The Book of True Will

I actually made this account just to comment about your game! I hope nothing seems rude or hateful, as i actually really enjoyed the game, despite its shortness. These are the few things i wanted to comment on:

Characterization: The characters seemed a little... flat to say the least. I understand that it's probably a result of such a short story, however i think they could have been built up a little more with the introduction. This is my personal opinion, though, and everyone else seemed happy with it!

Continuity: I do like the concept you attacked here. Its a concept often debated amongst peers and people of all ages. I do personally think it's slightly weird how the two female protags just jump on board with the whole idea of 'Adventure!!' Though the ending is fitting, it does leave more questions than it answers. It strayed off topic a whole lot and brought up some questions that weren't ever answered such as why does he always get so angry?

Dialogue: The dialogue seemed fine to me, however a little bit more flavour text would have been nice and a little bit more insight as to what players are supposed to be doing with each puzzle. I got stuck so many times it started to take away from the game itself. I mean, forty seconds to solve a puzzle that doesn't even stay up that long? I ended up needing to run the characters off their bridge to get my agitation levels down.

Plots: The plot itself seemed... rushed if you will?
"Hi, im back in my home town! Why are you a nun?"
"They found a temple of your faith!"
"Adventure!!!!"
Now, again, my own personal opinion, but i believe the story could have been built up a whole lot more. Have more story building and less "let's play 'rack-your-brain'!" For the rune puzzle, i had to look up what the God's name was. I couldn't remember it for the life of me and there's no hints as to what you're doing after one cutscene is over. Maybe more interactions with the pcs when you're stuck?

Pacing: Again, the game seems rushed. It seems almost like you're... how to say it... too excited to show the ending? It's one puzzle after another without giving any time for the characters to build up and for players to form a relationship with. They showed little to no emotion and almost no backstory was given. You find out little bits and pieces about the characters at the "climax" of the story, but other than that it's about "heathens" and "zealot-girl".

Conflict: There was little to no conflict other than the main goal and the puzzles that stood in the way. The characters fought with each other over the and provided little as to why they chose the path they chose. The only real conflict i found in the game was the final puzzle. That one was crazy. However, the four before it had me on the verge of breaking my poor computer.

Over all, i give it a 3.5 / 5. I hope you continue to make games, as i would love to play another. (: