FROGGE'S PROFILE

author=Marrend
To be able to view a Steam wishlist when you're not signed into Steam, I think you have to change the "Game Details" privacy setting to "Public". The "Friends Only" option would presume a user is logged into Steam's system to be able to recognize the friendship status.

OOOPS I did change my privacy settings recently so that'll be why!! Should be fixed now I hope??

author=pianotm
OKAY! So, Frogge's wishlist is actually empty. That explains that.

I have 3129 games on my wishlist, if there's one thing it's not, it's empty XD

yea this game’s pretty dope


Edit: its only missing jerry seinfeld from bee movie. Please hire him

You... pretty much removed the entire gameplay paragraph. Is there a reason you don't want to mention that you gather clues and talk to people? Because that's pretty much the most important thing to mention, as it sounds like that's what most of the gameplay is going to be.

Think of it like this - imagine that you're trying to sell the original Mario Brothers as a game to someone who has never seen a Mario game. You could say "You play as a plumber trying to rescue a princess from a turtle," but does that really tell you about what you do in the game?

Then compare that to this: "You play as a plumber trying to rescue a princess from a turtle. The game is a 2D platformer where you jump your way across 9 worlds. You defeat enemies by jumping on them, gather power-ups that help you in various ways, and search for secrets hidden throughout its various levels." Now you actually have an idea of how you as the player will interact with the game.

Perhaps some people will read that and go "oh, I don't like platformers, so I might not play this" but others will read it and go "oh, I love platformers, this is a game I should play!" But if you only tell people about the story, then how will they know that they'll enjoy playing through it?

At the very least, I would say don't make it any shorter than Marrend's version.

Notably there's nothing on what the actual gameplay is. The amount of chapters, endings, etc doesn't tell you anything about what you do.

Is there investigating? Do you talk to people and gather evidence? Is it more of a linear narrative game? Are there puzzles? Battles? Is the supernatural event that you mention in the story tied to the gameplay in any way?

Even something as basic as this would work:

Throughout the game, you will explore the (setting) and gather evidence to uncover the mystery. Some pieces of evidence will require you to solve small puzzles or perform quests to reveal them. There are no battles, but you may encounter a few deadly threats that you will need to learn how to avoid, get past, or defeat.

Or maybe it's something like this:

Most of the gameplay involves talking to people and gathering their alibis. You will use these alibis to piece together what really happened and solve the mystery.

Or even:

The game is largely linear. It mostly involves exploration and talking to people to move the story along. There aren't many puzzles or quests - it's more similar to an interactive visual novel.

As for the story paragraph, what you have already is fine if you just use Marrend's proofread version.

Darken submitted ;)