STRANGELUV'S PROFILE

I laughed at the part with the bug where he would use his sister as bait. I didn't realize this. I will take note of the other bugs as well.

Yeah, it's come to my understanding that pepper and spice is lacking in the story and it isn't the best. I tried to make the supporting characters a little interesting, though. Despite writing that manifesto/article series, much of it had been actually adapted from notes taken from prose workshops. But one can only hope to learn from mistakes and improve. I will improve this aspect in further games. If you wish for a kookier more "Strangeluv" storyline from a game I made, check out Spike Lee's The Twilight Zone, I guess.

I'm glad the game brought a few smiles, however, and that you felt rewarded at the end. Thanks for the review!

Yeah.. I totally need to update those, though, since Hima drew me custom facesets.

I regret to say that Psyburn has committed suicide...

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what

who masturbates with their friends?

Who kills them right after?

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Ah that came off wrong, well I was reading the entire thing it was incredibly hilarious so when I was done I just went, WTF did I just read? It's like a Gainax feeling when you watch their shows, it's awesome but then in the end it makes you wonder, wtf did I just watch sort of thing. It's a good thing in my case! So don't worry!

I also read Littletown secrets, I really loved it :3

Woah, I'm very flattered that you actually just read two of my books for fun and enjoyed them! Thanks a lot for giving me your time.

My favorite part of the novella was probably "The Secret of the Rose in the Living Room." Just the conditions surrounding it and how the flaw was not in the person telling the secret set it apart from the others.

As far as a least favorite...it's hard for me to pick. If I HAD to pick, it was probably the "The Secret of the Starving Oak." I wasn't a huge fan of the character's flaw, but that's because I would hate to end up like that more than the other flaws, not because it wasn't interesting.

Oh, and I forgot to mention earlier that the last line of the novella is perfect. Perfect.

Yeah, the chapter I liked the most was The Secret of the Rose in the Living Room too, considering its change in format compared to the others. My least favourite, when re-reading, was actually the Wishing Well one, which I might rework in the end. But anyway, yes, I catch your drift about the Starving Oak.

Actually, some of the reception I got for the last line/chapter was mixed. Most say it is good but some say it left a bad taste in their mouths. Maybe because they were expecting a "happier" ending, I think. I don't intend on changing it, though.

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I just read me and tom under the boardwalk, wtf did I just read? XDD

@Nessiah: Did you really read the whole thing? Can you elaborate on your comments? =)

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I just finished Littletown Secrets. Very good work, my friend.

Overall, I really enjoyed the story. Each secret had a bit of mystery to it (as one might assume, I suppose), even when they all had a very similar format in the way they were told (introduction, problem, overcoming the problem). Littletown itself was nearly a character of its own and I loved how certain areas of the town felt bright and cheery, while others had a gloomy, dark, and ominous feel to them. The variation really spiced things up.

One aspect that was pretty awesome was that, despite that every story is independent of the others, there was a feeling of unity between them. This was likely due to your excellent crafting of Littletown, but the tidbits and comments from the narrator definitely helped too.

Now for some of the more negative points. To me, these are somewhat nitpicky things, but with a pretty polished work like this, that's kind of all you can say sometimes. ;D

Hey, first of all, it means a lot to me that you decided to read the whole thing! I'm glad you really enjoyed it and the town/characters I crafted.

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I mentioned the format that you use for each chapter earlier, and that was kind of a downer sometimes. While it works very well if you are reading the novella in pieces, it made it hard for me to read it continuously. I ended up reading a chapter every now and again when I have some time to kill, but for those that wanted to read it in heavy sittings, the format used might kill the momentum.

I don't know if it's noticeable but my intention was that the chapters would start off fairly cheery, humorous and whimsical (Sabrina's mask; Rupert and the tree) and they would get much darker and more serious coming to the end (the lonely lantern; the cheating parents), despite the format of each being the same. I guess I was going for a kind of "fairytale" kind of vibe for each story, with the aforementioned format. And I guess I can see how that would disrupt reading in heavy sittings. I guess I never really meant it to be read as a whole, but more like in those Enid Blyton books? But if it's a big problem, I'll look into it. Once again, I appreciate the criticisms!

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Moving on, I also found some of the dialogue of the children to sometimes be a little unbelievable. This is primarily due to word choice in particular situations, and also due to how well-spoken they are at times. To provide an example from April's dialogue "Things like that you cannot plan." does not quite sound like something you would expect a kid to say. If this is intentional for stylistic or characterization reasons, I get it, although in some cases it seemed to push the boundaries.

Yeah, this was a stylistic choice. The children, though young, are mostly supposed to be portrayed as well-spoken and intelligent but each having a severe flaw (or a "sin") and still retaining their naivety. Would you mind pointing out any parts where you believe it pushed the boundaries, though?

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Finally, the narration. While I loved it, it was somewhat wordy at points and the style did not always seem consistent. I can't honestly gather a bunch of specifics for this, because I wasn't taking diligent notes as I read this (I wish I did so this could be more constructive). Really, just take this comment with a grain of salt (or whatever the phrase is), as this is mainly based on my feelings overall, without some examples to kind of point it out.

I understand what you mean but this is a flaw I recognize in some of my writing, in which I constantly switch from basic prose to very detailed "emotional" prose from time to time. Maybe it's because I haven't completely found my 'voice' yet but I'm working hard to get there.

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Ultimately, I really liked it. You are a very talented author, and if I get the chance to read some of your other works, I bet I will enjoy them just as much, if not more. I hope my comments were helpful; I would be glad to elaborate wherever necessary, if you want.

Once again, I am glad you enjoyed it and thank you for all the comments and criticisms. One question, though: which was your favourite part and which was your least favourite?