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- Added: 02/11/2013 07:22 PM
- Last updated: 04/28/2024 03:30 AM
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I know how to use them and in this case it's just the one part, showing hesitation. I suppose I could edit some out and use em-dashes instead, but ellipses give the illusion of staggered speech a lot better.
Also, those 'hide until certain date/make private' check boxes need major checking since no one is supposed to be able to even see this stuff yet. :/
Also, those 'hide until certain date/make private' check boxes need major checking since no one is supposed to be able to even see this stuff yet. :/
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I know how to use them and in this case it's just the one part, showing hesitation. I suppose I could edit some out and use em-dashes instead, but ellipses give the illusion of staggered speech a lot better.
Also, those 'hide until certain date/make private' check boxes need major checking since no one is supposed to be able to even see this stuff yet. :/
I prefer hashes to dots, but hey, it's your game! And it's probably not even that big of deal to others. :)
I'd personally suggest sticking with the ellipses - em-dashes don't work as well in dialogue outside of compounding words when you're using multiples in a single 'sentence.' They work best if there's only a single one, at the end of the statement. It's not so much a stylistic thing as a visual thing at that point though.
Eh, I just reworked the dialogue a bit to make it flow better. Still kept some ellipses in this part, though, since she's very hesitant about what she's taking... The corpses femur for a weapon~
You could always cut your ellipses at the end of words down to two dots instead of three.. < like that. I know it's not so grammatically nice but it cuts down on the amount of punctuation and gives your words a bit more flavour.
Or you could show her hesitation through interjections (um, ah.. er..) or stuttering "I s-suppose.." though I'm not sure that wouldn't make her sound just a bit too timid instead of the desired effect. D:
Either way, realistic character development for the awesome. And your maps with those shiny crystals are HNNGG.
Or you could show her hesitation through interjections (um, ah.. er..) or stuttering "I s-suppose.." though I'm not sure that wouldn't make her sound just a bit too timid instead of the desired effect. D:
Either way, realistic character development for the awesome. And your maps with those shiny crystals are HNNGG.
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