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There are battles, weapons, party members, 80% of maps.
An airship to easily access everything.
Does anyone want to test the game?
There are battles, weapons, party members, 80% of maps.
An airship to easily access everything.
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Knightfall: Death and Taxes, Puzzle RPG for PC and iPhone
Revamped dialog that can choke a horse
The party is the player's to make and it can change at any time. So with your choice of 13 people, conversations can become tedious on my part.
Revamped dialog that can choke a horse
Revamped dialog that can choke a horse
You can check out the 20 or 30 screen shots :-) I'm sure it fits.
In reality though, I should probably just give up and map make for some other RPG Maker VX project and let someone else worry about the dialog.
In reality though, I should probably just give up and map make for some other RPG Maker VX project and let someone else worry about the dialog.
Revamped dialog that can choke a horse
ok so I've written a few things for the story. Read it if you dare. If it sucks, let me know. Hit me with every cinder block you've got. Better I know now that it sucks than later. Hopefully its not too laughable.
INTRO
Quinn:
I get up in the morning just after the rooster crows. No matter how late she keeps me up, I always manage to wake up and stay awake around the same time each and every day. She however, manages to slumber even with the rooster right outside the window of our room at the inn. This is a bigger town than we're used to and the inn didn't have any double beds, only double rooms.
When I left the room, she had her pillow covering her head and not much else covering the rest of her. Its always so nice to have a blonde friend that is so oblivious to her body. Instead of watching her, I decided to stroll through the town to see it in the daytime and let her sleep in.
Incase you couldn't tell her name is ???, and she lights up my day like a house on fire. One day she'll burn me to the ground, but in the meantime, I'll just enjoy the warmth being in her life.
WAKE UP
Haroyn:
Quinn? What's that smell? It smells like sweet perfume and you know I don't wear that stuff. Quinn? Where are you silly boy? Great. Just like a guy, when the sun comes up, you're gone. At least you paid for the room. How am I going to get home now?
Quinn? I hope you didn't buy me perfume! *sniff* Where is that smell coming from?
Is that a letter over there on his bed? Hmm... It couldn't hurt to go over there and look.
FIND LETTER
Uh it wrecks of some tart! Quinn who have you been practicing your magic on? This envelope looks expensive, its white with gold trim and sealed with a stamp of red candle wax.
READ LETTER
Letter:
Hey beautiful. I saw you here in town, and I need to talk with you pretty bad. Why don't you ditch whoever it is you're with and come meet me tonight. There is a cabin outside of town at Forgemane pond. Meet me there at midnight and please come alone.
<Quinn bursts in>
Quinn:
You're up? I thought you'd stay in bed until the stars came out.
Haroyn:
Hey the stars come out, because I get up. That's just how it works.
Quinn:
So how did you sleep last night?
Haroyn:
Mmmm. In a bed far away from home, it should have been wonderful, I kept having a nightmare that I was getting attacked by a black raven. It was so strange. I thought it came in right through a window and was pecking at me in bed.
Quinn:
Yeah that wasn't a dream, where do you think I got breakfast from. I killed it and cooked it up myself!
Haroyn:
Yeah I'm sure you really did. Even with my nightmare, this was such a good idea that you had. I've had a lot of fun on this trip. One last adventure like old times before you go away.
Quinn:
Here, I found us some breakfast downstairs.
Haroyn:
There better be a dead bird on that plate.
Quinn:
Close. Just eggs. Hey are you wearing perfume?
CHOICE
- Yes
Haroyn:
Yes I am.
Quinn:
It smells really nice. You must have gotten it from your mother.
- I found this letter
Haroyn:
Hey I found this letter over there on your bed.
Quinn:
Really? I don't remember anything being over there when I woke up.
Haroyn:
Well its there now, and someone wants to meet me alone tonight at midnight at some cabin.
Quinn:
Are you serious?
Haroyn:
Here have a look.
Quinn:
Oddly enough, this isn't the strangest thing that's ever happened to you. Do you ever get used to stuff like this happening?
Haroyn:
What? Stuff like this never happens to me.
Quinn:
Yeah it does, you're just oblivious to it, because it happens to you. Who sent it?
Haroyn:
There's no name.
Quinn:
Creepy! Maybe a previous guest left it just to mess with us or worse yet, maybe the innkeeper left it to mess with us!
Haroyn:
You left it didn't you?
Quinn:
Now why would I do a creepy thing like that?
Haroyn:
You've always been full of surprises. I've come to expect the unexpected from you. That's why I think you left it for me to find. It wasn't there when we went to sleep last night and you were gone when I found it.
Quinn:
Well the only way to find out who sent it is to go out to the pond.
Haroyn:
Yeah and I bet that I'll find you out there with a bottle of cheap wine and a smile.
Quinn:
Hey babe, its your call.
Haroyn:
I hate when you call me that.
Quinn:
She hates being called babe, because its a term of affection, not because it is focused on her looks. Besides that, if she really thought about it, she would realize that I mean the latter.
- Wonder about letter
SPLIT FROM FREDO
Haroyn:
I'm not going to that cabin.
Quinn:
You'll be fine. I hear its not that far to the pond. We can even go there and scope it out in the daytime together.
Haroyn:
Yeah you hear its not that far, because you've actually been there and rented it right?
Quinn:
It wasn't me that sent you that letter.
Haroyn:
Here, take this quill and write something on this napkin.
Quinn:
Sure thing, but why?
Haroyn:
I am going to see if your hand writing matches the letter.
Quinn:
There... does it match?
Haroyn:
No, but that doesn't mean that you're faking it now.
Quinn:
I keep telling you that I didn't send it.
FORGEMANE
Haroyn:
This place seems tranquil enough. There are clutterflies in the air. The pond is beautiful and look at those pretty flowers. The breeze feels good too, I might have to take in some time to go swimming and sunbathe. Its really romantic out there. The perfect place to forget about my troubles back home.
CABIN
Haroyn:
Well here I am. Alone... There is something strange about this place. Its like someone has been living here, but its clean, lush and full of life. Look at those flowers, they smell good. Quinn went through a lot of work and probably spared no expense to rent this place. It really was a sweet idea of Quinn to take me out here, but he should know after all of these years that I just don't feel that way for him. Maybe I will reiterate that to him tonight if he tries anything.
<waits>
Haroyn:
Well its long past midnight. He's not coming. Why is this a let down? I mean, I don't care about him in that way, but still its nice that he tried. Why would he perfume a love letter anyway? He's a man. Well not much of one, he tends to take the feminine role in the relationship anyway. He always cooks and well writes romantic poetry. It was stupid for me to come out here. There's probably some kids outside snickering at me right now. This letter was probably meant for him and yet I'm the one that fell for it. I'm sure the perfume will burn this letter quicker when I throw it in the fire. Goodbye you prissy piece of paper.
<enter krys>
Krys:
Calls out a name... <rename Agra>
Its me Krys! I'm sorry to make you wait, but I couldn't take the chance that you had been followed here.
Haroyn:
What? Who the heck are you?
Krys:
Oh my! You're not Agra! Wait, you look just like her though.
Haroyn:
Sorry, I'm not her and I think I'm gonna leave. This was just a big mistake. I thought my friend sent that letter and I was gonna come and find him with a smile and a red robe.
Krys:
Wait, you two look so similar, you could be sisters.
Haroyn:
Don't come near me. I mean it. Get away. I'm sorry, but I'm not who you think I am.
Krys:
You can't tell anyone about me, that I'm out here. Please.
Haroyn:
What? That you lure women here to this quaint little paradise?
Krys:
You don't understand.
Haroyn:
No, clearly I don't, but hey, I wasn't even here.
Krys:
I'm hiding out...
Haroyn:
Wait, that's too much information, please stop. Why did I ever come out here? I was so stupid.
<enter mercs>
Merc 1:
My dear Krys. Heh.
Krys:
Oh damn.
Haroyn:
I'm just on my way out, so you guys can...
Merc 1:
Shut up wench. Now Krys, give us the crystal and we will be on our way.
Krys:
...
Haroyn:
Well? Give them the crystal!
Krys:
I don't have it.
Merc 2:
Liar!
Merc 1:
Quiet Merc 2. Even if she doesn't have it, she is going to tell us where it is. Aren't you Krys?
Krys:
I threw it away.
Haroyn:
Look, I'm leaving.
Merc 3:
Sorry my lady, but we can't allow that.
Merc 1:
You see Krys stole something from our master. By our master I mean ours and hers. She is nothing more than a common thief that used her... feminine persuasion to steal something from him.
Krys:
You're damn right I stole it from Magesto! He's a sick madman.
Merc 1:
But he is our master. Never forget that! Luckily Merc 2 here found this delicate flower good enough to stalk today or else we would have never found this secluded little cabin. Originally I told him to stow his lustful thoughts of her and stick to the mission. However, it proved fruitful. Ransack this place and find the crystal!
Merc 2:
Sure thing boss.
Merc 1:
So ladies. What brings the two of you to this secluded little cabin this late at night? I find it very interesting that the two of you would be out here alone. Perhaps your new friend knows where the crystal is.
Haroyn:
...
Krys:
We just met.
Merc 1:
It didn't sound like you just met when we were listening in on your conversation. It sounded like she knew you young Agra.
Haroyn:
My name isn't Agra.
Merc 1:
That's understandable, I hear that sort of thing is called role playing.
Merc 3:
Its not here boss.
Merc 1:
Where did you hide it Krys? Tell me.
Krys:
You'll never find it!
Merc 3:
Do you know where it is?
Haroyn:
No.
Merc 1:
Somehow little flower, I believe you when you say it so convincingly. Krys however, I've learned to never trust her. Magesto should have killed you a long time ago. Now tell us where you hid the crystal or we kill her.
Haroyn:
What?
Merc 1:
Tell us know or she dies. Merc 2, draw your sword and impale her!
Krys:
What's one life compared to the millions that Magesto will end if he gets the crystal?
Merc 1:
You will see her die in front of your eyes and until we get the crystal back, we will make you suffer. Finally, we will reach someone that you care enough about that you will give us the crystal! Now Merc 2 kill her!
Merc 2:
Really?
Merc 1:
I saw how you looked at her as we entered the room. You have been alone with her all day in your mind. Your eyes traced the contours of her skin as you stood beside me silent. Your lips were parted as if you were frozen there. You have stalked her all day long and you're well aware that she could never love someone like you and even if you were with her, that would soon infuriate you. Now draw your sword.
Merc 2:
Yes Sir.
Haroyn:
Don't do this.
Merc 3:
Tell us where it is Krys!
Haroyn:
Please!
Merc 2:
He's right. A woman like you is oblivious to men like me. Its like you're in a spotlight and men like me will always be in the shadows admiring you. You're just another girl too stuck on herself to realize it.
Krys:
Wait! I'll tell you.
Merc 1:
I'm waiting.
Krys:
Let her go. She has nothing to do with this.
Merc 1:
I would, but it seems like Merc 2 has made up his mind, and even if I let her go, he wouldn't.
Merc 2:
I will drink her blood when I spill it.
Merc 1:
You will fetch the crystal me the crystal like a good dog. Your new friend will stay here, until you return with it. Is that understood?
Krys:
Yes.
Merc 1:
And to make sure that you find the crystal, myself and Merc 3 will accompany you to get it. Just like old times when we used to go questing for the old man. Do you remember those days?
Merc 3:
I sure do, we used to save your bony ass from legglies.
Merc 1:
Merc 2 will stay here in this cabin with young... what was your name?
Haroyn:
Fuck off.
Merc 1:
How eloquent. I'm sure you were an orc in a past life.
Krys:
In my past life, I was a lot of things. A slave sold from master to master, until I became the consort mistress to a madman. He trained me to mix potions and to make salves from plants. All while taking his abuse and punishment for not being the perfect little helper that he wanted. My face had to be hidden under a cowl he hit me so bad. Everyone knew it, but no one questioned it, not even his wife or children. I was just a slave lucky to be under his tootalige.
CHOICE
- Run away and escape
- Do as he says
INTRO
Quinn:
I get up in the morning just after the rooster crows. No matter how late she keeps me up, I always manage to wake up and stay awake around the same time each and every day. She however, manages to slumber even with the rooster right outside the window of our room at the inn. This is a bigger town than we're used to and the inn didn't have any double beds, only double rooms.
When I left the room, she had her pillow covering her head and not much else covering the rest of her. Its always so nice to have a blonde friend that is so oblivious to her body. Instead of watching her, I decided to stroll through the town to see it in the daytime and let her sleep in.
Incase you couldn't tell her name is ???, and she lights up my day like a house on fire. One day she'll burn me to the ground, but in the meantime, I'll just enjoy the warmth being in her life.
WAKE UP
Haroyn:
Quinn? What's that smell? It smells like sweet perfume and you know I don't wear that stuff. Quinn? Where are you silly boy? Great. Just like a guy, when the sun comes up, you're gone. At least you paid for the room. How am I going to get home now?
Quinn? I hope you didn't buy me perfume! *sniff* Where is that smell coming from?
Is that a letter over there on his bed? Hmm... It couldn't hurt to go over there and look.
FIND LETTER
Uh it wrecks of some tart! Quinn who have you been practicing your magic on? This envelope looks expensive, its white with gold trim and sealed with a stamp of red candle wax.
READ LETTER
Letter:
Hey beautiful. I saw you here in town, and I need to talk with you pretty bad. Why don't you ditch whoever it is you're with and come meet me tonight. There is a cabin outside of town at Forgemane pond. Meet me there at midnight and please come alone.
<Quinn bursts in>
Quinn:
You're up? I thought you'd stay in bed until the stars came out.
Haroyn:
Hey the stars come out, because I get up. That's just how it works.
Quinn:
So how did you sleep last night?
Haroyn:
Mmmm. In a bed far away from home, it should have been wonderful, I kept having a nightmare that I was getting attacked by a black raven. It was so strange. I thought it came in right through a window and was pecking at me in bed.
Quinn:
Yeah that wasn't a dream, where do you think I got breakfast from. I killed it and cooked it up myself!
Haroyn:
Yeah I'm sure you really did. Even with my nightmare, this was such a good idea that you had. I've had a lot of fun on this trip. One last adventure like old times before you go away.
Quinn:
Here, I found us some breakfast downstairs.
Haroyn:
There better be a dead bird on that plate.
Quinn:
Close. Just eggs. Hey are you wearing perfume?
CHOICE
- Yes
Haroyn:
Yes I am.
Quinn:
It smells really nice. You must have gotten it from your mother.
- I found this letter
Haroyn:
Hey I found this letter over there on your bed.
Quinn:
Really? I don't remember anything being over there when I woke up.
Haroyn:
Well its there now, and someone wants to meet me alone tonight at midnight at some cabin.
Quinn:
Are you serious?
Haroyn:
Here have a look.
Quinn:
Oddly enough, this isn't the strangest thing that's ever happened to you. Do you ever get used to stuff like this happening?
Haroyn:
What? Stuff like this never happens to me.
Quinn:
Yeah it does, you're just oblivious to it, because it happens to you. Who sent it?
Haroyn:
There's no name.
Quinn:
Creepy! Maybe a previous guest left it just to mess with us or worse yet, maybe the innkeeper left it to mess with us!
Haroyn:
You left it didn't you?
Quinn:
Now why would I do a creepy thing like that?
Haroyn:
You've always been full of surprises. I've come to expect the unexpected from you. That's why I think you left it for me to find. It wasn't there when we went to sleep last night and you were gone when I found it.
Quinn:
Well the only way to find out who sent it is to go out to the pond.
Haroyn:
Yeah and I bet that I'll find you out there with a bottle of cheap wine and a smile.
Quinn:
Hey babe, its your call.
Haroyn:
I hate when you call me that.
Quinn:
She hates being called babe, because its a term of affection, not because it is focused on her looks. Besides that, if she really thought about it, she would realize that I mean the latter.
- Wonder about letter
SPLIT FROM FREDO
Haroyn:
I'm not going to that cabin.
Quinn:
You'll be fine. I hear its not that far to the pond. We can even go there and scope it out in the daytime together.
Haroyn:
Yeah you hear its not that far, because you've actually been there and rented it right?
Quinn:
It wasn't me that sent you that letter.
Haroyn:
Here, take this quill and write something on this napkin.
Quinn:
Sure thing, but why?
Haroyn:
I am going to see if your hand writing matches the letter.
Quinn:
There... does it match?
Haroyn:
No, but that doesn't mean that you're faking it now.
Quinn:
I keep telling you that I didn't send it.
FORGEMANE
Haroyn:
This place seems tranquil enough. There are clutterflies in the air. The pond is beautiful and look at those pretty flowers. The breeze feels good too, I might have to take in some time to go swimming and sunbathe. Its really romantic out there. The perfect place to forget about my troubles back home.
CABIN
Haroyn:
Well here I am. Alone... There is something strange about this place. Its like someone has been living here, but its clean, lush and full of life. Look at those flowers, they smell good. Quinn went through a lot of work and probably spared no expense to rent this place. It really was a sweet idea of Quinn to take me out here, but he should know after all of these years that I just don't feel that way for him. Maybe I will reiterate that to him tonight if he tries anything.
<waits>
Haroyn:
Well its long past midnight. He's not coming. Why is this a let down? I mean, I don't care about him in that way, but still its nice that he tried. Why would he perfume a love letter anyway? He's a man. Well not much of one, he tends to take the feminine role in the relationship anyway. He always cooks and well writes romantic poetry. It was stupid for me to come out here. There's probably some kids outside snickering at me right now. This letter was probably meant for him and yet I'm the one that fell for it. I'm sure the perfume will burn this letter quicker when I throw it in the fire. Goodbye you prissy piece of paper.
<enter krys>
Krys:
Calls out a name... <rename Agra>
Its me Krys! I'm sorry to make you wait, but I couldn't take the chance that you had been followed here.
Haroyn:
What? Who the heck are you?
Krys:
Oh my! You're not Agra! Wait, you look just like her though.
Haroyn:
Sorry, I'm not her and I think I'm gonna leave. This was just a big mistake. I thought my friend sent that letter and I was gonna come and find him with a smile and a red robe.
Krys:
Wait, you two look so similar, you could be sisters.
Haroyn:
Don't come near me. I mean it. Get away. I'm sorry, but I'm not who you think I am.
Krys:
You can't tell anyone about me, that I'm out here. Please.
Haroyn:
What? That you lure women here to this quaint little paradise?
Krys:
You don't understand.
Haroyn:
No, clearly I don't, but hey, I wasn't even here.
Krys:
I'm hiding out...
Haroyn:
Wait, that's too much information, please stop. Why did I ever come out here? I was so stupid.
<enter mercs>
Merc 1:
My dear Krys. Heh.
Krys:
Oh damn.
Haroyn:
I'm just on my way out, so you guys can...
Merc 1:
Shut up wench. Now Krys, give us the crystal and we will be on our way.
Krys:
...
Haroyn:
Well? Give them the crystal!
Krys:
I don't have it.
Merc 2:
Liar!
Merc 1:
Quiet Merc 2. Even if she doesn't have it, she is going to tell us where it is. Aren't you Krys?
Krys:
I threw it away.
Haroyn:
Look, I'm leaving.
Merc 3:
Sorry my lady, but we can't allow that.
Merc 1:
You see Krys stole something from our master. By our master I mean ours and hers. She is nothing more than a common thief that used her... feminine persuasion to steal something from him.
Krys:
You're damn right I stole it from Magesto! He's a sick madman.
Merc 1:
But he is our master. Never forget that! Luckily Merc 2 here found this delicate flower good enough to stalk today or else we would have never found this secluded little cabin. Originally I told him to stow his lustful thoughts of her and stick to the mission. However, it proved fruitful. Ransack this place and find the crystal!
Merc 2:
Sure thing boss.
Merc 1:
So ladies. What brings the two of you to this secluded little cabin this late at night? I find it very interesting that the two of you would be out here alone. Perhaps your new friend knows where the crystal is.
Haroyn:
...
Krys:
We just met.
Merc 1:
It didn't sound like you just met when we were listening in on your conversation. It sounded like she knew you young Agra.
Haroyn:
My name isn't Agra.
Merc 1:
That's understandable, I hear that sort of thing is called role playing.
Merc 3:
Its not here boss.
Merc 1:
Where did you hide it Krys? Tell me.
Krys:
You'll never find it!
Merc 3:
Do you know where it is?
Haroyn:
No.
Merc 1:
Somehow little flower, I believe you when you say it so convincingly. Krys however, I've learned to never trust her. Magesto should have killed you a long time ago. Now tell us where you hid the crystal or we kill her.
Haroyn:
What?
Merc 1:
Tell us know or she dies. Merc 2, draw your sword and impale her!
Krys:
What's one life compared to the millions that Magesto will end if he gets the crystal?
Merc 1:
You will see her die in front of your eyes and until we get the crystal back, we will make you suffer. Finally, we will reach someone that you care enough about that you will give us the crystal! Now Merc 2 kill her!
Merc 2:
Really?
Merc 1:
I saw how you looked at her as we entered the room. You have been alone with her all day in your mind. Your eyes traced the contours of her skin as you stood beside me silent. Your lips were parted as if you were frozen there. You have stalked her all day long and you're well aware that she could never love someone like you and even if you were with her, that would soon infuriate you. Now draw your sword.
Merc 2:
Yes Sir.
Haroyn:
Don't do this.
Merc 3:
Tell us where it is Krys!
Haroyn:
Please!
Merc 2:
He's right. A woman like you is oblivious to men like me. Its like you're in a spotlight and men like me will always be in the shadows admiring you. You're just another girl too stuck on herself to realize it.
Krys:
Wait! I'll tell you.
Merc 1:
I'm waiting.
Krys:
Let her go. She has nothing to do with this.
Merc 1:
I would, but it seems like Merc 2 has made up his mind, and even if I let her go, he wouldn't.
Merc 2:
I will drink her blood when I spill it.
Merc 1:
You will fetch the crystal me the crystal like a good dog. Your new friend will stay here, until you return with it. Is that understood?
Krys:
Yes.
Merc 1:
And to make sure that you find the crystal, myself and Merc 3 will accompany you to get it. Just like old times when we used to go questing for the old man. Do you remember those days?
Merc 3:
I sure do, we used to save your bony ass from legglies.
Merc 1:
Merc 2 will stay here in this cabin with young... what was your name?
Haroyn:
Fuck off.
Merc 1:
How eloquent. I'm sure you were an orc in a past life.
Krys:
In my past life, I was a lot of things. A slave sold from master to master, until I became the consort mistress to a madman. He trained me to mix potions and to make salves from plants. All while taking his abuse and punishment for not being the perfect little helper that he wanted. My face had to be hidden under a cowl he hit me so bad. Everyone knew it, but no one questioned it, not even his wife or children. I was just a slave lucky to be under his tootalige.
CHOICE
- Run away and escape
- Do as he says
Revamped dialog that can choke a horse
What I was hearing...
My conversations suck.
Now I hear.
My conversations suck in a different way.
Am I right? Actually if it was really up to me, I'd have very minimal and conscise conversations, like Dragon Quest. However, people give grades for stories and dialog, when quite honestly, I'd just rather play the fucking game and not have to sit through 30 minutes of dialog.
Its a game, not a novel.
Then I go on the forums and apparently it should have good dialog even if its not a novel. However, wordy dialog isn't good. So I'm damned if I do, damned if I dont and I should just go with my 1st sucky dialog, because at least people won't get bored of reading a paragraph when they can read a sentence.
My conversations suck.
Now I hear.
My conversations suck in a different way.
Am I right? Actually if it was really up to me, I'd have very minimal and conscise conversations, like Dragon Quest. However, people give grades for stories and dialog, when quite honestly, I'd just rather play the fucking game and not have to sit through 30 minutes of dialog.
Its a game, not a novel.
Then I go on the forums and apparently it should have good dialog even if its not a novel. However, wordy dialog isn't good. So I'm damned if I do, damned if I dont and I should just go with my 1st sucky dialog, because at least people won't get bored of reading a paragraph when they can read a sentence.














