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MOONCANVAS, THE PRODIGIOUS WRITER
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Four year olds are incapable of pregnancy. Seriously. Impossible.
Also, I don't really see much brilliance here. Some of the twists are interesting, but I wouldn't call them much more than that. The general ideas are more than a tad disturbing and tasteless. Gritty does not equate to brilliance. Sure, some gritty tales are heralded as brilliant but that is because of how they were written and expressed. It is how a tale is told that shows the quality of the writing, not what the story is. A brilliant writer could write the most cliche-ridden tale and have it be a masterpiece, after all.
If you wanted to show off your writing skills, perhaps actually show off some stories that you've written?
Also, double-check for spelling/grammar errors and always, always, ALWAYS fact check. That four-year-old pregnancy idea is hilariously horrible, and not in a 'this is really creepy and weird' kind of way. After all, readers can only really connect with a story if there's an element of truth, especially with darker, edgier stories. If you want to make something about such an erroneous fact, you have to trick the reader into thinking it's a possibility - either by setting the story in another world or making technology that changes the biological bodies of people or including a whole new race that, idk, age at a much faster rate (like cats can get pregnant at about a year old). Even then, be prepared to get called out for such disturbing stuff, because there's very much a disgust factor about such things (and no fucking wonder. ew)
Lastly, why is this in the Job Board section? It should be in the Creative Corner instead. Keep that in mind for the future. Job Board is for when you want to either hire someone to do stuff for you or hire out your skills - and require a bunch of details about what you want/can do, costs and the like.
Also, I don't really see much brilliance here. Some of the twists are interesting, but I wouldn't call them much more than that. The general ideas are more than a tad disturbing and tasteless. Gritty does not equate to brilliance. Sure, some gritty tales are heralded as brilliant but that is because of how they were written and expressed. It is how a tale is told that shows the quality of the writing, not what the story is. A brilliant writer could write the most cliche-ridden tale and have it be a masterpiece, after all.
If you wanted to show off your writing skills, perhaps actually show off some stories that you've written?
Also, double-check for spelling/grammar errors and always, always, ALWAYS fact check. That four-year-old pregnancy idea is hilariously horrible, and not in a 'this is really creepy and weird' kind of way. After all, readers can only really connect with a story if there's an element of truth, especially with darker, edgier stories. If you want to make something about such an erroneous fact, you have to trick the reader into thinking it's a possibility - either by setting the story in another world or making technology that changes the biological bodies of people or including a whole new race that, idk, age at a much faster rate (like cats can get pregnant at about a year old). Even then, be prepared to get called out for such disturbing stuff, because there's very much a disgust factor about such things (and no fucking wonder. ew)
Lastly, why is this in the Job Board section? It should be in the Creative Corner instead. Keep that in mind for the future. Job Board is for when you want to either hire someone to do stuff for you or hire out your skills - and require a bunch of details about what you want/can do, costs and the like.
Jeroen_Sol
Nothing reveals Humanity so well as the games it plays. A game of betrayal, where the most suspicious person is brutally murdered? How savage.
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"I'm quite the brilliant writer. Here are just a few instances:"
Proceeds to show only ideas that haven't been worked out at all, and doesn't show any of their written work...
Proceeds to show only ideas that haven't been worked out at all, and doesn't show any of their written work...
MoonCanvas, this is not an example of writing. It's brainstorming, and poor brainstorming at that. Also, in cases of rape so young, the culprit tends to be an immediate relative.
@Liberty Umm...maybe not 4...but 5-years-old has happened...and six, and eight, and nine, and ten. Look up "precocious puberty". Meanwhile, here's a list of the world's youngest mothers. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_youngest_birth_mothers
@Liberty Umm...maybe not 4...but 5-years-old has happened...and six, and eight, and nine, and ten. Look up "precocious puberty". Meanwhile, here's a list of the world's youngest mothers. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_youngest_birth_mothers
It's possible, but not through... 'conventional' means. There were cases where children were born with their supposed twins inside them. Quite technically, it is more of a parastic twin rather than an actual child though.
Aside, dude. I lost interest at the mere mention of the word 'prodigious'. 'Brilliant' sent me blasting off again *sparkle*. The last thing you'll want to do is show just how high and mighty you are compared to your audience. No one likes being looked down upon, you know?
Aside, dude. I lost interest at the mere mention of the word 'prodigious'. 'Brilliant' sent me blasting off again *sparkle*. The last thing you'll want to do is show just how high and mighty you are compared to your audience. No one likes being looked down upon, you know?
author=MoonCanvas
I'm quite the brilliant writer.
1) "As an aspiring writer, I have a lot of ideas rattling around that I'd like to ask opinions of."
2) "I tend to brainstorm a lot and, out of the many ideas, I think these show the most quality. However I'm not quite sure of their validity as full-length stories and wanted to ask what you guys thought."
3) "Hey, I write in my free time as a hobby and was thinking of digging into it more seriously. I'd like to ask for suggestions on improving some of my previous work."
4) "Hey, I know RMN is full of really talented writers! I like to write myself and would like to ask if anyone is willing to help me work out a few kinks with some ideas I've been kicking around."
5 "Video game plots are not my strong-suit. Usually they end up really corny or boring since I've not got a clear grasp on what hooks players. I figured that this might also be a issue that others struggled with and wanted to make a thread where we can brainstorm together and work with one another on our ideas.
MoonCanvas
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I'm becoming increasingly paranoid somebody is going to steal my ideas. Maybe starting this thread was a bad move? I'm better off saving them to send to entertainment companies for a quick profit to, you know, build my brand up.
False. It occurs in unison with a rare form of precocious puberty alongside coincidental molestation. The Wikipedia source confirms a four year-old has become pregnant, backed by genetic testing. I'd even be so bold to insinuate it's even more possible than the data shows simply because the ability for a four year-old to become pregnant is largely untested(since pedophilia is an uncommon phenomenon). I'm sure a scientific study could be arranged pending the world's countries agree to it. My estimate is that severe precocious puberty is more common in non-white third world countries because the choice to become pregnant is a physical characteristic adapted from societies that have people who can actually think intelligibly.
And yes, one would have to wonder why a toddler would be molested. I can understand six year-olds, but four? Perhaps as a proverbial cum bucket.
False again, folks. Count nine months backwards from the date of the births.
Because a child so young would have to be kidnapped, which is a rather tedious complication. A relative is in an ideal position.
Not so much the case in an island(at least relatively speaking).
Does anyone else find it so magnificent that I put so much forethought into my brilliant tales? The offer to hire me as their writer is still on the table. It's quite clear that I have a talent for writing that none else do. If anybody is interested(and begs) I'll add another.
And while we're on the subject of myself, this is a theme that I think is very befitting of me. Just listen; it's deep, sophisticated, clairvoyant. This is what comes to mind when I think of myself, how others see me.
author=Liberty
Four year olds are incapable of pregnancy. Seriously. Impossible.
False. It occurs in unison with a rare form of precocious puberty alongside coincidental molestation. The Wikipedia source confirms a four year-old has become pregnant, backed by genetic testing. I'd even be so bold to insinuate it's even more possible than the data shows simply because the ability for a four year-old to become pregnant is largely untested(since pedophilia is an uncommon phenomenon). I'm sure a scientific study could be arranged pending the world's countries agree to it. My estimate is that severe precocious puberty is more common in non-white third world countries because the choice to become pregnant is a physical characteristic adapted from societies that have people who can actually think intelligibly.
And yes, one would have to wonder why a toddler would be molested. I can understand six year-olds, but four? Perhaps as a proverbial cum bucket.
author=pianotm
@Liberty Umm...maybe not 4...but 5-years-old has happened...and six, and eight, and nine, and ten. Look up "precocious puberty". Meanwhile, here's a list of the world's youngest mothers. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_youngest_birth_mothers
False again, folks. Count nine months backwards from the date of the births.
author=pianotm
Also, in cases of rape so young, the culprit tends to be an immediate relative.
Because a child so young would have to be kidnapped, which is a rather tedious complication. A relative is in an ideal position.
Not so much the case in an island(at least relatively speaking).
Does anyone else find it so magnificent that I put so much forethought into my brilliant tales? The offer to hire me as their writer is still on the table. It's quite clear that I have a talent for writing that none else do. If anybody is interested(and begs) I'll add another.
And while we're on the subject of myself, this is a theme that I think is very befitting of me. Just listen; it's deep, sophisticated, clairvoyant. This is what comes to mind when I think of myself, how others see me.
emmych
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I really hope you're a troll, dude, because like... this:
This crosses the line. Like, majorly crosses the line. If you're trying to be edgy, I'd advise you to knock it off now, because YEAH that is super gross, you are being super gross, and there is nothing remotely acceptable about this kind of bs. There is nothing Cool or Titillating about CSA, and it is repulsive that you would either make a joke about sexualizing literal children or outright express an interest in sexualizing literal children.
like idk, man, write whatever the fuck you want, but don't spread your shit where other people can smell it, got it? Alright. Good talk.
author=MoonCanvas
And yes, one would have to wonder why a toddler would be molested. I can understand six year-olds, but four? Perhaps as a proverbial cum bucket.
This crosses the line. Like, majorly crosses the line. If you're trying to be edgy, I'd advise you to knock it off now, because YEAH that is super gross, you are being super gross, and there is nothing remotely acceptable about this kind of bs. There is nothing Cool or Titillating about CSA, and it is repulsive that you would either make a joke about sexualizing literal children or outright express an interest in sexualizing literal children.
like idk, man, write whatever the fuck you want, but don't spread your shit where other people can smell it, got it? Alright. Good talk.
MoonCanvas
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Due to concerns about others stealing my plots, I ask that moderators delete this thread. They are now copyrighted.
Thank you in advance.
Thank you in advance.
author=Liberty
No-one is going to steal these ideas. You're safe there. No-one is that desperate. or sick
Also, how on God's Green Earth are you back -again-? Who forgot to tag you as 'forever gone'?
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