JELLE'S PROFILE

i'll be looking out for a download :)

author=Ratty524
Too bad this is on hiatus, though I'd say there is a lot more that you need to fix with this game then what you are stating.

You start right off the bat in your house with no introduction or anything to give you a sense of the world you are in. Then you go into an unusually cheerful town into the inn, then you are imprisoned, and then some random bat-lady who is your friend comes to save you, then the "valkyries" (they look more like little pig-tailed girls than any valkyrie I know of) start chasing you. Now you walk up to fight a boss who ends up killing my partner with some uber move, but I still win, only to find out that there is absolutely no recovery after the boss fight, and until I finally got the death recovery item I had to put up with a lot of fights with one character, and with how slow-paced that default system is this got tedious really fast.

It doesn't end there, after the cut scenes I'm taking to some long, overblown hallway that is so spacious that you can barely tell where anything is, because everything looks the same. Getting past the bosses and adding new members, the dungeon gets even worse as there are MORE long, uneventful corridors filled with tiresome random encounter battles. I'm at least glad you enabled dashing through these maps. Once I got to Behemoth I was definitely relieved to have a change of pace, because everything else was so damn boring until that point.

The core problem with this game so far is that there was no thought put in with the design. Walking down narrow corridors and fighting random monster simply isn't fun, nor is it challenging because as soon as those battles become useless in terms of rewards, you feel no point in even bothering to fight the enemies in this game. Thus you create a problem where the game becomes stale. If the dungeons had some puzzle-solving and were much shorter I wouldn't be complaining. Right now, until I reached behemoth your game bored me to tears.

There are also numerous grammatical and spelling mistakes throughout the game. It's "were", not "where", and please use capitals and periods in your character descriptions.

On the story itself, it's okay. I like light-hearted adventures and your game doesn't seem to be too dark nor too goofy. The characters could use some fleshing out, though. The only character that felt lively to me was that samurai guy who flirts with Kana, everyone else's dialogue feels really dead and hardly conveys the personality of the characters in question. To give some advice on how to fix this, lets use... Whoever that demon person is that joins Kana. So she is in debt to Kana for saving her... from what? But on-subject how would this connect to her personality? Is she a dependent or independent person? How does she react to certain situations? That's the kind of stuff you need to think about when developing a character.

So... Those are my comments so far. I just beat the behemoth boss and I'll continue in the future.

i know all that, and except for the corridors being to long (i like them spacey but i agree they can use some puzzles, i'm looking into learning how to make them, for now all i can do is present a locked door and force a detour for the key) i agree fully with all your points, as i said, "to ambitious for a first game"

i have been thinking of how to give a little more backstory before starting the actual game and for the spelling, i believe it isn't that bad considering i never even had english class nor is it my native language

author=midge
just tried the demo, looking forward to seeing more of this i like the idea of bonus areas one thing though maybe tone down the frequency of the random encounters just a little bit other than that i like the look of it, subscribed

thank you, about the encounters in the bonus area, do you want them to be less frequent because the oponents are to powerfull? (i have a feeling they aren't balanced yet)

still more than what i managed so far, maybe 20 minutes of shitty game XD

author=walldeaf
Wow, thx for the nice feedback.

I just finished part 1, going to upload it tonight maybe.
It will only be an hour of gameplay though.

author=Roy
Well......for once I finished a game. Usually I either run into puzzles I dont want to take time to figure out, unsure where to go or what to do next, too long to sit and grind just to get a measly rise in whatever, areas that seem to twist and meander everywhere and far too confusing to find an exit for and in the meantime fighting hordes of baddies...........anyway.
This game never really put me into any of the above problems beyond my desire to go through it to the end. In fact I was enjoying kicking the balloon juice out of everything right at the end mainly due to my ability to gain levels with the EXPERIENCE RING....yayyy.
I actually might go back to my last save and simply grind another couple of levels just to see what other spells leveling provides.
KUDOS!
Soooooooooo whens the next journey going to start?
Now?.....How about now? Ok,....now?

if i can do anything then sent me a PM or something

author=walldeaf
That would be most welcome.

author=jelle
hey, i noticed you saying your next project will be a joint one, i can't do anything on programing but i could do testing for you, i also have some confidence in my writing skills and if needed i could try to look for spelling mistakes and maybe help writing the story