NEED SOME HELP WITH THE DESCRIPTION IT STILL NEEDS WORK

i need help with my description it still needs work can someone please help here is the description: With the disappearance of their parents it has taken a toll on both Xu and Leon, to this day they are baffled on what has become of them, Xu gets a letter from Hamano. Thus Her and Leon embark on a journey to find their parents. Hamano then tells them of a rumour that Zelfar has been resurrected and for them to find out the truth of it.
As the game progresses and you embark on your journey you will then begin to fall in love with all of the characters. As Xu and Leon set out on their quest they will meet many new friends along the way.
There is plenty of side-quests in the game and one of them is to collect all of the Bromides of all the female characters that join your party. You can also get four party members in your party whom are optional to get they will help you in battle in many ways.
The four optional characters are:
Allan (AKA) Mr. Hazelsoft the maker of the game,
Mikethecat2 (AKA) Mike,
Santa Claus,
and Jesus (Gods Son)