VISHI221'S PROFILE

author=halibabica
I had a feeling English wasn't your first language. If you have a friend that can help you with it, maybe ask them to write the description for you. Include details about how the game plays. A story outline is good, but it needs more to appeal to players!

author=LordBlueRouge
Original

When Shirou and Yurika were kids , they were childhood friend . Shirou enjoys the sound from Yurika's piano every day . Yurika is a little girl who played piano and also composed her own songs when she was 9 years old , but one day she left him because of her family . Her family wants to take her come to Hiroshi Academy , a school founded for children who with ability play piano and compose their own songs . All students need to play piano by their own songs every week , it's kind of like a test . Shirou promised he will try learn piano to come in Hiroshi Academy by somehow and meets her there again
Shirou is a 15 years old and at least he's able play piano now but he can't compose a song . Finally he came to Hiroshi Academy by cheating with the power in his left eye to see the past another person , albeit only for 7 seconds when directly looking at someone in the past when they're writing a note of song so he can remember all note of song and things else . In case he has problem with someone who knows his acts as copy their song and make his own song by somehow , they're want to warn him but with the power in his right eye to see the future in 6 seconds to foresight their act . After all , he used too much power for own acts . He started feeling terrible headache and he had an accident then he need to be hospitalized . When he wake up , a terrible thing is happening to him that he saw everyone completely is black . He couldn't realize who is who and he need to find a solution how to cure his eyes.

It helps to put this, in point form notes.

-Shirou and Yurika are childhood friends.
-Yurika is gifted at playing the piano
-Shirou enjoys listening to Yurika play.
-Yurika's Family sends Yurika off to Hiroshi Academy a school for children with the ability to play their own songs.
-Shirou can't play the piano, but promises to meet Yurika again one day at Hiroshi Academy.
- Shirou 15 years old, can now play the piano but can't compose his own songs.
-Shirou gets into Hiroshi Academy by cheating:
-he uses his left eye to look into the past and plagiarize other students songs.
-he uses his right eye to see into the future and avoid detection and confrontation by fellow students.

(*you don't need to explain in detail, how Shirou's powers work in this description - you just need to explain enough so it sounds enticing to the reader - you explain how Shirou power's work through the story itself.)

-this power to see through time catches up with Shirou.
-Now he can no longer make out who he sees, because everyone is dark.
-Will he ever be able to see Yurika again?

Revised: (you may want to revise this further)

Shirou and Yurika were childhood friends. Yurika had a gift for playing the piano which Shirou enjoyed listening to every day. But one day, Yurika is sent off to Hiroshi Academy, a school for children with the ability to play piano and compose their own songs. Shirou can't play the piano, but he promises Yurika, that they will meet again one day, at Hiroshi Academy.

6 years later, Shirou now 15, can play the piano, but has yet to compose his own songs. But, over night, he has suddenly gained the unique ability to see through time.

With this new unexplained gift, Shirou can now enter Hiroshi Academy by cheating. He uses his left eye, to look into the past to plagiarize other students work, while using his right eye, to see into the future in order to avoid detection and confrontation by his fellow students. But this power to see through time eventually catches up with Shirou. Now he can no longer make out who he sees, because everyone is dark. all he can make out are shadows.

Will he ever be able to see Yurika again?

Again, you'll want to sit down and revise this further so it sounds more natural.

But this actually sounds like it could make, a really cool adventure game/visual novel.
It has this Deathnote vibe to it; using supernatural powers with real life consequences.

Left Mouse Button, see 7 minutes into the past.
Right Mouse Button, see 7 minutes into the future.

Maybe, the player is sitting infront of a piano, (you can use the mouse to play piano keys)
and out of the corner of his eye is another student working hard on a composition

Like, every level, is a scenario where Shiro has to figure out a way to copy students musical compositions without
being detected and as a reward for completing the level, the player gets to hear the song that Shiro stole
as he progresses through Hiroshi Academy - it's like the potato chip thing!!

Figuring out how to not get caught - This is a really cool idea.

author=NoBody13
*subbed*

author=Rose_Guardian
This looks interesting, however I feel that the actor battler is a little too big.