RHUAN'S PROFILE

author=RougeSkyes

In the forest, there is a little town with a few villagers in it. Their main trades are hunting and fishing. Genta and his parents were three of these villagers. On a hunting excursion, a terrible accident occurred: Genta's parents died, and Genta himself was badly wounded. Luckily, they were near the town. The townsfolk could hear the screams, and came to rescue. Genta lost his memories that day. They say it was a combination of the trauma of loosing his parents and the trauma of his wounds. When he recovered in vigor more fully, he decides to travel, maybe to recover some of those lost memories. Along the way, he finds friends with their own specialties. He also encounters an opponent; someone that will stop at nothing to keep Genta from his goal. Genta swears he saw this person once before. Was it during the hunting incident? Yes, the memory seems to surface. He was there, attacked them, and was ultimately responsible for his parent's death and his wounds. The question remains: why?

In the forest, there is a little town with a few villagers in it. Their main trades are hunting and fishing. Genta and his parents were three of these villagers. On a hunting excursion, a terrible accident occurred: Genta's parents died, and Genta himself was badly wounded. Luckily, they were near the town. The townsfolk could hear the screams, and came to rescue. Genta lost his memories that day. They say it was a combination of the trauma of loosing his parents and the trauma of his wounds.

When he recovered in vigor more fully, he decides to travel, maybe to recover some of those lost memories. Along the way, he finds friends with their own specialties. He also encounters an opponent; someone that will stop at nothing to keep Genta from his goal. Genta swears he saw this person once before. Was it during the hunting incident? Yes, the memory seems to surface. He was there, attacked them, and was ultimately responsible for his parent's death and his wounds. The question remains: why?

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thoughts on this revision in no particular order:
1. Villagers don't live in towns they live in villages - either make it a village or make the people townsmen/townsfolk - not villagers.

2. I'm not sure what "recovering in vigour more fully" is meant to mean - using a dictionary it implies that he had partially recovered then recovered a bit more but isn't fully recovered yet - is that what you mean? Either way it sounds weird - better to say things more simply.

3. "came to rescue" - is not a complete thought - "came to the rescue" works

4. "Genta himself was badly wounded" - the word "himself" isn't needed and adds nothing

5. "They say it was a combination of..." who says this?

6. "When he recovered" who? you've started a new paragraph should say "Genta" not "he"

7. "Genta swears he saw this person once before" you're mixing up present tense and past tense here - "Genta swore he had seen this person before" would be better

8. the word "ultimately" adds nothing - I'd remove it

9. If this villain is a serious threat - why did he run away when a few townsfolk showed up to rescue Genta? - either the townsfolk are all super tough or the villain is just a normal man BUT you've introduced allies with super powers - how will this work?

author=Marrend
It could be that the antagonist caused that hunting incident. We know this person wishes to stop Genta. Maybe this person even went so far as to make an attempt on Genta's life, but only managed to seriously (critically?) wound him? So, while one might be able to guess a "who", the "why" (which we do not know) can probably be discovered in-game and may be half the point of the game's story.

Yeah I got that on the second re-read following my re-write; it just felt initially jarring reading it (to be honest going on a journey to investigate a hunting accident didn't feel like it made much sense - unless you know it's not an accident).

I am working on my first ever AI code - and I'm programming the enemy to pick from available targets and go for whoever is on the lowest HP as a % of their max; certainly don't intend all enemies to pick that way just needed a starting point.

author=Desertopa
What sort of support are you looking for for your current project?

THanks for the reply and, oops I didn't realise quite how vague I'd been...

Primarily I'm looking for someone who'd like to share responsibility for the game and hopefully help wth aspects I'm not as good at.

The things that come to mind immediately are:
1. Mapping & Scenario Design - with an SRPG the combat maps need to work well with the combat mechanics and the battles planned for them; having someone else to flesh out combat scenarios and map them would be great.

2. Writing - I have a bare bones plot, if someone else could work on making this more detailed and/or actually work on a script that would be great.

3. Interface design/feedback - I can write script to display information to the player in almost any format - I don't rate my ability to determine what actually looks good when it comes to this sort of thing though.

4. Testing etc...

I'm not necessarily looking for someone else to do all of the above, they're all things I can do - though they're things I'm not as good at as I'd like to be. Additionally in general if I spend my time writing more of a script then I won't be building more advanced combat mechanics or other system I'd like the game to have - I figure if I work on this solo it will be a year before there's anything worth sharing beyond a tech demo if I have help that could be significantly reduced and the quality could be drastically improved.

Thanks for the suggestions - I haven't made any updates still thinking how to work in some of the ideas - had possibly been thinking in terms of finishing touches, now I feel like the map is maybe 20% done at best...

For now working on building more of my combat system instead.