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Hey guys! So earlier I messing around with gimp, and I made some custom eyes. I'd just like your opinions on these.~


I've made it so the first row has the default color, whereas the second row has a different color so you can see how looks when the hue changes.

The column on the lefts eye looks kinda iffy for me. The middle is eh for me. And one on the right I sort of like. So yeah, opinions?! Be brutally honest, just constructive!~

Edit: The one on the right looks like she could be Tsubasa's sister. >____>
Also, I fixed the light column one and two's eyes because they weren't facing the same direction.

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author=Kevincalanor
Edit: Just found out that Megumi and Ai's last name is Nakamura. So I've changed from a duplicated name to another triplicated one.

Actually, no. I changed it previously, it's kind of buried in last few pages in the forums. It's Megumi Murakami now. For your chart feel free to put Megumi in 2nd year class d, and Fujiko in 1st year class e. Great idea too with making a chart. It makes it easier, especially if custom content creators wanted to "intermingle," stories. ^_^

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author=Marrend
*Edit:
If we want to block Ertad's characters together, maybe we can move Render's characters up to, I dunno, 36/37? Is that a huge problem?

That's fine. Also, Megumi's last name is Murakami, I changed it previously. ~

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I'd like to note that Megumi's and Fujiko's IDs are 94-95. Also, if Midori is the only datable character here, using number IDs for the other character isn't necessary as you could use: ID = Shrine Maiden.

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Ugh, also, I'm rewriting the first part of branch C there because I just reread it, and the grammar is just ew. Also Marrend, I took your suggestion and changed it just a little. It definitely makes it sound better.

And just to note, my progress so far is great! I wrote seven full stories for Megumis' route! Definitely happy with progress so far. Expect beta in the next month! :D

author=Marrend
I found the line you're referring to in game_stories_2.txt, STORY 28. Thanks for the assist, Render!

No problem. ~

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author=Kevincalanor
A char that influences another one route :D
Wonder how it will work, can't help but expect serious mess if you try to route both of them x3 (I planned that with the Yamisaki sisters, but I've ended aborting Alessa route)

To avoid that certain mess you are talking about I've outlined the entire route (I'm nearly halfway done outlining) so everything is organized. It makes writing so much easier. However in the story, to be specific, Fujikos' route kind of is a powerhouse for Megumis'. You have to get a certain point in Fujikos' route (this part does not require the like/love phase) and then it kind of splits. You keep going and get Fujikos' ending, or Megumis'. Or you can achieve both.

Also, to Marrend & Ertad I saw you messages on the technical thread regarding to what the schools name is. I remember when Miki was announcing she said it, so I looked it up. It's Hayauchi High. I think that's the only time it's mentioned also. o.o

EDIT:

For one of the later stories I have here is Branch C of Miki/Keika/Player's conversation. I made a line where the player kind of leaves Miki speechless, I was wondering if it sounded the player or not because I've been trying to make this story sound like the original characters, so I'd like opinions on this.~


BRANCH C
ID = 1
Anyways, is there a Hajime in your class <player>?
ID = 0
Not that I know of. Why?
ID = 1
FRIENDLY
I knew he didn't, he looked too nice to be in your class.
ID = 2
Ouch.
ID = 0
Kind of like how Megumi looks too nice to be in yours?
ID = 2
OTHER1
ID = 1
OTHER1
...
ID = 0
I'll see you guys later, I'm going to class.
ID = 1
ERASE RIGHT
ID = 2
ERASE LEFT
ID = 0
(...)
(You don't see that happening often. And by "that," I mean Miki speechless.)

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There's so many interesting characters in progress, I can't wait till they're all ready to play! ^_^

Anyways, I have another character that will be going with Megumi. Her name is Fujiko Kawano, and she's a first year. I don't want to spill too much, so I'll make this very brief.



She keeps to herself a lot, and isn't very social personality wise. Her story plays a key role in the Megumi's route also. I'd like to note these are the only two character in their own character "pack." I already have both the ideas for the routes and will start writing the story very soon. I believe my content will be finished before July or August.

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author=ShinigamisApples
i'd also like to mention she bears the same last name as my character. I'd hate to ask this of you, but would it be too much trouble to change that.


No problem. I'll make it Murakami then.

author=Mute
Second, realism doesn't always mean pessimism. That depends on the reality she faces.


I really liked what you said here. I don't know why, but I felt that this will someone lead her route in a better direction.

author=Mute
She looks a whole lot like a taller, darker-haired Akari.


author=ShinigamisApples
She's very cute, though she bears quite the resemblance to Akari.


I did notice this while making her, but I had some of Akari's images open so they wouldn't end up having the same face emotions. And yet, my character's eye eventually changes into the same eye that Akari changes into when their affection rate is higher then "like". I'm not sure if I'll change it or not. I think I'll just let it be mostly because both of their personalities really contrast. Also, don't quote me on this, isn't Akari's hair like blue-gray? I can't quite tell.

I also decided to do some research on Japan's high schools since I'm not one-hundred percent sure how they work. Wow. Big scrap in story-line. Hehe, I guess that's why they call it a draft.~

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Hello!~
You all seem like lovely people that can direct me in the right direction of making a -successful- custom character. This is a great game, and it interested me into wanting to make a character. Also, I'd just like to note that I have experience in writing, and I'm aiming for my character to be -flawed- not perfect.



Her name is Megumi Nakamura, I'd like to reserve ID 94 for her. But without further ado, I'd like to paraphrase the story I have so far. She's returning to the players school after moving various times. However, she did live in the area, and was acquaintanced with Miki as a first year student (Note: Megumi is a second year student currenty).

Now for personality, she's very inattentive and doesn't aspire for much (perhaps "realistic" in a sense?). I'm planning for her to have a dry wit at times, and, at some points be a little irritable.

So that's basically what I've got so far. Please constructively criticize, if you will.
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