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"MY NEMESIS:" A POEM
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CloseI wrote this poem in college five years ago (I am getting so old) and since its the only poem I've ever written that I actually liked, and since it depicts a situation I am sure we can all identify with, I thought I'd share.
I hate writing poetry as a rule and haven't done it in eons, and this obviously isn't a serious attempt at "real" poetry (whatever that actually means) so you can critique if you want I guess but I am not attempting to hone my technique or anything.
My Nemesis
Pallid casing,
dusty layers, dangling thendrils,
but darkness within
"Job Spooling"
Rays of twilight,
Chromatic spray,
Capturing the light I create
"Paper Jam"
You screech to life
Whine in pain, the scream of a demon
Processing the night's labor
"Ink Cartridge Empty"
Recalcitrance
Why do you resist?
An agent aligned against me
"No Connection"
Metallic chrome organs
dark heart of colors,
a blinking light of mockery
"Paper Tray Empty"
Dawn approaches
The sun paints you with blood
Cursed machine
"No Device Detected"
I hate writing poetry as a rule and haven't done it in eons, and this obviously isn't a serious attempt at "real" poetry (whatever that actually means) so you can critique if you want I guess but I am not attempting to hone my technique or anything.
My Nemesis
Pallid casing,
dusty layers, dangling thendrils,
but darkness within
"Job Spooling"
Rays of twilight,
Chromatic spray,
Capturing the light I create
"Paper Jam"
You screech to life
Whine in pain, the scream of a demon
Processing the night's labor
"Ink Cartridge Empty"
Recalcitrance
Why do you resist?
An agent aligned against me
"No Connection"
Metallic chrome organs
dark heart of colors,
a blinking light of mockery
"Paper Tray Empty"
Dawn approaches
The sun paints you with blood
Cursed machine
"No Device Detected"
I suppose this is the most artistic way I have ever seen a paper jam lamented upon
So that's why you're like that...
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(I am getting so old)
So that's why you're like that...
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So that's why you're like that...
It will happen to you, too! It will happen to all of you...
But, if that was your intention--to make it whimsical and cumbersome to comprehend, yet to keep the reader on track with the ** statements--then nevermind; it's pretty good.
Also, your structure and choice of words gives it some merit too.
EDIT: Also, I remembered that I have written stuff that I'd consider whimsical myself, so fuck. 8/
I read it a second and third time. Scratch all that shit I said. It's good.
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