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Marrend
Guardian of the Description Thread
21781
Hrmm. How about...


ID = 0
That's an unusual pairing if i ever saw one.
ID = 26
SHOW RIGHT
Hey honey, over here! You have to talk to this girl! She's hilarious!
ID = 13
SHOW LEFT
ID = 0
You really shouldn't make fun of Shoko. She's a really nice girl.
ID = 26
Who's making fun of her? I'll beat them up!
ID = 13
*Shakes her head furiously*
# Wait! Stop!
ID = 26
What do you mean? He was talking about me. That's really rude, honey. I don't think I want to kiss you anymore.
ID = 0
Wait, you can really understand her?!
ID = 13
*Tilts head to side*
# It's called "body language"?
ID = 26
What do you mean? It's hit and miss.
ID = 13
*Shrugs and makes a small gesture with her hands*
# You're getting there.
ID = 26
I admit I misread that one. But, I think I'm still doing good!
ID = 13
*Slight smile*
# Just a bit further!
ID = 26
Wow, it seems like you two get along a lot better then I would have imagined.
ID = 13
*Looks away*
# Wha... what? Where did THAT come from?
ID = 26
Haha! See what I mean? She's hilarious! So, why don't you talk?
ID = 13
*Embarrassed blush*
# That's... well...
*Sighs*
# I'm no good at this.
ID = 26
I'm sorry. I won't ask again. But, you know, if you want to have a chance at stealing my honey away from me you would have a better chance if you spoke to him.
ID = 13
*Tilts head*
# Steal? Better... chance?
ID = 26
Ha ha ha! Well, honey, we have to go. I will miss you. Muah!
ID = 0
Please stop kissing me in front of everyone. People might get the wrong idea!
ID = 13
*Giggles*
# I think that's the point!


Well, it's a suggestion, anyway.


*Edit: Oh yeah. The real reason I wanted to post here was that I was thinking of replacing the music in Fran. I'm hunting Newgrounds (Which is something I always suggest to other people to do, but have never done myself). I found some interesting pieces, but I'll see what else I can scrounge up.
i wasn't planning on using it but i really like how that went ill add it now i had the name of a royalty free music site that i got maedas theme song off of ill see if i still have it no guarantees i did lose my hard drive

Edit never mind that didn't take long at all evidently i visited it trying to find music for yoko a couple days ago lol
http://incompetech.com/music/royalty-free/?feels=Aggressive&feels=Intense&feels=Suspenseful&feels=Unnerving&Search=Search
Marrend
Guardian of the Description Thread
21781
I really like how you can search for "Feels" on that site! I should explore this more.
author=triad2
http://incompetech.com


nice site...
I mean awesome, though I already have my own sources, I won't hurt to add one
I love you guysT-T

In a strictly friendship kinda way. Not that there is somethingwrong with the alternatives. I'm open to anything, really.

On the sidenote, I think my sister mixed booze into my tea again.
ok well we now know dozen can't hold his liquor would someone mind picking out a theme for yoko to be honest i hate music and would prefer not to use any but that wouldn't be fair to those playing the game
author=triad2
ok well we now know dozen can't hold his liquor would someone mind picking out a theme for yoko to be honest i hate music and would prefer not to use any but that wouldn't be fair to those playing the game


I do not really know her so I cannot help
...if you can describe her personality to me then maybe I could
she's a chaotic bouncy bubbly evil genius that is overly affectionate
what route would you say is the quickest to get I'm working with a brand new install and can't test out my characters
in short, she's the smart+sadistic with a few girl-in-love attitude type of heroine?
i wouldn't say sadistic she doesn't mean to hurt anyone think of her as a fun-loving prankster that has the iq of someone from eureka i went through and picked something based solely on the description and will still be happy to take anyones suggestions as i have not heard the music. so i will be uploading a small sample later tonight all criticisms and critiques are welcome good and bad but please try not to use broad generalizations

here she is
http://rpgmaker.net/media/content/users/22300/locker/yoko_tanaka.rar
Marrend
Guardian of the Description Thread
21781
author=triad2
What route would you say is the quickest to get? I'm working with a brand new install and can't test out my characters.

Without using the built-in cheats? Probably Ruri. Though, if you only have the built-in characters (You chose not to get Marrend's handy-dandy pre-insalled DLC package?), then, I have no idea.

author=triad2
I wouldn't say sadistic. She doesn't mean to hurt anyone. Think of her as a fun-loving prankster that has the IQ of someone from Eureka.

I'm not sure of what you mean by "the IQ of someone from Eureka", but my first response to a fun-loving prankster would probably be something Bouncy and Suspenseful. Or, if I wanted to be lazy, this.


*Edit: Perused Yoko's stories. I think I understand what you're aiming for by having STORY 1 and STORY 2 in "Yoko_story.txt" and "Yoko_story_clean.txt" be the same, but I believe a player would get the same sequence twice this way. The sequence with Masako is a little iffy to me with the last part of it. Though, I didn't see "masako_profiles.txt" where it's supposed to be. Nor was "uchioniko_profiles.txt" that would be needed for the sequence with Shoko. That's probably something that you forgot that can be added later on, though.
author=Marrend
I'm not sure of what you mean by "the IQ of someone from Eureka", but my first response to a fun-loving prankster would probably be something Bouncy and Suspenseful. Or, if I wanted to be lazy, this.

Eureka was a show here in the us about a town created by way over the top geniuses so that they could have the perfect society and were always running experiments that put the world in danger every week

author=Marrend
*Edit: Perused Yoko's stories. I think I understand what you're aiming for by having STORY 1 and STORY 2 in "Yoko_story.txt" and "Yoko_story_clean.txt" be the same, but I believe a player would get the same sequence twice this way. The sequence with Masako is a little iffy to me with the last part of it. Though, I didn't see "masako_profiles.txt" where it's supposed to be. Nor was "uchioniko_profiles.txt" that would be needed for the sequence with Shoko. That's probably something that you forgot that can be added later on, though.

I realized that soon as i woke up this morning and fixed it as for the shoko I will look over it see if i can make some changes what bothers you about it?
Marrend
Guardian of the Description Thread
21781
My main gripe are these lines:


ID = 10
OTHER1
Noted, by the way you're still here?
ID = 0
Yeah I've been here the whole time.
ID = 10
I am having a little trouble figuring her out what do you think about her?
ID = 0
My best guess is that she's chaos incarnate.

Sentence structure aside, having Masako ask the player why he's still there? It doesn't seem like something she would do. Even if she did, the response to the question just doesn't fit. May I suggest:


ID = 10
OTHER1
Noted.
NEUTRAL
Is there any other information you wish to share?
ID = 0
Other than the fact that she's, like, chaos incarnate? No, not really.
what if i were to lengthen the story by having the player make comments that were ignored by both parties and had yoko try harder to get under masakos skin and reworded it so instead of her asking if he was still there it's like she just noticing him i kind of want that to be an ongoing theme with the three of them masako trying to catch yoko, yoko trying to antagonize masako, player trying to help keep the peace but is being ignored
Marrend
Guardian of the Description Thread
21781
If Masako just noticed the presence of the player character, I imagine the sequence would look something more like....

ID = 10
Greetings, <player>. I take it you observed that exchange?
ID = 0
Yeah, I was here the entire time.
ID = 10
I see. Forgive me, if I seemed to ignore you. Were there any other observations you with to share at this time?
ID = 0
Other than the fact that she's, like, chaos incarnate? No, not really.
ID = 10
OTHER1
Noted.

Or something like that? At any rate, I'm imagining it would take quite a bit to get Masako's concentration out-of-wack.
a carefree theme with a little dark touch then
...if the choice is only limited to that site then this?
if not then
here
here
or here
a feeling where being beside her makes you calm, relaxed and excited yet anxious.
or at least, that's the impression I got.
@lordnight i'll use the weasel one because i won't have to listen to it

@marrend that is perfect and on top of that i will make the other changes and have a post later today for you to review and it's not that her concentration is out of wack more that she is super focused on yoko trying to see past her antics that a small blip like the player hardly registers


STORY 5
PLACE = ROOF
CONDITION = 4 DONE
CONDITION = 3 DONE in masako_story.txt
ID = 26
SHOW RIGHT
Hi, honey! How are you this wonderful morning?!
ID = 0
(Great. Her again.)
Okay, I guess. What's the experiment today?
ID = 26
Sorry to dissapiont you but you aren't the subject of todays experiment. The guest we are going to be having is.
ID = 0
What guest?
ID = 10
SHOW LEFT
Tanaka Yoko, I presume.
# Last name first! That's, like, actually how the Japanese do it. At least, as

far as I know, anyway...
ID = 26
Hello, cutie! Sorry, I don't know your name, but, if you're after my honey, I

won't give him up without a fight! Unless you are willing to give me something even better in exchange?
ID = 10
I'm not here about <player>. I just wanted to let you know...
ID = 26
That you like me? Well, cutie, I like you too. Mu ah!
ID = 10
UNFRIENDLY
...that I have reason to believe that you are behind the peculiar events that

have been happening of late.
ID = 0
Is something wrong with you?! She just kissed you, and much more passionately

then she did me, and you didn't even stop your sentence!?
ID = 26
"Peculiar happenings"? I don't know what you're talking about, cutie!
ID = 10
The incidents the teachers are calling pranks.
ID = 0
You might get a better response calling them experiments.
ID = 26
Awe cutie please tell me you aren't working for the man we could get along so much better if you aren't.
ID = 10
I'm not working for anyone I just want the school to return to a peaceful state.
ID = 26
I'm a pretty good cook what do you say we meet up after school i'll cook you dinner, stare into your eyes while you tell me all about these "happenings"?
ID = 0
You never offered to cook me a meal.
ID = 10
I think that would be ill advised considering that I know you are the one responsible for these so acts of complete fullishness.
ID = 26
I haven't done anything that warrents the attention of such a cutie but I do hope to see more of you, though!
ERASE RIGHT
ID = 10
Interesting. There is enough evidence to support the possibility that she is

the one involved in these... pranks. However, there was no indication of guilt

in her speech pattern.
ID = 0
Maybe she is telling the truth after all? No one has seen her at the scene where the pranks were committed.
D = 10
Greetings, <player>. I take it you observed that exchange?
ID = 0
Yeah, I was here the entire time.
ID = 10
I see. Forgive me, if I seemed to ignore you. Were there any other observations you with to share at this time?
ID = 0
Other than the fact that she seems to be chaos incarnate? No, not really.
ID = 10
NEUTRAL
Are you saying she's Eris?
# Reference to the Greek Goddess of Discord. Ever heard of the Judgment of Paris? The Trojan War? The Trojan Horse, perhaps? Well, she had a small hand in that!
ID = 0
Huh?
ID = 10
OTHER1
Never mind.
NEUTRAL
At any rate, I think it would behoove you, <player>, to distance yourself from her.


Happy thanksgiving to all that celebrate it
Marrend
Guardian of the Description Thread
21781
I'm not done with Fran, but I'm kinda curious to see what the reaction is with how she's shaping up. I've tested her fairly recently, (WHAAAAAAT!?), and things are looking pretty good to me so far. Saying that, there were a few things that I edited in that were not play-tested, but I doubt that they are game-crashing problems. Constructive criticism and commentary are obviously more than welcome.

Anyway, pleasant dreams. Remember to play with Masako's content active and disable Clean Mode!


*Edit: Outside of those odd hard returns, I'm more or less okay with that story, triad.