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comment=30902
I submitted the game yesterday, but it still hasn't been accepted.
I hope I don't miss the deadline over this. >:\

As long as you submitted before the deadline you have nothing to worry about.

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I've noticed a small typo; Right in the beginning, after Stasia joins your party it says that 'Staisa' has joined.

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It sounds like a pretty simple and straight-forward story, which is fine for a short, light-hearted project.

As with anything, what becomes of this depends on how it is handled. What the characters are guided by the plot to have to do is less important than why the characters are actually doing it. What motivates the characters to set out on this quest? How do they feel about each other? What are their personal goals and ambitions?

I have not played the game so I cannot say to what degree any of this is explored in your demo, but nothing about the heroes is mentioned in the synopsis, just a list of things for them to do. This suggests that they are just a group of characters to guide through the games events, but they should be people, grow like people, and feel like people. Make sure to spend some time developing the party, which is likely to be a big part of what will make the game enjoyable.

There are a number of useful articles on the subject of character writing in the site's Writing section. If you need some tips for that, I would suggest checking them out!

The review for this game also had some complaints about the game's mapping. If you wish to improve your mapping skills, the best way to do that is to check screenshots of other peoples' projects.

I am kind of rambling at this point but the short of it is I see no problems with the story, its just the supporting elements of the game should also be able to stand under scrutiny! RPGs aren't just about battles or just about story, they must have a number of things working in balance in order to create the best experience possible.

It might sound a little intimidating, but every minute you put into working on any part of it will make you that much better when you work on it in the future!