EDCHUY'S PROFILE

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Looking much better. Just one thing - in the shop map, don't forget the wall autotile above the walls to either side of the counter. ^.^

Yeah, I agree with Liberty. The paintings seem to be barely hanging from the wall. One question: can you actually walk behind the wooden cabinet? If not, there shouldn't be a painting in the wall behind it. You can, in that case, keep the painting, but the cabinet would need to be moved elsewhere or disappear the painting altogether.

I personally do like to see narrow rooms if they aren't be filled with too many objects.

Your recommendations make sense, Liberty. I can't believe I overlooked the tree and bushes (I think) under it in the first screenshot.

About the fourth screenshot, I just noticed there's this square of flattened rocks near the top center of the screen that seems to be out of place (at least don't fit with the other rocks you show). Good luck on finally being able to get this accepted!

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My paragraph:
One fateful day four innocent boys ,Brandon; Hayden; Darion; and Casey, are pulled into the magical world of Mandra. That fateful day an evil bonewalker teleported to the world Earth and took the Brandon, Hayden, and Casey. He forced them into the world of Mandra where they are forced to fight their way home. Eventually Darion gets called on from an angel to go help save them. With no hope and a large world ahead of them. Will they ever make it home? Find out with the beggining in this demo. With two unique scripts one to allow you to click where you want to walk and the other to name the map name as you progress through the world.

This is what I recommend in terms of editing what you already wrote:

Seems to me you repeated your characters' names twice. Mention them only once by exchanging Darion's and Casey's order. After that you can mention the circumstances that lead them there: i.e. the first three ... and the last one was called upon by ... The With no hope sentence seems to be more related to the first three, so mention it when mentioning them. Perhaps the sentence following the one just mentioned, first ask whether Darion will find the others and then mention returning home. The next sentence could say: Start finding out the answers to these questions in this demo. The two other sentences would go separately, perhaps under a Features heading each script with a bullet. The other thing that I notice is you have punctuation issues. You don't need to use ";", use ",". Also, make sure that whatever you write are complete sentences.

About the screenshots, the only thing that immediately caught my eye was the large dark rectangle in the middle of the first one. Perhaps others can give you a better insight.

Double post!

You're welcome, cm. It takes a special breed of gameplayer to WANT to play your games. Perhaps I can get to play them all, eventually.

So let's see I counted the completed games for those you mentioned: kentona shows 9 (4 Befuddle Quests included), Craze 7 (2 Befuddle Quests included and a couple of collaborations) and Max McGee 5. At least, in terms of single developer complete games you come up on top. Obviously, this an apples to oranges comparison, but noteworthy nevertheless.

And Max, don't worry: there seem to be some people who don't get some of yours either.