RENDER'S PROFILE

Kawano, Fujiko! Class 1-B's (probably) most introverted student. She seems to be the closest student (that's not related) to Megumi. However, when around Megumi she's comfortable and acts the opposite of her usual composure that she has in class. This act seems to follow with the player (and Akane) for some reason. Anywho~ this act isn't a spoiler, as you'll figure this out eaaarly in the story.



Matsuhara, Akane! One of the most extroverted student in the school who seems to not have a filter at all. This filter seems to be genetic, because whaddya know?! She's Megumi's cousin! And she doesn't get along with Fujiko which automatically makes Megumi take a turn for Switzerland when they get into a fight. However, her fighting with Fujiko doesn't define her as a character. She seems to have gain lots of friends for the short time-span she's been at Hayauchi. Oh, should I mention she's in the Judo club?
* Edit: I also plan on putting her in Class 2-A

That's it for those two's basic summary so far. I have a few events written so far (and all of their profiles finished), but I'm planning on making time this weekend to get their story done. Making Heartache 101 custom content is definitely a breather from the game I'm making already. Introductions SUCK! I'm also scraping the "Main-file branches into multiple files!" idea. It's totally not because I want to make land mines for the player to trip on if he crosses on one too many routes. Heh.

Hanata Haruka: Ah, another genki girl. This isn't bad, as usually genki girls scenes almost always are amusing/enthralling. I'm curious as to how the newspaper club story will play out.

Shiromiya Kagami: She seems like the average Joe you'd find on the street. Besides that, I also feel that she's also that stereotypical girl "You just can't hate!" (You know, the girls that they show in chick flicks? K, I'm done now.)

Torahashi Mio: I agree with Dozen on the hair. The bangs are creepy. Personally though, I don't think that her hair color is though. It's the way the hair color contrasts with the eye color. If you tone down the eye color the hair should look fine. I like her personality. However, this could just be my personal bias with "tough chick" characters.

Hisatsuki Seiryu: This character interests me the most. It's make you ask the questions... "Why does she hide behind her bangs?", "Why does she act so reclusive?", etc. I could see you easily building tension between her and player in her route.

Yurihara Sakura: Seems like the female version of the player, besides the snarky trait. I have no other comments besides that.

Suzuki Yomi: Reminds me of Ertad's Midori. I thought his/her character was also a nature loving person? But I could be wrong. I'm sure what else to say after that. Her appearance looks nice though.

Tenshimi no Kokoro: OMMMMMMMGGGG YOKAAAIS. *regains conciousness* I like her look. I like the fact that she's a yokai.
What kind of yokai is she? :3 (There's a chance that these questions may never end.)

And that's it! I hope you manage to finish these characters.

Half of the grammar is corrected! I'm going to also play test it to find any additional grammar and/or story errors.

I felt like this needed to be in a hide-tag since it was off-topic. But, I played Uchioniko. The game. I have yet to finish it, but I really like the characters. Especially Mayu. She's probably my favorite Heartache 101 character. (See under first hide tag regarding my bias to athletic characters.) I'm going to try reviewing the game once I get a good idea how reviews are done 'round here, and once I finish the game.

In order to get into one specific route, you'll need to make decisions. These decisions will determine which route you'll be put into. How I'm doing this is kinda similar to how a VN dating sim is with ren'py.

Another distinct feature in my custom content is that only one route will play at a time. I really don't the player dating Megumi and Fujiko in their routes at the same time. And to prevent that with phone call dates in-game, the other character that the players route isn't on, will have their affection level locked at neutral with encounters off. To only have one route playing at a time, I'll be using conditions for that.

I'm talking about how people would buy underwear just to smell it throughout the day. I wrote underwear fetishes because I felt like it was a bit raunchy to post.

- More "thoughts" for the player.
- More stories.
- Changed the Convenience Store scene.
- Added more to the "What Will That Achieve?" branch.
- Added a scene which you can get back on the route after blowing up the land mine. You can even fail the Soul Check and redeem yourself with a personality check.
- Made a scene which basically gives you hints for the upcoming Athletics Check.
- Made another scene Sota! (However, it's only accessible if you blow up the land mine, and don't attempt to talk to Megumi after.
- Made some tachie for Sota while using the generator Marrend linked. I'm debating if I should use them not though.

I read your post again and realized that I misunderstood it HEAVILY. That was childlish of me, and I can assure you that no such thing will happen again.

1) Was the introduction event rocky? I feel like it could be more natural. 2) Does the player sound like Flowerthief's player? I'm trying to a for that. 3) What is your opinion of the Soul Check?
4) Where do you think the story is heading? (I'm just curious about this.)
5) Is there any other opinions that you'd like to share? Possibly things I could tweak or add.