ARDRAKI'S PROFILE

author=HikiNeet
The maid that asks for your passport keeps looping her dialogue if you don't have it.

The blonde guy in the starting compartment says your're. Should be you're. Why does the girl next to him get a portrait when everyone else in there doesn't get one? The RPGmaker NPC portraits (guy selling food, the aforementioned girl, and Emily) kind of clash with the art style of the main character.

The maids creep me out. No, it's not their custom? portrait but rather how they move so fast to intercept me. Especially the one in the dining room who stops me from sitting at any of the tables. Their un-capitalized sentences also don't help their case either and they're not the only ones with that issue...

When you choose the sit option at the bag, you just stand there facing the right. This applies at the beginning right when you start the game. Later though, when I gave the brooch to the girl, I came back to sit and I actually did.

You 'pick' your passport. > Should be 'take'.

"I found something on my bag." Why would you tell someone checking for your ID that? It makes it sound like it's not yours; that you stole it.

The whole wrong name on the passport is a bit farfetched to me.

The depth perception of some things is strange. Like you go underneath the red chairs in the soda machine room if you approach them from the bottom. You can also walk right next to the Maid in that room and then walk across the shelves to the right. The red couch booth seats also have that problem if you sit at the bottom of them.

Chef: I don't want back to the cook. > I don't want to go back to cook.

The red-haired guy in the next seat: maybe you re crazy. > There's a space between you and re. Should be you're.

Purple-haired guy in the next seat: I never heard it > I should be I've.
Also, 'second' is cut off.

You should check out all words that use apostrophes ' since words like dont look weird without them. Emily's dialogue and others are noticeably lacking in capitalized sentence starters. Some don't even have punctuation.

Why can you talk to your bag?

When you play a song at the piano, it becomes silent afterwards; the bar song stops playing.

There's no way to tell what you're supposed to do. You just get dumped onto a train, the MC mentions a dream (it would help if his portrait looked like he was just waking up for that bit), and then you just wander around aimlessly talking to random people. It's obvious you give the brooch to Emily but you get no indication of what to do next.

So far, it's not shaping up to be a very good demo as harsh as that sounds but then in a way I suppose a demo is meant to let people find errors and fix things. The MC portrait art is nice though.

Yeah the demo still buggy and some NPC have strange talks but I plan fix it
Also If someone dosen't like a part like "talk with your bag" (it was a test and I forgot to delete) If someone dosen't like it I'll take it off, also my english is not very good and people like you that helps me with the translation helps a lot


About the train you need to make some things like read your diary or if you stuck you can talk with the scary maids
The passport is just another english error i hope this dosen't make you loose your demo experience and if do I will update a better new demo as fast as I can
About the broken laws of fisics is just mapping bugs that I'm already working on it
About the english errors I will fix it an update it today or tomorrow thanks for the corrections ^^
Thanks for report me some bugs erros and broken laws of fisics that you notice and if still stuck on the train part please tell me

oh sorry
but the Private profile isn't checked...
sorry my grammar errors...
i think one of the problems could be the size
but here is the description :

~"Help me" is a Horror game that you choose your own way, decides who lives or dies, depends of your decisions...
the game takes place in a village, were the protagonist finds out about his past future and present.
the main characters are:
protagonist,"H","T","S","K".


The story follows protagonist is a boy of 16 years old and lives with his uncle. As a child, he had a strong trauma, which began to forget everything that happened. The village doctors said it was a common retrograde amnesia, and it was encouraged to write daily in a notebook what had happened all day. His parents died when he was small making it more difficult to have a memory of them. He spent his childhood in a village where he dont remember the localization, and his uncle said everyone had gone to the big city in search of better conditions of life, except his grandmother, who still lives there.Because of his amnesia he does not remember what happened in childhood, however this has already been treated thanks to the help of several experts. Thus, the protagonist already have an almost normal memory, but still has missing memories.
Suddenly as he helped his uncle to do the cleaning he finds old letters along with a diary, the boy took the diary to the bedroom and began to read , however the most intriguing in the daily was the first four "H", "T", "S" and "K". When he got enough money to travel the boy took a train to visit the village.
One night the boy finds himself in an unfamiliar place much like a forest, and not remember how he got it. After reading a note that was on the floor and pick up a flashlight, followed by a dirt road, with the hope of finding the village, however all are finding butterflies, bats, rats and a rabbit. After walking through the woods and almost stepping on some mice he sees a local stranger and decides to investigate, finding a small piece of crumpled paper. It was written the phrase: "Help me."



http://helpmethegame.tumblr.com is the site that i will make my updates;
http://helpmethegame.tumblr.com/ask for questions;~