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I'm a student that enjoy playing indie horror games. Contact me through facebook or send me an email if you have any feedback or suggestion.
Gmail: Xnition108@gmail.com
Deviantart: http://xnition.devianart.com
Gmail: Xnition108@gmail.com
Deviantart: http://xnition.devianart.com
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First look on main char sprite
author=Schwer-von-Begriffauthor=XnitionThat is good to know! If you want to, I can link you to a few good tutorials for SAI. =)
Thanks for your suggestion i'll try to fix the sprite :)). By the way, i drew this with both paint tool sai and Photoshop. I drew it with a graphic tablet
Yes please! Thank you :)))
First look on main char sprite
author=Schwer-von-Begriff
Hey Xnition! First of all, It's great that you went for a sprite that shows more of the character than just the head. And your anatomy isn't that bad, either! What your character lacks is definition in the hair - the black bar suggesting shadows doesn't really serve it's purpose really well. But I will go into more detail regarding your sprite, if that is alright with you. Please don't see this as an attack, it is all just a critique because I want to see you do even better!
Let's start at the top of the character. The head and the hair that sits on top of it. I already mentioned the black bar as a shadow - it would look a lot better without it. I see that you tried to use normal shadows, too. Those are a little too light though, darker definition would look better. A little more 'flowy' hair would look a lot better, too. Hair isn't quite as static as you drew it, unless you go for a Dragonball Z kind of style. You tried to do this with the long part of her hair, which doesn't look bad at all. But the front piece of her hair needs to flow, too. Curves are your friends, here!
Her face looks quite good, I like the eyes. She looks a little to the left, yes? You could improve her looks if you made the left eye (from our point of view) a little smaller. Also, if you define the nose a little more, that becomes a little more clear as well. The left eye should also be put down a little, it is sitting too high at the moment. Her mouth could be placed a little higher, to show more of her chin.
The neck looks quite good, but necks aren't straight either. A little curve towards the ear would do you good - your neck/head does connect to where your ears start, after all.
I like her shirt! The little ribbon is a cute touch, too. But you should draw the rest of her arm, as of now it is simply cut off. If you want to, you could give her breasts a little more definition, that will make her seem more '3D' for lack of a better word. To show that she has breasts you could also make the ribbon curve a little to the left, as if it is resting against one of her breasts.
Lastly, mind if I ask what program you are using and if you draw via mouse or a graphic tablet? If you decide on one style (pixely or shading via gradiant) you should stick to one. A pixely style clashes quite hardly with a gradient if not done well. If you want to have the lines less thick and hard on the eyes you could also use a darker shade than your darkest shade of skin colour, hair colour etc and use that colour as the outline. It can look a lot better than black outlines. =)
Thanks for your suggestion i'll try to fix the sprite :)). By the way, i drew this with both paint tool sai and Photoshop. I drew it with a graphic tablet
Breathless
author=KunaKasaiauthor=XnitionSo there's only one ending? I gotauthor=KunaKasaithere's only bad ending where you have to die. There is also no gasoline for the generator. Escaping the third room is simple, if you still couldn't figure out a way then watch the walkthrough :))author=Xnitionis there any way to finish the game without the last game over? the one that riddlerriddle was talking about. I'm guessing that I'd need to find gasoline somewhere to power the generator, but I can't find it anywhere and there isn't really a clue to where you can find it. Searching all the rooms won't help for me, because the lady seems to be room triggered and for instance I can't exit the third room (the storage) without dieing.author=RiddleriddleThere is no key for that bedroom, you don't have to look for it
Hi, I would love to finish this game because it sounds like there is a lot more to the story but I keep getting stuckat the part where I can exit out of the front door because mother catches me once I leave. I still have a locked bed room door and can't seem to find the key...hmm.And I don't see how I could get another ending (except for the non-existent gasoline one). what I meant by not being able to leave the storage room is when I have done everything and found the front door key. After that I was running around to find gasoline, but upon exiting the storage room the thing is immediately up in my face. Anyways I recorded a let's play of it so If you don't know what I mean check that.The one where she wakes up in the asylum after running out the door and gets killed by her mom
Anyway in case you want some tips on improving the game:
Give clues on where to find things, for instance I couldn't find the first key, only after checking EVERYTHING, and that's not something that you should have in a game in my opinion.
Definitely get someone to do a spell-check before putting it up. Not only did I get slightly annoyed by grammar mistakes (which are somewhat excusable as you're not a native speaker) but there were some spelling mistakes that could've been avoided by just rechecking, like the storage room being named strorage.
I suggest rewriting the background story of the main character. Right now, to me she just comes across as a major brat and I don't feel sorry for her whatsoever. Anything could be better, like it were actually shapeshifters or demons or whatever, just use imagination.
Anyway I corrected some of the grammar as I played the game so if you want to see, my Youtube channel is the same as my username here.
thank you for your feedback, i will try to improve it in the next update :)
Breathless
author=tyang15
I love horror game. I will tired it out and post it into my youtube channel soon. May I have your permission?
- RedRanzo
sure you can do that, but this version is incompleted so there is a few bug and grammar mistakes. If you think that it is fine then it is okay for you to record it and put it on youtube
Listen - v2.0
Breathless
author=KunaKasaiauthor=Xnitionis there any way to finish the game without the last game over? the one that riddlerriddle was talking about. I'm guessing that I'd need to find gasoline somewhere to power the generator, but I can't find it anywhere and there isn't really a clue to where you can find it. Searching all the rooms won't help for me, because the lady seems to be room triggered and for instance I can't exit the third room (the storage) without dieing.author=RiddleriddleThere is no key for that bedroom, you don't have to look for it
Hi, I would love to finish this game because it sounds like there is a lot more to the story but I keep getting stuckat the part where I can exit out of the front door because mother catches me once I leave. I still have a locked bed room door and can't seem to find the key...hmm.
there's only bad ending where you have to die. There is also no gasoline for the generator. Escaping the third room is simple, if you still couldn't figure out a way then watch the walkthrough :))
Blood Ties
author=nhubi
There you go. That makes it easier for people to download it, since quite a lot of people seem to miss the downloads tab.
Thks :))
Blood Ties
Breathless
author=Riddleriddle
Hi, I would love to finish this game because it sounds like there is a lot more to the story but I keep getting stuckat the part where I can exit out of the front door because mother catches me once I leave. I still have a locked bed room door and can't seem to find the key...hmm.
There is no key for that bedroom, you don't have to look for it
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