music Increase*
Alexander: *Looking up slowly* "..That voice....No....It...it...can't be....."
*Memory Flashes in Alexander's Mind*
Alexander: "You..you...are..."
Larger Cloaked Figure: "Dead?"
Larger Cloaked Figure: "No...Little Master.....I am very much alive....."
*As the Larger Cloaked Figure's Cloak reaches out to attack Alexander, Alexander jumps away.*
Alexander: "You..you...no (sharp rise in Alexander's voice)..you..are....dead...dead..."
*Alexander is Shocked*
Feminine Cloaked Figure: "Master....."
Larger Cloaked Figure: "...." *Turns away from Alexander*
*As the two Cloaked Figures proceed to leave Alexander yells.*
Alexander: "NO !!! Stop, Don't you dare turn away from me......"
Alexander: "How.....10 years....you are a Ghost.....HOW !!!!"
*The Larger Cloaked Figure stops.*
Large Cloaked Figure: "…Time..Time...has only prolonged my faith....."
Feminine Cloaked Figure: "Master...."
*The Feminine Cloaked Figure stops.*
Larger Cloaked Figure: "No..he deserves some time...."
*The Larger Cloaked Figure walks towards Alexander.*
Larger Cloaked Figure: "As I have said..time...has only prolonged my faith....your faith...the faith that we share."
Alexander: "There is no way....you...do not fuck with ME !!!"
*Alexander prepares for battle.*
Larger Cloaked Figure: "That tool....my faith...the curse..have you forgotten my words.....In that case...then."
Alexander: "You're not him !!!! You...you are an imposter !!!!"
*Alexander charges at the Larger Cloaked Figure, but the Figure dodges the attack, and appears behind Alexander.*
Larger Cloaked Figure: "....I am he..I...time...lets just say...I have been given a little extra time."
*The Larger Cloaked Figure removes the Mask on his face, revealing a beautiful face however part of his face still remains hidden by the Mask.*
Alexander: *Shocked*
*In shock Alexander drops to his knees, and starts to mumble.*
Larger Cloaked Figure: "......The same......, Miphera....let up depart..."
*The Larger Cloaked Figure and the Feminine Cloaked Figure leave the area, and the screen dims to black. For a mere moment, thoughts rush through Alexander's head, as he begins to talk to himself and hears screams, heart beats, killing, and lastly fire. With that the screen resurfaces, and Alexander now stands holding his Katana firmly.*
Alexander: "....If so....then...to hell with you....."
Alexander: "If so...then..to hell with you LUCIOUS !!!!"
*Alexander rushes away from the present area and follows the two Cloaked Figures. Leaving an injured Jonas who is struggling to stand.*
Jonas: "..Dammit....this whole mission.....Dammit....I...I..have to help Alexander...."
Jonas: *Coughs blood.* "...But......Ashley...."
Jonas: *Falls to the ground.*
Faint Voice: "..Uhhh...can..anyone hear me....."
Jonas: *Shocked* "......"
Faint Voice: "I...I can't hold on....ALEXANDER.....JONAS......."
Faint Voice: "I.....anyone...please...."
Jonas: ("Ashley...")
Jonas: "ASHLEY !!"
*Jonas struggles to rise.*
Ashley: "JONAS...IS THAT YOU!!"
*Jonas stands up and starts walking.*
Jonas: "ASHLEY WHERE THE HELL ARE YOU !?"
Ashley: "OVER HERE !!!"
Jonas: "!"
*Jonas walks towards the area where The Beast fell off. As he reaches this area he finds Ashley holding on to a piece of scrap metal.*
Jonas: "ASHLEY HOLD ON, I'LL LOOK FOR SOMETHING TO GET YOU UP HERE!"
Ashley: "JONAS....HURRY....I DON;T THINK...IT WILL HOLD...MUCH...!"
*Jonas grabs some wiring from the Reactor's circuits and ties it to the railing of the platform. Jonas throws the wire down and Ashley grabs onto it, he them holds on, as Jonas struggles to pull the wire up. As Jonas uses all of his strength his wounds open up, and he begins to bleed again. Jonas pulls hard, and Ashley manages to climb up. Once on the platform Ashley is shocked to see the damage, as well as a heavily injured Jonas who is struggling to see his friend.*
Ashley: "JONAS !!"
*Ashley rushes to Jonas and tries to help his friend from trembling again.*
Ashley: "Shit.....are you..."
Jonas: "Of course, that Akuma, did me in....but..its only a scratch..."
Ashley: "....Jonas.....you should.."
Jonas: "DON'T WORRY ABOUT ME!"
Jonas: "We got more important shit....Alexander...went all psycho and we lost The Nadleeh...."
Ashley: "!"
Ashley: "...Wha....we...where did he go..."
Jonas: "..We...we..were so close."
Ashley: "....Shut the hell up...We can still finish this mission..."
Jonas: "....fuck the Mission..that bastard Alexander...."
*Jonas' wound reopens.*
Ashley: "....You brick head...."
*Ashley withdraws a Bottle of Water, and a Medical Bandage.*
Jonas: "....."
Ashley: "...Drink some of this...and let's wrap it..."
*The screen fades to Black, and Ashley wraps Jonas' wounds. When it refades, Ashley is drinking from his Water Bottle.*
Ashley: "Well...I better get going...."
*Ashley checks his Handgun, and picks up some Ammo from the ground.*
Jonas: "..What the fuck do you think you're doing....?"
Ashley: "The Mission is not over......we have to return with all living members..."
*Ashley finishes the water bottle and begins to walk off.*
Jonas: "Where the hell are you going !!!"
Ashley: *Looks over his shoulder.* "Jonas....just stay there man...."
*Ashley runs off to follow Alexander and the screen fades to Black. When it resurfaces the Player will be able to control Ashley and must continue forward. Here one will notice many scratch and damage marks left by a sword, most likely Alexander's. They will continue forward for two more Maps, and then a cut scene will take place. The screen will fade, and reappear with The Larger Cloaked Figure in a dark room. He inserts a key into a small machine and air erupts from the machine. A glass container emerges and, The Larger Cloaked Figure touches it with his hand. However before he can turn the key, the Feminine Figure flies into the area followed by Alexander.*
Alexander: "LUCIOUS !!!"
*Alexander runs toward Lucious, but the Feminine Figure rushes to protect him, Alexander, quickly appears and reappears near Lucious. The Feminine Figure appears again to protect her Master, but Alexander slashes her sending her flying into some near by machines. Alexander is heavily panting.*
Lucious: "......."
Alexander: "DO NOT IGNORE ME !!!!"
Lucious: "....Little Master......"
Alexander: "DON'T CALL ME THAT !!!!"
*Alexander rushes towards Lucious and the two collide. Alexander's Katana presses against Lucious' Cloak which acts as a weapon.*
Lucious: "This tool...has its hatred consumed you too...?"
*Alexander and Lucious parry one another's attacks, and Alexander hurls many Fire Balls towards Lucious, whom represses them with a wave of his hand. Alexander soon, stabs his Katana into the ground and performs a string of hand seals. With that balls of fire materialize before him, and Alexander forces these Balls towards Lucious. They all connect, however as the smoke settles, Lucious is unscratched.*
Lucious: "Do you take me for a fool...Ellowsworth, was it not I whom possessed the greatest Craft Efficiency in The Order !?"
Alexander: *Draws his Katana* "..You...you are a Traitor....your foul mouth and monstrous figure....you devil...."
Lucious: ".....Do not come here to further question my path..young one...."
Alexander: "I have not....Lucious...I have come here...to kill you..."
Lucious: "I see....so The Order..has not forgotten about me...."
Alexander: "55 Civilians, 15 Exorcist, 1 Cardinal...you Lucious of Jerusalem shall never be forgotten, until your Sins are paid for in Blood."
Lucious: "Alexander...I did not come here to fight....I came to extend my life....I have to stay on this Earth a bit longer...God has a plan..."
Alexander: "DO NOT, Slander my Lord's name!!!"
Lucious: "........."
Alexander: "..DIE !!!!"
*Alexander launches at Lucious and prepares to attack, as he does, Lucious dodges, the attack, but Alexander has used the Double Image skill on Lucious. Lucious defends against Alexander's attack, and Alexander pushes off Lucious to prepare for another attack. The two continue this fashion of warping and clashing for 3 Times. After which Alexander gets angry and recklessly charges at Lucious. Lucious dodges the attack again, and Alexander begins swinging his Katana around, aimlessly, unable to even hit Lucious. And with the last strike, Lucious stops Alexander's Katana with his finger, and kicks Alexander in the stomach.*
Lucious: ".......If you wish to fight....do not take me lightly...."
Alexander: *Angry* "......"
Lucious: "I can feel him...him and you...you and Suzuka that is......."
Alexander: "........"
Lucious: "Suzuka.....what an old fool you have become.....you hold on to the past as if it is the present...."
*Flames begin to accumulate around Alexander, and Suzuka can be heard.*
Suzuka: "LUCIOUS YOU BASTARD !!! YOU SLY TOUNGED FOOL, ADOPTING THE POWER WE SO DISPISE...IS THIS YOUR FAITH !?"
Lucious: "......I did not "adopt"....it was "implanted"...and with it....life has grown ever..."
Suzuka: "I SHALL CUT YOUR THROAT !!!!"
Lucious: "Old fool....you have fallen from your grace.....for Uriel to see you now...."
Suzuka: "LUCIOUS !!!!!!"
Alexander: "Enough...Lucious is mine...."
Lucious: ".......Don't lie to yourself....to even put a scratch on me, you must "Invoke"...."
Alexander: "........."
Alexander: ("Suzuka....can you hear me....")
Suzuka: ("Boy, why do we let this fool talk.....he must be disposed of !!!")
Alexander: ("We shall...I shall kill him.....")
*Alexander bites his thumb and runs his blood along his blade.*
Alexander: "Burst Into Flames and Consume the Sky, Spirit of the Southern Realm, SUZUKA !!!!"
*As Alexander slides his hand over his katana, the blood lights into flames, and the old Katana reforms into a regal blade of fire.*
Lucious: "Come!"
Important Information: Honestly you may want to know a bit about this part of the game and the characters before you start reading and editing.
Alexander: Alexander is an Exorcist of The Order. He is an egotist, he is a cold, quiet, and demanding leader. In this part of the story he is the leader of a small squad assigned to retrieve and important piece of Military Equipment, known as The Nadleeh. Alexander is British
Jonas: Jonas accompanies Alexander on this Mission. He is normally a happy go lucky guy, and is found taking care of Ashley for the majority of the story. In terms of combat he is feared by Alexander due to his "killing intent". Rather than utilizing gun, Jonas is a Field Soldier, whom is fast enough to utilize Combat Knives in combat. Jonas is Australian
Ashley: Ashley is on Alexander's team along with Jonas. Ashley is a downer, a whiner, and isn't the best soldier, however he is believed to be a natural tactician. During times of decisive action, Ashley is unable to act, which make him appear weak.
The Nadleeh The Nadleeh is a piece of Military Technology and is currently in possession of the Israeli Government. This Nadleeh is one of 12 Known to exist in this time period. What is unknown to many is the actual purpose of The Nadleeh. This piece of technology is a biological weapon, and can be classified as a Homunculus, a being created by humans. The name Nadleeh is a term interchangeable with "Two-spirit," used by the Navajo tribes to denote a male spirit and a female spirit living in the same body. The Nadleeh in The Last Bible function as Homunculi which bear real form or shape. It is not until there genes are "Programmed" or come into contact with Human Flesh that they mimic and "Clone" their targets cells and appearance. Commander Jacksons team consisting of Alexander, Jonas, Ashley, and 15 other soldiers whom were killed in a bombing. There orders were to capture the Nadleeh and retrieve it to Rome, however one thing has lead to another, and the characters are in this current situation.
Last Bible Script
Scene #69:
Setting: Alexander, Jonas, and Ashley have defeated the Boss. The Beast begins to return to its Human form, allowing Mr. Misoto to regain consciousness. Ashley tries to calm him down, and Mr. Misoto gives Ashley the Key of Nadleeh, however as Mr. Misoto looks at the key, the Akuma Virus begins to spread and the Yokai and its Host fight one another for control. Human appendages flail in the air and the Yokai, enters is "Berserk" State, due to no consumption of food. In this state is begins to destroy everything in sight and blood gushes from the beast as it loses all control. Alexander orders Ashley to attack but Ashley hesitates and The Beast easily knocks him off the side of the platform. The Beast now looks at Jonas.
Quote
Jonas: "AHH!"
*Jonas rushes towards the foe with Combat Knife in hand.*
Alexander: "HALSE!"
*Jonas jumps into the air only to be impaled by a spike that emerges from The Beasts palm.*
Alexander: "..Damn It......Nadleeh....."
*Alexander draws his Katana and charges at the Beast. The two of them spar, but Alexander is knocked back. As he begins to "Invoke" Suzuka a shadow is seen over head, and a cloaked figure impales The Beast through the head from above.*
Alexander: *Shocked*
Jonas: *A heavily injured Jonas looks on at the beast.* "U..hhh..what the hell!?"
*Blood spews all around as The Beast, yells and screams, the figure baring a Female Figure withdraws her hand from The Beast's head, and begins to fire many SMG rounds at her foe. This sends the Beast falling off the platform.*
Alexander: "Impossible.....Who...who are you...of what affiliation do you seek..."
Cloaked Figure: "......."
*Alexander raises his blade.*
Alexander: "Speak now, or prepare to be eliminated!"
Cloaked Figure: "Nadleeh is ours....."
*Dramatic Music Start*
Alexander: "DIE !!!"
*Alexander rushes at the Cloaked Figure, the two clash, and the screen is surrounded in a flash. When its subsides, a Larger figure in a cloak appears between Alexander and the Feminine Figure. The Figure uses his arm to fend off Alexander's attack.*
Jonas: *Struggling to get up.* "Whha...what is going on?"
Larger Cloaked Figure: "Miphera, gather the Key, and let us be on our way."
*Dramatic Music Increase*
Alexander: *Looking up slowly* "..That voice....No....It...it...can't be....."
*Memory Flashes in Alexander's Mind*
Alexander: "You..you...are..."
Larger Cloaked Figure: "Dead?"
Larger Cloaked Figure: "No...Little Master.....I am very much alive....."
*As the Larger Cloaked Figure's Cloak reaches out to attack Alexander, Alexander jumps away.*
Alexander: "You..you...no (sharp rise in Alexander's voice)..you..are....dead...dead..."
*Alexander is Shocked*
Feminine Cloaked Figure: "Master....."
Larger Cloaked Figure: "...." *Turns away from Alexander*
*As the two Cloaked Figures proceed to leave Alexander yells.*
Alexander: "NO !!! Stop, Don't you dare turn away from me......"
Alexander: "How.....10 years....you are a Ghost.....HOW !!!!"
*The Larger Cloaked Figure stops.*
Large Cloaked Figure: "…Time..Time...has only prolonged my faith....."
Feminine Cloaked Figure: "Master...."
*The Feminine Cloaked Figure stops.*
Larger Cloaked Figure: "No..he deserves some time...."
*The Larger Cloaked Figure walks towards Alexander.*
Larger Cloaked Figure: "As I have said..time...has only prolonged my faith....your faith...the faith that we share."
Alexander: "There is no way....you...do not fuck with ME !!!"
*Alexander prepares for battle.*
Larger Cloaked Figure: "That tool....my faith...the curse..have you forgotten my words.....In that case...then."
Alexander: "You're not him !!!! You...you are an imposter !!!!"
*Alexander charges at the Larger Cloaked Figure, but the Figure dodges the attack, and appears behind Alexander.*
Larger Cloaked Figure: "....I am he..I...time...lets just say...I have been given a little extra time."
*The Larger Cloaked Figure removes the Mask on his face, revealing a beautiful face however part of his face still remains hidden by the Mask.*
Alexander: *Shocked*
*In shock Alexander drops to his knees, and starts to mumble.*
Larger Cloaked Figure: "......The same......, Miphera....let up depart..."
*The Larger Cloaked Figure and the Feminine Cloaked Figure leave the area, and the screen dims to black. For a mere moment, thoughts rush through Alexander's head, as he begins to talk to himself and hears screams, heart beats, killing, and lastly fire. With that the screen resurfaces, and Alexander now stands holding his Katana firmly.*
Alexander: "....If so....then...to hell with you....."
Alexander: "If so...then..to hell with you LUCIOUS !!!!"
*Alexander rushes away from the present area and follows the two Cloaked Figures. Leaving an injured Jonas who is struggling to stand.*
Jonas: "..Dammit....this whole mission.....Dammit....I...I..have to help Alexander...."
Jonas: *Coughs blood.* "...But......Ashley...."
Jonas: *Falls to the ground.*
Faint Voice: "..Uhhh...can..anyone hear me....."
Jonas: *Shocked* "......"
Faint Voice: "I...I can't hold on....ALEXANDER.....JONAS......."
Faint Voice: "I.....anyone...please...."
Jonas: ("Ashley...")
Jonas: "ASHLEY !!"
*Jonas struggles to rise.*
Ashley: "JONAS...IS THAT YOU!!"
*Jonas stands up and starts walking.*
Jonas: "ASHLEY WHERE THE HELL ARE YOU !?"
Ashley: "OVER HERE !!!"
Jonas: "!"
*Jonas walks towards the area where The Beast fell off. As he reaches this area he finds Ashley holding on to a piece of scrap metal.*
Jonas: "ASHLEY HOLD ON, I'LL LOOK FOR SOMETHING TO GET YOU UP HERE!"
Ashley: "JONAS....HURRY....I DON;T THINK...IT WILL HOLD...MUCH...!"
*Jonas grabs some wiring from the Reactor's circuits and ties it to the railing of the platform. Jonas throws the wire down and Ashley grabs onto it, he them holds on, as Jonas struggles to pull the wire up. As Jonas uses all of his strength his wounds open up, and he begins to bleed again. Jonas pulls hard, and Ashley manages to climb up. Once on the platform Ashley is shocked to see the damage, as well as a heavily injured Jonas who is struggling to see his friend.*
Ashley: "JONAS !!"
*Ashley rushes to Jonas and tries to help his friend from trembling again.*
Ashley: "Shit.....are you..."
Jonas: "Of course, that Akuma, did me in....but..its only a scratch..."
Ashley: "....Jonas.....you should.."
Jonas: "DON'T WORRY ABOUT ME!"
Jonas: "We got more important shit....Alexander...went all psycho and we lost The Nadleeh...."
Ashley: "!"
Ashley: "...Wha....we...where did he go..."
Jonas: "..We...we..were so close."
Ashley: "....Shut the hell up...We can still finish this mission..."
Jonas: "....fuck the Mission..that bastard Alexander...."
*Jonas' wound reopens.*
Ashley: "....You brick head...."
*Ashley withdraws a Bottle of Water, and a Medical Bandage.*
Jonas: "....."
Ashley: "...Drink some of this...and let's wrap it..."
*The screen fades to Black, and Ashley wraps Jonas' wounds. When it refades, Ashley is drinking from his Water Bottle.*
Ashley: "Well...I better get going...."
*Ashley checks his Handgun, and picks up some Ammo from the ground.*
Jonas: "..What the fuck do you think you're doing....?"
Ashley: "The Mission is not over......we have to return with all living members..."
*Ashley finishes the water bottle and begins to walk off.*
Jonas: "Where the hell are you going !!!"
Ashley: *Looks over his shoulder.* "Jonas....just stay there man...."
*Ashley runs off to follow Alexander and the screen fades to Black. When it resurfaces the Player will be able to control Ashley and must continue forward. Here one will notice many scratch and damage marks left by a sword, most likely Alexander's. They will continue forward for two more Maps, and then a cut scene will take place. The screen will fade, and reappear with The Larger Cloaked Figure in a dark room. He inserts a key into a small machine and air erupts from the machine. A glass container emerges and, The Larger Cloaked Figure touches it with his hand. However before he can turn the key, the Feminine Figure flies into the area followed by Alexander.*
Alexander: "LUCIOUS !!!"
*Alexander runs toward Lucious, but the Feminine Figure rushes to protect him, Alexander, quickly appears and reappears near Lucious. The Feminine Figure appears again to protect her Master, but Alexander slashes her sending her flying into some near by machines. Alexander is heavily panting.*
Lucious: "......."
Alexander: "DO NOT IGNORE ME !!!!"
Lucious: "....Little Master......"
Alexander: "DON'T CALL ME THAT !!!!"
*Alexander rushes towards Lucious and the two collide. Alexander's Katana presses against Lucious' Cloak which acts as a weapon.*
Lucious: "This tool...has its hatred consumed you too...?"
*Alexander and Lucious parry one another's attacks, and Alexander hurls many Fire Balls towards Lucious, whom represses them with a wave of his hand. Alexander soon, stabs his Katana into the ground and performs a string of hand seals. With that balls of fire materialize before him, and Alexander forces these Balls towards Lucious. They all connect, however as the smoke settles, Lucious is unscratched.*
Lucious: "Do you take me for a fool...Ellowsworth, was it not I whom possessed the greatest Craft Efficiency in The Order !?"
Alexander: *Draws his Katana* "..You...you are a Traitor....your foul mouth and monstrous figure....you devil...."
Lucious: ".....Do not come here to further question my path..young one...."
Alexander: "I have not....Lucious...I have come here...to kill you..."
Lucious: "I see....so The Order..has not forgotten about me...."
Alexander: "55 Civilians, 15 Exorcist, 1 Cardinal...you Lucious of Jerusalem shall never be forgotten, until your Sins are paid for in Blood."
Lucious: "Alexander...I did not come here to fight....I came to extend my life....I have to stay on this Earth a bit longer...God has a plan..."
Alexander: "DO NOT, Slander my Lord's name!!!"
Lucious: "........."
Alexander: "..DIE !!!!"
*Alexander launches at Lucious and prepares to attack, as he does, Lucious dodges, the attack, but Alexander has used the Double Image skill on Lucious. Lucious defends against Alexander's attack, and Alexander pushes off Lucious to prepare for another attack. The two continue this fashion of warping and clashing for 3 Times. After which Alexander gets angry and recklessly charges at Lucious. Lucious dodges the attack again, and Alexander begins swinging his Katana around, aimlessly, unable to even hit Lucious. And with the last strike, Lucious stops Alexander's Katana with his finger, and kicks Alexander in the stomach.*
Lucious: ".......If you wish to fight....do not take me lightly...."
Alexander: *Angry* "......"
Lucious: "I can feel him...him and you...you and Suzuka that is......."
Alexander: "........"
Lucious: "Suzuka.....what an old fool you have become.....you hold on to the past as if it is the present...."
*Flames begin to accumulate around Alexander, and Suzuka can be heard.*
Suzuka: "LUCIOUS YOU BASTARD !!! YOU SLY TOUNGED FOOL, ADOPTING THE POWER WE SO DISPISE...IS THIS YOUR FAITH !?"
Lucious: "......I did not "adopt"....it was "implanted"...and with it....life has grown ever..."
Suzuka: "I SHALL CUT YOUR THROAT !!!!"
Lucious: "Old fool....you have fallen from your grace.....for Uriel to see you now...."
Suzuka: "LUCIOUS !!!!!!"
Alexander: "Enough...Lucious is mine...."
Lucious: ".......Don't lie to yourself....to even put a scratch on me, you must "Invoke"...."
Alexander: "........."
Alexander: ("Suzuka....can you hear me....")
Suzuka: ("Boy, why do we let this fool talk.....he must be disposed of !!!")
Alexander: ("We shall...I shall kill him.....")
*Alexander bites his thumb and runs his blood along his blade.*
Alexander: "Burst Into Flames and Consume the Sky, Spirit of the Southern Realm, SUZUKA !!!!"
*As Alexander slides his hand over his katana, the blood lights into flames, and the old Katana reforms into a regal blade of fire.*
Lucious: "Come!"
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Name: The Last Bible
Progress: 25% (3 Chapters), 50% would be the Full Demo.
Background: The Last Bible
Idea Type: Script
Idea: Part 2
Progress: 25% (3 Chapters), 50% would be the Full Demo.
Background: The Last Bible
Idea Type: Script
Idea: Part 2
*Alexander disappears and reappears before Lucious' face, Alexander then kicks Lucious in the stomach, and Lucious falls back, only to be met with Alexander again. Alexander swings Suzuka and Lucious uses his cloak to defend him. The two begin to warp and clash again and again, and Alexander begins to emit strong Fire-Crafts which begin to engulf the area. Lucious protects himself, but Alexander's attack grow fiercer and faster. Unable to keep up with Alexander's movements, Alexander disappears and cuts at Lucious many times in a circle, creating a ring of fire. Lucious looks around in order to attack, but Alexander is too fast to be touched. Alexander soon attacks from the air, and Lucious dodges. As Alexander lands on the ground, he begins to fire many beams of energy from his blade, they beams are deflected and the area around is severely damaged. As Lucious believes the attack is over, Alexander charges all his energy to his blade creating a bird of flames and fires the attack at Lucious. The attack is so great that it overcomes Lucious' defenses and erupts consuming the entire room in flames. The screen fades and when it refades, the Player will see a kneeling Ashley.*
Ashley: ("Uhhh, what the fuck....")
*Ashley runs into the next room, where he sees a heavily panting Alexander, and the entire area in ruins.*
Alexander: *Panting*
Ashley: *Looking Around* "ALEXANDER !!!"
*As Ashley runs towards Alexander.*
Alexander: "YOU FOOL GET BACK !!!!"
*As Ashley is running an uninjured Lucious emerges from the smoke, in the direction of Ashley who is near Alexander. Alexander warps in front of Ashley and uses his sword to deflect the damage, but Lucious' force is so great both of them fall back.*
Alexander: *Panting* "YOU FOOL...we are in combat !"
Ashley: *Shocked* "S...s.."
Alexander: "Shut the hell up...We have to get the Nadleeh."
Ashley: "..That..that thing is Nadleeh......"
Alexander: ".....In its early stages....here's the plan...I'll hold him off, and you run across the platform and turn that key...."
Ashley: "......"
Lucious: "..Is that all you have Alexander..."
Alexander: " YOU WILL DIE AT MY HANDS !!!"
*Alexander sends a Blade Beam at Lucious and disappears to fight him. As this happen Ashley runs over to the free standing Platform to turn the Key of Nadleeh, however as he approaches, Miphera rushes at him to strike. Ashley dodges the attack, but Miphera kicks him in the stomach. Miphera points her fingers at Ashley and begins to fire shots at him, however Ashley run to avoid them and fires shots from his hand gun at Miphera. Alexander and Lucious collide, and land on opposite sides of the room.*
Lucious: ".....Are you done yet ?"
Alexander: *Panting* "......." *Smiles*
*As Lucious strokes the hair from his face, Alexander disappears and reappear in front of Lucious, cutting his face, and using a Fire-Type Craft on Lucious Point Blank. Lucious falls to the ground, and Alexander proceeds to finish him off.*
Alexander: "....In the end....you could never do more than talk..."
*Alexander draws his Katana and prepares to strike Lucious, when Miphera rushes to protect her Master, leaving Ashley free to turn the key.*
Lucious: "...You fool..."
*Lucious knocks Miphera out of the way, and disappears carrying Alexander straight into a steel pipe. In the process Alexander drops Suzuka, and Lucious' cloak hardens and strike Alexander many times while Lucious begins to chock Alexander.*
Lucious: "With your eyes.....your hatred...you will never lay a finger on me...."
Lucious: "Your heart is as black as the Yokai you kill...."
Alexander: *Struggling* "Uggghh...go to hell..."
*Alexander attempts to punch Lucious, however Lucious stops this attack and breaks Alexander his hand.*
Alexander: *Coughs blood.* "ASHLEY NOW !!!!"
*Ashley darts toward the glass tube and prepares to turn the key, as Ashley's hand touch the key Lucious disappears and appears before Ashley, who is shocked and turns to see Lucious. Before Ashley can react, Lucious strikes straight through Ashley with his hand.* (This process will be done in slow motion to capture the shock on Ashley's face, and the anger in Lucious' eyes.)
Ashley: "Ughh....how..how......!"
Lucious: "......(Those eyes....)..."
Ashley: "....Uggh,..Ale..xa..."
*Ashley struggles as Lucious tries to pull his hand from Ashley's chest, but Ashley stabs, Lucious in the neck with his knife.*
Lucious: "Ahhh......" (Lucious is in great pain.)
*Ashley continues to dig his knife into Lucious' neck, and Lucious lets out a yell.*
Lucious: "...Stopp....stop...it..."
Ashley: "Uh...hhhh...f..ffuck...you !!"
Lucious: "AHHHHHHH!!!!"
*Lucious creates a powerful wave of energy which blasts Ashley back into the glass tubing cracking the glass, water and smoke spew from the glass.*
Lucious: *Shocked* "NO !!!"
Lucious: "....The Nadleeh has been exposed.....no....."
*Lucious falls to the ground staying there for a while. He mumbles a bit, and staggers as he gets up. Lucious soon stands as he turns away, an injured Jonas wielding Suzuka impales Lucious through the stomach.*
Jonas: "Go...to..hell..."
Lucious: *Coughs up blood.*
*Jonas drives the blade further into Lucious and blood spews all over Jonas' face.*
Lucious: "..I WILL DESTROY YOU !!!!!!"
*An orb of energy consumes Jonas and Lucious and the two explode. The light consumes the areas and the mechanical bridge is disintegrated. When the screen refades, Lucious floats above from the rubble. Once Lucious lands on the ground, his skin begins to heal itself and all his wounds are recovered.*
Lucious: *Looks at Miphera.* "Miphera...."
Miphera: *Arises* "Yes, Master...."
Lucious: "How are your wounds....."
Miphera: "None."
Lucious: "....Activate this reactor to detonate....we are done here."
Miphera: "Yes my Lord"
Lucious: "Then...."
*Lucious falls to the ground.*
Miphera: "Master!"
*Miphera rushes to Lucious' side as blood drips from his mouth.*
Miphera: "My Blood, my Lord...."
Lucious: "...No my Lily...."*Strokes Miphera's face.*"Soon, I shall be reborn again....for now..let us clean up our trail...."
Miphera: "......Master..."
*A figure steps into the destroyed area.*
Figure: "...What a touching sight...."
*Lucious and Miphera look up in shock.*
Lucious: "You...."
*The Figure steps out of the shadows and appears before Lucious and Miphera.*
Lucious: "Yamato....kun....."
Figure: "Yokai."
*Lucious stands up, and Miphera aids him.*
Takashi: "........."
Lucious: "Its been 10 Years....."
Takashi: "............"
Lucious: "And all of use together......, I knew who he was as soon as I saw his eyes...."
Takashi: "!"
Lucious: "Oh...you did not know....Miphera."
Miphera: "Yes."
*Miphera steps out in front of Takashi, as Lucious moves towards Ashley's body.*
Lucious: "Familiar to you...."
*Before Lucious can even move to Ashley, Takashi appears in front of him.*
Takashi: ("........Ashley....")
Lucious: "......."
Takashi: "....I see.......you did all of this....."
Lucious: *Steps back.* "No....young Ellowsworth, I merely deflected everything."
Takashi: "....The mission....."
Lucious: "You have not come to collect your brother...but you have come for it..."
Takashi: "Ashley came here on his own, I merely have come to collect the trash.....Lucious..."
Lucious: "......."
*Takashi draws a gun and Miphera flies as she prepares to attack Takashi. Time slows down, and Takashi fires his gun. The bullet splits 8 Ways, and hits Miphera. When the time returns Miphera falls to the ground surrounded in her own blood.*
Lucious: "........"
Takashi: "....Lucious......either you leave now....or I will kill you....though a scratch may not reach you skin from the hands of a human....I will destroy your body to the point that, "The Virus" will reduce your mind to oblivion."
Lucious: "........."
*Lucious' cape flows in the wind, and he unveils his hands. Ten rings lay out Lucious' fingers and a sword to his side. Takashi removes he jacket, unveiling himself to Lucious. The two meet eye to eye and strike. Both of which stand up and face one another.*
Lucious: "............"
Takashi: ".......You have become weak....."
Lucious: ".......You as well....."
*Blood spews from Lucious.*
Takashi: "...Take her and leave......"
Lucious: "........" *Looks over at the struggling Miphera*
Takashi: "As for The Nadleeh."
Lucious: "..........It has been exposed...."
Takashi: ".......Then this reactor must be destroyed......"
Lucious: "Yes....you know..I will not stop....simply sparing me will not make me stop."
Takashi: *Turns his back to Lucious.* "........."
*Lucious gets to his feet and goes to Miphera whom he carries. The two disappear and Takashi is left looking at the destruction.*
Takashi: "......Ashley........"
*The screen fades to black, and the Chapter ends.*
Ashley: ("Uhhh, what the fuck....")
*Ashley runs into the next room, where he sees a heavily panting Alexander, and the entire area in ruins.*
Alexander: *Panting*
Ashley: *Looking Around* "ALEXANDER !!!"
*As Ashley runs towards Alexander.*
Alexander: "YOU FOOL GET BACK !!!!"
*As Ashley is running an uninjured Lucious emerges from the smoke, in the direction of Ashley who is near Alexander. Alexander warps in front of Ashley and uses his sword to deflect the damage, but Lucious' force is so great both of them fall back.*
Alexander: *Panting* "YOU FOOL...we are in combat !"
Ashley: *Shocked* "S...s.."
Alexander: "Shut the hell up...We have to get the Nadleeh."
Ashley: "..That..that thing is Nadleeh......"
Alexander: ".....In its early stages....here's the plan...I'll hold him off, and you run across the platform and turn that key...."
Ashley: "......"
Lucious: "..Is that all you have Alexander..."
Alexander: " YOU WILL DIE AT MY HANDS !!!"
*Alexander sends a Blade Beam at Lucious and disappears to fight him. As this happen Ashley runs over to the free standing Platform to turn the Key of Nadleeh, however as he approaches, Miphera rushes at him to strike. Ashley dodges the attack, but Miphera kicks him in the stomach. Miphera points her fingers at Ashley and begins to fire shots at him, however Ashley run to avoid them and fires shots from his hand gun at Miphera. Alexander and Lucious collide, and land on opposite sides of the room.*
Lucious: ".....Are you done yet ?"
Alexander: *Panting* "......." *Smiles*
*As Lucious strokes the hair from his face, Alexander disappears and reappear in front of Lucious, cutting his face, and using a Fire-Type Craft on Lucious Point Blank. Lucious falls to the ground, and Alexander proceeds to finish him off.*
Alexander: "....In the end....you could never do more than talk..."
*Alexander draws his Katana and prepares to strike Lucious, when Miphera rushes to protect her Master, leaving Ashley free to turn the key.*
Lucious: "...You fool..."
*Lucious knocks Miphera out of the way, and disappears carrying Alexander straight into a steel pipe. In the process Alexander drops Suzuka, and Lucious' cloak hardens and strike Alexander many times while Lucious begins to chock Alexander.*
Lucious: "With your eyes.....your hatred...you will never lay a finger on me...."
Lucious: "Your heart is as black as the Yokai you kill...."
Alexander: *Struggling* "Uggghh...go to hell..."
*Alexander attempts to punch Lucious, however Lucious stops this attack and breaks Alexander his hand.*
Alexander: *Coughs blood.* "ASHLEY NOW !!!!"
*Ashley darts toward the glass tube and prepares to turn the key, as Ashley's hand touch the key Lucious disappears and appears before Ashley, who is shocked and turns to see Lucious. Before Ashley can react, Lucious strikes straight through Ashley with his hand.* (This process will be done in slow motion to capture the shock on Ashley's face, and the anger in Lucious' eyes.)
Ashley: "Ughh....how..how......!"
Lucious: "......(Those eyes....)..."
Ashley: "....Uggh,..Ale..xa..."
*Ashley struggles as Lucious tries to pull his hand from Ashley's chest, but Ashley stabs, Lucious in the neck with his knife.*
Lucious: "Ahhh......" (Lucious is in great pain.)
*Ashley continues to dig his knife into Lucious' neck, and Lucious lets out a yell.*
Lucious: "...Stopp....stop...it..."
Ashley: "Uh...hhhh...f..ffuck...you !!"
Lucious: "AHHHHHHH!!!!"
*Lucious creates a powerful wave of energy which blasts Ashley back into the glass tubing cracking the glass, water and smoke spew from the glass.*
Lucious: *Shocked* "NO !!!"
Lucious: "....The Nadleeh has been exposed.....no....."
*Lucious falls to the ground staying there for a while. He mumbles a bit, and staggers as he gets up. Lucious soon stands as he turns away, an injured Jonas wielding Suzuka impales Lucious through the stomach.*
Jonas: "Go...to..hell..."
Lucious: *Coughs up blood.*
*Jonas drives the blade further into Lucious and blood spews all over Jonas' face.*
Lucious: "..I WILL DESTROY YOU !!!!!!"
*An orb of energy consumes Jonas and Lucious and the two explode. The light consumes the areas and the mechanical bridge is disintegrated. When the screen refades, Lucious floats above from the rubble. Once Lucious lands on the ground, his skin begins to heal itself and all his wounds are recovered.*
Lucious: *Looks at Miphera.* "Miphera...."
Miphera: *Arises* "Yes, Master...."
Lucious: "How are your wounds....."
Miphera: "None."
Lucious: "....Activate this reactor to detonate....we are done here."
Miphera: "Yes my Lord"
Lucious: "Then...."
*Lucious falls to the ground.*
Miphera: "Master!"
*Miphera rushes to Lucious' side as blood drips from his mouth.*
Miphera: "My Blood, my Lord...."
Lucious: "...No my Lily...."*Strokes Miphera's face.*"Soon, I shall be reborn again....for now..let us clean up our trail...."
Miphera: "......Master..."
*A figure steps into the destroyed area.*
Figure: "...What a touching sight...."
*Lucious and Miphera look up in shock.*
Lucious: "You...."
*The Figure steps out of the shadows and appears before Lucious and Miphera.*
Lucious: "Yamato....kun....."
Figure: "Yokai."
*Lucious stands up, and Miphera aids him.*
Takashi: "........."
Lucious: "Its been 10 Years....."
Takashi: "............"
Lucious: "And all of use together......, I knew who he was as soon as I saw his eyes...."
Takashi: "!"
Lucious: "Oh...you did not know....Miphera."
Miphera: "Yes."
*Miphera steps out in front of Takashi, as Lucious moves towards Ashley's body.*
Lucious: "Familiar to you...."
*Before Lucious can even move to Ashley, Takashi appears in front of him.*
Takashi: ("........Ashley....")
Lucious: "......."
Takashi: "....I see.......you did all of this....."
Lucious: *Steps back.* "No....young Ellowsworth, I merely deflected everything."
Takashi: "....The mission....."
Lucious: "You have not come to collect your brother...but you have come for it..."
Takashi: "Ashley came here on his own, I merely have come to collect the trash.....Lucious..."
Lucious: "......."
*Takashi draws a gun and Miphera flies as she prepares to attack Takashi. Time slows down, and Takashi fires his gun. The bullet splits 8 Ways, and hits Miphera. When the time returns Miphera falls to the ground surrounded in her own blood.*
Lucious: "........"
Takashi: "....Lucious......either you leave now....or I will kill you....though a scratch may not reach you skin from the hands of a human....I will destroy your body to the point that, "The Virus" will reduce your mind to oblivion."
Lucious: "........."
*Lucious' cape flows in the wind, and he unveils his hands. Ten rings lay out Lucious' fingers and a sword to his side. Takashi removes he jacket, unveiling himself to Lucious. The two meet eye to eye and strike. Both of which stand up and face one another.*
Lucious: "............"
Takashi: ".......You have become weak....."
Lucious: ".......You as well....."
*Blood spews from Lucious.*
Takashi: "...Take her and leave......"
Lucious: "........" *Looks over at the struggling Miphera*
Takashi: "As for The Nadleeh."
Lucious: "..........It has been exposed...."
Takashi: ".......Then this reactor must be destroyed......"
Lucious: "Yes....you know..I will not stop....simply sparing me will not make me stop."
Takashi: *Turns his back to Lucious.* "........."
*Lucious gets to his feet and goes to Miphera whom he carries. The two disappear and Takashi is left looking at the destruction.*
Takashi: "......Ashley........"
*The screen fades to black, and the Chapter ends.*
I've got Pimp coming along good.
Name:
Pimp
Progress:
Version 0.1: Battle Demo released.
Background:
Pimp Main Page
I need some ideas for sub-characters, so I guess that would be:
Idea Type:
Character Conceptualization
Idea:
Also, I could use appropriate charsets or chipsets, like policemen or vehicles.
Name:
Pimp
Progress:
Version 0.1: Battle Demo released.
Background:
Pimp Main Page
I need some ideas for sub-characters, so I guess that would be:
Idea Type:
Character Conceptualization
Idea:
I need characters for several distinct areas:
The Hood: A lower-class district that normally houses the hoodlums and thugs, such as Lil' Pimp and Ralphie.
The Suburbs: Acts as a buffer zone between the lower-class Hood and Middle-class Residential Zone. A lot of seedy deals and seedier dealers can be found here, along with a bunch of robberies, and even a branch of the Yakuza.
The Residential: A zone for the middle-class, no worries, Brady-Bunch families. Most of the legit businesses are found here, and most of the problems are finance-related (i.e. mortgages, taxes, loans, and credit cards, etc.)
The Outposts: Found in the extreme south and east of the map, these are City experiments at desert reclamation. Out here are mostly former Hood or Suburb residents looking to escape the crime of their former residences, however, they tend to bring the crime with them.
The North End: A logging complex found near the north of the map (wow). Not surprisingly, the complex is populated by loggers and their families. It's not important to the story, merely serving as a side-location.
The Hood: A lower-class district that normally houses the hoodlums and thugs, such as Lil' Pimp and Ralphie.
The Suburbs: Acts as a buffer zone between the lower-class Hood and Middle-class Residential Zone. A lot of seedy deals and seedier dealers can be found here, along with a bunch of robberies, and even a branch of the Yakuza.
The Residential: A zone for the middle-class, no worries, Brady-Bunch families. Most of the legit businesses are found here, and most of the problems are finance-related (i.e. mortgages, taxes, loans, and credit cards, etc.)
The Outposts: Found in the extreme south and east of the map, these are City experiments at desert reclamation. Out here are mostly former Hood or Suburb residents looking to escape the crime of their former residences, however, they tend to bring the crime with them.
The North End: A logging complex found near the north of the map (wow). Not surprisingly, the complex is populated by loggers and their families. It's not important to the story, merely serving as a side-location.
Also, I could use appropriate charsets or chipsets, like policemen or vehicles.
Name: Somnium Episode 1: Instituion
Progress: 5%
Background: A group of high schoolers develop the power to enter the dreams and minds of those who they meet.
Idea Type:School Aspect
Idea:
Progress: 5%
Background: A group of high schoolers develop the power to enter the dreams and minds of those who they meet.
Idea Type:School Aspect
Idea:
The game does not force you to play an dungeons after the introductory part. Although to progress through the game you do need to beat the levels and such. But basically at night you do the levels if you want while in the day you got o school and the game takes over as a sim from there. In school you will answer questions, take tests and ultimatley learn which raises your intelligence. You do or might not have the option to skip school, which will result in detention. Also by going to school and by doing certain classes you will increase your stats as well. Making school another great palce to train your character. Here you will also make friends and mantain your relationships through jobs missions and side quests which ultimatley needs you to gain 100% on their relationship which means you attatin them as a best friend as well as other relationship and attain special items for doing so.This can also be in reverse as certain side quests will raise others while lowering some. So the player will ahve to maintain and control a level of it.
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@NoblemanNick:
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1. Honestly I think dungeons should be forced. Take Persona 3 as an example, on certain nights you have to go to a dungeon. If dungeons are not mandatory the player will loss focus.
2. I think Items are not the best reward to receive for Relationships. If you do add Nightmares early on to the game, have Relationships shape your Nightmare's appearance. Basically treating each Nightmare as a Character in the Party, the Nightmare's limbs and body parts would be similar to equipment which would be shaped based on enemies you absorb, fight, and the relationships you craft.
2. I think Items are not the best reward to receive for Relationships. If you do add Nightmares early on to the game, have Relationships shape your Nightmare's appearance. Basically treating each Nightmare as a Character in the Party, the Nightmare's limbs and body parts would be similar to equipment which would be shaped based on enemies you absorb, fight, and the relationships you craft.
author=Ashramaru link=topic=1809.msg28783#msg28783 date=1220125948
Name: The Last Bible
Progress: 25% (3 Chapters), 50% would be the Full Demo.
Background: The Last Bible
Idea Type: Script
Feedback: (applies to both parts)
There's times where Less = Better. This is definetly one of those cases; The script is incredibly verbose. I'd suggest making of copy of the script and trying to rewrite every line so that it isn't so long. Cut unnessesary lines as needed.
Also please cut down on the ellipses. There's like five million of them. Same with captalizing entire lines. I know its meant to be SUPER SCREAMING AT THE TOP OF YOUR LUNGS but it still looks rediculous.
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