HOUSEKEEPING'S PROFILE

Yeah, it's reading to me like a cliche story about race relations using beast people as a metaphor for otherized groups, and it's taking the easy way out of a potentially difficult problem by adding monsters as a common enemy that, when confronted, will cause no moral conflicts. You might end up spinning it in a different direction than that, though.

If you want this game to run off of it's story, the only way this would work is if your target demographic is fairly young. If you write this as a moral "we should all get along tale," that's something that would interest preteens, kids, and maybe some teens. If you're writing for adults, they've probably read/played/watched enough media about that theme that they'll be jaded and uninterested. Then again, Avatar was basically about the same thing, only with aliens instead of beast people and the military instead of monsters, and it sold like crazy, so what do I know.

When I was in college and still taking creative writing workshops, we would submit our stories to the class, return in a week, get in a circle, and critique each other's work. There weren't any hard rules on politeness, but social decency kept most people's comments constructive (though, when it's something you poured your heart into, even constructive criticisms can feel barbed). There was one rule for the author, though: shut up. You don't say a word when people are critiquing your work. After they've said their peace, you would then be able to ask some questions, clarify things, or justify things, but during the bulk of the discussion, you just shut up.

This accomplished two things: 1) It allowed the feedback to come naturally. If you interrupted the process, you would inadvertently be guiding the discussion into what you found important about your work instead of what others found important. It doesn't matter what your goal was--if the audience didn't pick up on that, you failed, and that's an important thing to note. 2) It forced you to listen, and listening is a skill that not enough people practice. If your audience doesn't like your work, then you're failing. Drop any feelings about how you might be making it for yourself, because it's a bullshit perspective. If your audience is unhappy, you either need to adapt your work so it's more palatable or find a different audience. Listen to what your audience says and use that as a barometer. For God's sake, don't just ignore everything like ShortStar said.

People are posting critiques after playing your game. You should be fucking grateful for every piece of feedback you get, because that means people took time out of their lives to play your game. We only get so long on this planet, so take a second to think of how sacred that time is. Yes, you're going to get uninformed opinions that you'll have to weed through, and, yes, you're putting yourself out there, and it makes you nervous and uncomfortable, but that just means that what you're doing is meaningful to you, so chase that feeling.

(I gave some criticisms on Luxaren Allure a while back, so I just wanted to say that this wasn't directed at you, Unity. You seem to take criticism really well, actually.)

author=Ratty524
Mint why did you get a sex change? You look like a boy to me.

Mint says: What is this dude talking about?

Yvette says: No clue, Brrrrother!

author=Jude
You guys are all so cool for rejecting the word "epic." Next I expect rants about how much Justin Bieber sucks.

Are you seriously being a hipster about hating things?

Glad you enjoyed it! Some of your questions are going to be hard to answer without some more information, but I'll do my best:



Here's a list of the rare crystal locations for those who are interested (I wouldn't look at this until after you've beaten the game--don't look if you don't want spoilers):


Here's Walker's locations: