SELLOUT'S PROFILE

Jesus why couldn't I make my mountains look like this?

Looks mammoth! I'm sure this looks better playing. Where are the torches?

I call #11. What do you mean by scepter though? Like in a treasure or at the tip top of the lighthouse like a lightning rod???

I flippin' love this idea! the previous poster is 100% right. I'm no good at story, but I love mapping and i'm great at it. I took a look at the scripts and the new ones are over my head at least for the first glance. So when I have it, I'm sticking to maps :-)

author=Abite link=topic=2766.msg58545#msg58545 date=1233014552
First of all, thanks for the brevity!

I really like this idea! Nonlinear games are always more fun imo. If I had to pick something to add, I'd say more characters? I assume there are more, but more prominent ones would be cool. I know you were only listing a very short version, but if there aren't more interesting characters, I' suggest adding some!

Have you worked on this at all? Also, I'm curious what setting this would take place in. Medeival would be cool, but I think a tribal, first-people-on-earth-type or bohemianish world would be even better and moer original!

(Sorry if you mentioned that already, I only skimmed your last post!)

I've worked on this quite a lot, alpha testers have thrown their 2 cents in and its been really good for streamlining the game. Originally my game was like a comic, where you would have 1 scene with 2 characters, another scene with 2 characters, then another scene with the first 2 characters.

This is midieval, just because that is the default RTP :-)

There are loads of interesting side characters to give the world some color. Even colorful characters that have nothing to do with the story or plot. Sort of like a news report has nothing to do with your life.

There are 12 playable characters as it is now.

TUPAUL DAVIS
- Gender: Male
- Hair: Blonde
- Age: 21
- Family: Charm = Adopted Brother / Taryn = Sister / King = Father

King Sommers was forced to give away his only child Tupaul at the threat of his rival Lord Hagger. Tupaul was given up to the orphanage in Adica where eventually he was adopted by the Daviss. A couple that couldn't have children at the time. Later they had a child named Charm and the two would become rivals.

He has a strange loyalty to his kingdom and country unknown to him, but it is because his father is the king. He also feels a loyalty to Cylanda Ferni, a nun that maintains the local orphanage in his hometown. That is why he chooses to accompany Cylanda Ferni on her pilgrimage to the shrine of hope.

After having an affair with Nathan Stone's wife Niki, Tupaul may be the real father of Nathan's daughter Tasha.


CHARM DAVIS
- Gender: Male
- Hair: Blonde
- Age: 15
- Family: Tupaul = Adopted Brother

Charm is the only child to have been born by the Davis couple after their adoption of Tupaul. He receives better treatment from his parents for being the baby but squanders it. He really receives the attention from his parents for being their real child.

Charm squanders the attention of his parents and achieves negative attention by becoming a thief and hanging out with the wrong crowd. Meanwhile, his brother Tupaul achieves positive attention from the community while getting ignored by his parents.

Upon the discovery that Prince Taryn is really a female disguised as a male, he falls in love with her and ends up a target of her love, a soldier named Ken Worthington. Ken and Charm fight and flirt for the affections of Taryn.

Once Charm is rejected by Taryn, he turns to Cylanda Ferni for his affections to make the princess jealous. He ultimately succeeds, but not before Cylanda has fallen in love with him too.


NATHAN STONE
- Gender: Male
- Hair: Red
- Age: 35
- Family: Niki = Wife / Tasha = Daughter / Steven = Son

The appointed protector of Santica Village, put there by the mayor himself, as Nathan is by far the largest man in the village. His duties have taken him throughout the kingdom to places many have never seen before.

On one of those trips, his wife Niki Stone had an affair with his friend and comrade Tupaul. As a result, Nathan's daughter Tasha, may not be his daughter after all.

Nathan is one of the few people in the world that can morph to another creature. With Nathan's height he can only morph into a giant lizard creature that can destroy most anything. However, after he returns from a morph, he faints and it leaves him vulnerable to attacks. He prefers to hide the fact that he can transform into a megasaurus, because he prefers being known as the one man that can defeat anyone.


CYLANDA FERNI
- Gender: Female
- Hair: Blonde
- Age: 20

The nun Cylanda Ferni has owned and operated the orphanage in Adica ever since inheriting it from her mother. She is well respected and loved in the community for her kindness and beauty. Because of this beauty, she has become a nun so that she may always remain humble and not allow it to go to her head.

Working in the orphanage, she grew up with a boy named Tupaul. The two had a childhood romance together, until their mother caught them and she was scolded into a life of serving God and the church.

Cylanda becomes the object of Charm's affection once he is rejected by Princess Taryn. Cylanda refuses and denies her feelings for Charm because of their age difference, but eventually she crumbles and questions her beliefs.


BANDARRO WILLIAMS
- Gender: Male
- Hair: Reddish Brown
- Age: 32

A father figure to young Charm, Bandarro is the leader of the thieves in Adica. He has traveled throughout the world avoiding the law, but he will finally get caught by the blades of the men that he trusts to find the Pitcher of Rain.


PENDLETON MACKY
- Gender: Male
- Hair: Brown
- Age: 35

A traveling merchant that has come from across the world in order to sell the Pitcher of Rain after hearing the story from a miser. He is trying to sell the pitcher for an overly expensive price to recuperate some of his losses, but ends up getting killed for it in the process.


PRINCESS TARYN SOMMERS
- Gender: Female posing as male
- Hair: Blonde
- Age: 16
- Family: Tupaul = Brother / Charm = Half Brother / King = Father

A butch princess, brought up from a child as a prince to replace her father one day. She was the second born to the royal family after the immediate danger from Lord Hagger and Hammerdale subsided.


KEN WORTHINGTON
- Gender: Male
- Hair: Blonde
- Age: 21

A brave soldier sent to rescue Prince Taryn. Ken is one of the few people that knows that Princess Taryn is really a female disguised as a male. He has a secret forbidden love with the princess unknown to everyone but them.


KIPP CRISTOPHER
- Gender: Male
- Hair: Blonde
- Age: 20

No one would understand the feelings that Kipp had for Thomas. Because of that, he carries the burden of a secret love affair. If they were to admit their love, they would both be executed.


THOMAS MANDSY
- Gender: Male
- Hair: Blonde
- Age: 19
Thomas questions the legion that would force him to keep his love for Kipp in secret. His heart is not in his duty; instead it is for the love of Kipp Cristopher.


DANIEL “DICE” NOLAN
- Gender: Male
- Hair: Blue
- Age: 21

A mercenary hired to bring back the Pitcher of Rain, he takes a particular interest in Nathan Stone, because he is the biggest in the party. Dice seeks to add Stone's death in particular as a trophy.

Dice is secretly gay and is very sympathetic to the relationship that Kipp Cristopher and Thomas Mansy share together. He secretly wishes that he could have what they do.


KAIN
- Gender: Male
- Hair: Blue
- Age: 24

An agent hired to bring back the Pitcher of Rain, Kain falls in love with Princess Taryn once he discovers that she is indeed a woman. He begins an unhealthy obsession for her and secretly stalks her.


SHANE GOLDEN
- Gender: Male
- Hair: Blue
- Age: 21

The third hired mercenary, Shane Golden suffers from constant migraines because he can hear his dead Siamese twin brother talking to him. The talking is constant and Golden struggles to tune out the other voice.

author=mellytan link=topic=2766.msg58997#msg58997 date=1233194631
Sorry I'm a little late, but I think you've got a good start. Especially for an RM game, it's fairly original, though I thought "FFX!" when I saw "heavily religious world," "escort," and "pilgrimage," heh. Overall, I think it has a lot of potential, though to echo WIP, implementation may be key. I like the bit about the rain, or lack thereof; sounds like some kind of ancient story (if that makes any sense). I mean, it's not mind-blowingly original, but it's an interesting premise and I like :)

I would just recommend that, in case you haven't already, you should make sure you know exactly what your characters' motivations are, and then make sure their actions are manifestations of those motivations. :) Good luck and keep working hard!

I've never played FFX. I've only played FF1 FF2(SNES) FF3(SNES) FFVII and that's it.

I sure hope that's not the plot. Oh well. This isn't a fan game. If anything, I just thought of Lord of the Rings when I was writing this.

About the characters, in all stories I do, they each have different motivations, that way it keeps it interesting. Thanks for reading :-)