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Is the game finished ? If yes, will there be a downloadable version where the four chapters will be put into one folder (RAR/ZIP/etc.) ? If no, what is left to be done ?
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Nightmare of The Snow 雪の悪夢
I agree with nhubi that capital/small letters are grammar mistakes. The capitalisation isn't the only kind of mistake that I've seen. I notice also "plural mistake", some "'s" that were missing, misspelled words and so on. I count the mistakes without capitalisation and I got like 76. If I add capitalisation mistakes, I reach 139 (63 alone). That's why I asked what went wrong with the proofreading. I would be fine if they were like 4-5 mistakes for chapter 0 after proofreading because they're not robots after all. But here, it's like it had been read with closed eyes or it was rushed. So, I felt quite disappointed when I notice all of these.
In my opinion, rushing a game isn't really a good idea. I know that it can be really boring to have to go throught the texts again and again to correct mistakes, but for me, it's important to "polish" a game to give it a better view (like nhubi said) than rather than completing it by going in "fast-forward mode".
EDIT : The reason why I give so much informations about bugs and mistakes is that I see in this game great potential of being popular and a "hit" in the RPG Maker world like Mad Father and Ib.
In my opinion, rushing a game isn't really a good idea. I know that it can be really boring to have to go throught the texts again and again to correct mistakes, but for me, it's important to "polish" a game to give it a better view (like nhubi said) than rather than completing it by going in "fast-forward mode".
EDIT : The reason why I give so much informations about bugs and mistakes is that I see in this game great potential of being popular and a "hit" in the RPG Maker world like Mad Father and Ib.
Nightmare of The Snow 雪の悪夢
Nightmare of The Snow 雪の悪夢
Part 2 of my finding :
Capital "D" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
Capital "H" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
A "s" after "research" since it's more than one.
In the text, "Kuchisake-onna" should have a capital "K" since it's a name and a hyphen (-) since "onna" it's a suffix for "woman". The mistake happens several times. A space should be put between "in" and "front".
It's "carries" instead of "carry". I think it would be better if that part was "she is always carrying".
A "s" after bathroom since there are many of them.
Result without a "s".
Add a "s" to "ask" since it's the third person in simple present.
"proved" instead of "proofs". For the part in blue, I suggest "Ao Oni's existence" to take least place. Lastly, there's more than one oni or there is a single one ? The beginning suggest that there's one but the "them" suggest otherwise.
No "are" and exist with a "s".
Capital "H" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
The plural of phenomenon is phenomena.
No comma (,).
In the text, "Nure-onna" should have a capital "K" since it's a name and a hyphen (-) since "onna" it's a suffix for "woman". The mistake happens several times. Same problem that the Ao Oni one. There's one and now, "them" let suggest that they're more.
"victim" with a "s" since there's more than one. Nure-onna with a small "o" and a hyphen (-) between "Nure" and "onna".
Same issue for Nure-onna and the them that suggest that there's more than one. An "is" is missing between "This" and "one". "victim" with a "s"
Small "y".
"wear" with a "s".
Small "r", "b" and "p".
Small "r" and "p".
Small "b" and "p".
No comma (,) needed.
"somewhere" instead of "somethere".
There should be an "a" between "is" and "man".
No "only" since completely indicate all the village. No "where". The second "the killer" should be replace by "He" since it's getting repetitive.
The second sentence repeats what the first one already mentionned.
Small "r" and "c".
Small "r" and "c".
Hyphen (-) between "pop" and "up". Small "r".
Small "r".
Retrieve "is".
"Kuchisake-onna" should have a capital "K" since it's a name and a hyphen (-) since "onna" it's a suffix for "woman".
"Nure-onna" should have a capital "K" since it's a name and a hyphen (-) since "onna" it's a suffix for "woman". For the rest, small letters.
Capital "T" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
The sentence sounds off.
A comma (,) is missing between "Okay" and "I'm". Mom should have a small "m".
Sorry for the double long post filled with image but I like to show the image where I spot the mistakes.
And... that's only chapter zero. I've seen chapter one and it's not going to be good either :|. If I were to go on on the chase of mistake, I fear that I will flood the forum with a big list. I don't know what went wrong with proofreading...
Capital "D" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
Capital "H" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
A "s" after "research" since it's more than one.
In the text, "Kuchisake-onna" should have a capital "K" since it's a name and a hyphen (-) since "onna" it's a suffix for "woman". The mistake happens several times. A space should be put between "in" and "front".
It's "carries" instead of "carry". I think it would be better if that part was "she is always carrying".
A "s" after bathroom since there are many of them.
Result without a "s".
Add a "s" to "ask" since it's the third person in simple present.
"proved" instead of "proofs". For the part in blue, I suggest "Ao Oni's existence" to take least place. Lastly, there's more than one oni or there is a single one ? The beginning suggest that there's one but the "them" suggest otherwise.
No "are" and exist with a "s".
Capital "H" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
The plural of phenomenon is phenomena.
No comma (,).
In the text, "Nure-onna" should have a capital "K" since it's a name and a hyphen (-) since "onna" it's a suffix for "woman". The mistake happens several times. Same problem that the Ao Oni one. There's one and now, "them" let suggest that they're more.
"victim" with a "s" since there's more than one. Nure-onna with a small "o" and a hyphen (-) between "Nure" and "onna".
Same issue for Nure-onna and the them that suggest that there's more than one. An "is" is missing between "This" and "one". "victim" with a "s"
Small "y".
"wear" with a "s".
Small "r", "b" and "p".
Small "r" and "p".
Small "b" and "p".
No comma (,) needed.
"somewhere" instead of "somethere".
There should be an "a" between "is" and "man".
No "only" since completely indicate all the village. No "where". The second "the killer" should be replace by "He" since it's getting repetitive.
The second sentence repeats what the first one already mentionned.
Small "r" and "c".
Small "r" and "c".
Hyphen (-) between "pop" and "up". Small "r".
Small "r".
Retrieve "is".
"Kuchisake-onna" should have a capital "K" since it's a name and a hyphen (-) since "onna" it's a suffix for "woman".
"Nure-onna" should have a capital "K" since it's a name and a hyphen (-) since "onna" it's a suffix for "woman". For the rest, small letters.
Capital "T" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
The sentence sounds off.
A comma (,) is missing between "Okay" and "I'm". Mom should have a small "m".
Sorry for the double long post filled with image but I like to show the image where I spot the mistakes.
And... that's only chapter zero. I've seen chapter one and it's not going to be good either :|. If I were to go on on the chase of mistake, I fear that I will flood the forum with a big list. I don't know what went wrong with proofreading...
Nightmare of The Snow 雪の悪夢
Okay, I finish chapter zero and... I'm wondering what went wrong with the proofreading :|. There's like many mistakes that could have been spotted... I also found some bugs. Here I go :
I feel like it should be Nightmare of the Snow. I don't know. Maybe it's just me.
Capital "I" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
Capital "W" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
Here's a bug where Yuuki can go throught the wall.
It's World War II with capital "W" since it's a big event that happened in the history.
Capital "S" and a comma (,) after the "So".
Small "m" and a space between "in" and "front".
A "s" is missing after "web".
I don't know if it's a bug or not, but I can pass by these white spot everywhere in the mansion except this very spot.
Small "m" and a space between "in" and "front".
A comma (,) is missing between "1883" and "there"
There's a "'s" that should go to Kirihara since the mansion belong to them. Room takes a "s" since they're many of them.
That part should be rewrite because it sounds off.
I think "trap" should be plural since it is a kind of trap and there's many of them.
Replace "the" by "to". Also, there's a missing comma (,) that should go between "sometimes" and "the".
A "'s" should go after Kirihara since it's their family. The rest of the paragraph sound a little off.
Short "w" and "s". They would be capital if it was pointing out a specific country.
The spikes are visible for a second when you enter the room.
Small "m" and a space between "in" and "front".
The spikes are visible for a second when you enter the room.
Small "m" and a space between "in" and "front".
Between "right", "?" and "Did", spaces are missing. For the word underline in blue, it sound a little off but that's maybe me.
Small "w".
Small "s".
A "s" should be after novel since there are many of them.
A "s" should be after medicine since there are many of them.
A "s" should be after newspaper since there are many of them.
A comma (,) should be between "least" and "I".
A "s" should be after book since it's "some" of them.
It's "scratch" since she just did it. It would be "scratched" if she had done it a few minute ago.
Short "s" for "set" and a "s" added to "utensil".
It should be "its" (and not it's (it is)) since it's the mirror that is doing its job.
Capital "T" since Yuuki just begin her sentence. Also, a comma (,) should be between "then" and "you".
It's "is" and not "it's" because the sentence continue. The comma should go between "Meanwhile" and "you" and not between "you" and "are".
Capital "Y" to "you" since she begins the sentence. By kept and sealed, it sounds like she was trapped inside of Yuuki for a long time. Is that the case ? If not, it's "keeps" and "seals".
Capital "B" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
Capital "S" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
Capital "M" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
Capital "T" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
In this image, Yuuki can't move from a specific spot in the stair. For the rest, she can move freely.
Yuuki's house : Capital letter after the dots. (It-It says 8:03 (or 8:07 AM) instead of it-it says)
A "s" should be after novel since there are many of them.
A "s" should be after novel since there are many of them. (Happned to the three bookshelves's spot).
Capital "T" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
Small "p".
Small "p".
I feel like it should be Nightmare of the Snow. I don't know. Maybe it's just me.
Capital "I" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
Capital "W" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
Here's a bug where Yuuki can go throught the wall.
It's World War II with capital "W" since it's a big event that happened in the history.
Capital "S" and a comma (,) after the "So".
Small "m" and a space between "in" and "front".
A "s" is missing after "web".
I don't know if it's a bug or not, but I can pass by these white spot everywhere in the mansion except this very spot.
Small "m" and a space between "in" and "front".
A comma (,) is missing between "1883" and "there"
There's a "'s" that should go to Kirihara since the mansion belong to them. Room takes a "s" since they're many of them.
That part should be rewrite because it sounds off.
I think "trap" should be plural since it is a kind of trap and there's many of them.
Replace "the" by "to". Also, there's a missing comma (,) that should go between "sometimes" and "the".
A "'s" should go after Kirihara since it's their family. The rest of the paragraph sound a little off.
Short "w" and "s". They would be capital if it was pointing out a specific country.
The spikes are visible for a second when you enter the room.
Small "m" and a space between "in" and "front".
The spikes are visible for a second when you enter the room.
Small "m" and a space between "in" and "front".
Between "right", "?" and "Did", spaces are missing. For the word underline in blue, it sound a little off but that's maybe me.
Small "w".
Small "s".
A "s" should be after novel since there are many of them.
A "s" should be after medicine since there are many of them.
A "s" should be after newspaper since there are many of them.
A comma (,) should be between "least" and "I".
A "s" should be after book since it's "some" of them.
It's "scratch" since she just did it. It would be "scratched" if she had done it a few minute ago.
Short "s" for "set" and a "s" added to "utensil".
It should be "its" (and not it's (it is)) since it's the mirror that is doing its job.
Capital "T" since Yuuki just begin her sentence. Also, a comma (,) should be between "then" and "you".
It's "is" and not "it's" because the sentence continue. The comma should go between "Meanwhile" and "you" and not between "you" and "are".
Capital "Y" to "you" since she begins the sentence. By kept and sealed, it sounds like she was trapped inside of Yuuki for a long time. Is that the case ? If not, it's "keeps" and "seals".
Capital "B" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
Capital "S" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
Capital "M" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
Capital "T" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
In this image, Yuuki can't move from a specific spot in the stair. For the rest, she can move freely.
Yuuki's house : Capital letter after the dots. (It-It says 8:03 (or 8:07 AM) instead of it-it says)
A "s" should be after novel since there are many of them.
A "s" should be after novel since there are many of them. (Happned to the three bookshelves's spot).
Capital "T" since it's the beginning of a sentence.
Small "p".
Small "p".
Nightmare of The Snow 雪の悪夢
Cool, I'll sweep for bug or text error.
After 20 minutes of gameplay :
A "r" is missing.
Small "w".
And he's carrying it in his mouth not on
Small "s".
When Yuuki spotted Miku, he goes toward the north but instead of "going out of screen", he disappear suddenly)
An "e" instead of an "i" (convInience to convEnience).
Here's a bug where Yuuki can go almost in the stench.
Small "w".
Capital "I" even with the dots before.
Capital letter for the three speeches.
Small "m" + a space between "in" and "front".
There's an edit that I add..
After 20 minutes of gameplay :
A "r" is missing.
Small "w".
And he's carrying it in his mouth not on
Small "s".
When Yuuki spotted Miku, he goes toward the north but instead of "going out of screen", he disappear suddenly)
An "e" instead of an "i" (convInience to convEnience).
Here's a bug where Yuuki can go almost in the stench.
Small "w".
Capital "I" even with the dots before.
Capital letter for the three speeches.
Small "m" + a space between "in" and "front".
There's an edit that I add..
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