DAKURAITA'S PROFILE

author=kentona
what do you think of tech?

It's cool, but I can't understand it ^^'

author=Liberty
Sometimes it's best just to leap in and try stuff out. Make a new project and just mess around in it - see what everything does by using it. A lot can be done with eventing - more than enough to create a game with, without the use of scripts. ^.^

Yeah, I've tried exactly that, but I just can't seem to get it right. I've made several attempts, and I can't even get the character to move or even the stage right ^^'. It probably seems like I'm making excuses, but I know my limits and I know when I need to ask for help. I've never done anything tech-related other than talk to people, game, type up stories, and post drawings from paper online. I've done many attempts and experiments and asked my friends for advice, but it never works out, which is why I'm asking for help since I know after countless frustrating attempts and headaches and dizziness from trying to comprehend that I can't do it.

I actually had a partner before, but he went rogue and did ridiculous and immature things, so that's why I've been searching ever since summer break while still trying to get the hang of making games, I ended up here. I'm awkward and brief as a person with a very naive mindset which is equal to that of a child's and oversimplify things and can pretty much mainly understand very simple and straightforward instructions, which may also explain why I can't understand the many functions there are to making games despite trying for about two years.

This wouldn't be good as an RPG adventure, but it'd be cool as an interactive fiction for the beginning half. The story's a bit cliche in my opinion, but then again I just read a lot, so what do I know? :I

Anyways, the ending's a bit loose-ended and the story flow's clunky. The story's a predictable one, so I suggest adding a few extra factors to change up the story rather than making it straight forward. Treasures are also cliche and can be deemed unnecessary since not all adventures are about treasures but still fantastic nevertheless.

The second half of the story, I see no direction or important purpose other than that it was shoehorned in to extend to story. Longer stories don't necessarily mean better, just saying. It's better to end it off at the ripe time rather than extend it longer without a specific direction.If you ended with the king dying it'd be better than just extending it with the wizard and the princess. I suggest you include the princess and wizard in the first half of the story somehow for a different purpose, like you have to kill the wizard in order to get the poison and the princess is a healer/Wicca that helps you out in battle, but do not shoehorn it in if you can't include it.

Your grammar could use improvements, but it's not too important here since we're just looking at the story. However, I do suggest diversifying your words so it'll make people more interested in it.

Also, the protagonist's name is a bit plain, especially since he's a warrior. Usually names like Alex are better for people like in school settings, but even then the name doesn't draw as much attention unless you somehow find a specific reason as to why they chose that name so the name has more impact on the player/reader. The torment methods are a bit cliche, but I'm a fan of necrophiliac villains, though the sadism is a bit extreme in the story and it dropped my interest.

I hope this isn't too harsh on you, but there is quite a bit of stuff you need to fix to improve the story's quality. Good luck~ :3

Uwhoa, I'm amazed at how many people are drawing on the computer now O_o Though I'm a traditional artist, it's pretty awesome to see digital drawings x3 Also, happy new years everybody, hope you have a great one!

Haha, it's fine for derailing the thread, it happens whenever I have a conversation, so I'm good. Plus, it's nice to see people talk and resolve conflicts. :3